建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 질문에 직접 답한 후 이유를 명확하고 간결하게 제시하세요. 현재 답변은 반복적이고 비문이 있으며 문장 연결이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 예를 들어 ‘because the airport should take off’ 같은 표현은 의미가 불분명하므로 ‘due to airport safety restrictions’처럼 구체적인 이유를 사용하세요. 문장은 최대 3문장 이내로 유지하고, 연결어(for example, because, so)를 적절히 사용해 논리적으로 이어가세요.

範例: Not really. There aren’t any tall buildings near my home because the area is close to an international airport and safety rules limit building heights. As a result, most structures here are only a few stories high.

建議: 대답을 더 자연스럽게 다듬고 반복을 피하세요. 현재 ‘another other countries’ 같은 중복과 ‘like German or like Europe’의 혼동이 있습니다. 주제 문장으로 바로 답하고, 이유와 구체적 예시(몇 곳 또는 특정 건물)를 하나만 덧붙이세요. 연결어(so, because, for example)를 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 하세요.

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings when I travel because I find architectural details fascinating. For example, in Germany and other parts of Europe I usually take photos of historic facades and modern designs to remember the contrast.

建議: 질문을 잘못 이해한 듯 보이고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 직접적인 답(예: yes/no 또는 특정 건물명)을 먼저 말하고, 그 건물을 방문하고 싶은 이유를 구체적으로 하나 또는 두 개 제시하세요. 시제와 문장 구조(예: I used to visit → I visited)를 정확히 사용하세요.

範例: Yes. When I was younger I visited the tallest building in Korea and I would like to go again because the observation deck offers great views. I especially want to see the cityscape at sunset.

建議: 의사 표현은 명확하지만 문장 구조와 단어 선택을 다듬어야 합니다. ‘That really I want’ 같은 어순 오류와 ‘Treats like cherry tomatoes’의 어색한 표현을 고치세요. 먼저 간단히 선호를 말한 후, 이유(예: rooftop, garden, growing plants)와 구체적 예시를 연결어(and, because)로 설명하세요.

範例: No, I would prefer to live in a low-rise building because I want a private rooftop or small garden where I can grow plants. For example, I dream of growing cherry tomatoes and herbs on my rooftop.

× Not really. There is the International Airport so we don't have to build a tall building because the airport should take off.

✓ Not really. There is an international airport, so we don't have to build tall buildings near my home because planes take off there.

'There is' is correct but article use and noun form are wrong. Use 'an international airport' (indefinite article + lowercase common noun). 'Tall building' should be plural 'tall buildings' to match context. 'The airport should take off' is incorrect: airports do not take off; planes take off. Also combine sentences with a comma and clarify location. Suggestion: use 'an' before singular countable nouns when introducing them and ensure subject of 'take off' is 'planes'.

× So we don't have tall buildings near my home.

✓ So we don't have tall buildings near my home.

This sentence is actually grammatically correct; no third person singular verb error. It uses correct subject-verb agreement for the negative present 'do not have'. Keep as is.

× When I travel to another other countries like German or like Europe, there are many beautiful buildings and the design is very nice, so I usually take a photo of that.

✓ When I travel to other countries like Germany or elsewhere in Europe, there are many beautiful buildings with very nice designs, so I usually take photos of them.

Errors: 'another other countries' is ungrammatical—use 'other countries' or 'another country'. 'German' should be the country name 'Germany'. 'Like Europe' is vague; use 'in Europe' or 'elsewhere in Europe'. 'The design is very nice' should be plural 'designs' to match 'many buildings'. 'Take a photo of that' is singular and vague; use plural 'photos of them'. Suggestions: correct country names, use plural forms to match plural nouns, and use appropriate prepositions ('in Europe').

× In Korea there is use some building when I was young it is the highest building in Korea.

✓ In Korea there used to be a building I visited when I was young; it was the tallest building in Korea.

Problems: 'there is use some building' is ungrammatical. Likely intended 'there used to be a building' or 'I used to visit a building'. Use past tense 'used to' or 'was' because speaker refers to the past. 'Highest building in Korea' should be 'the tallest building in Korea' and requires the definite article 'the'. Also split into two clauses with proper tenses. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habitual situations and 'tallest' as comparative form with 'the'.

× So I like I used to be there because it's very nice and good to visit for my trip.

✓ I liked being there because it was very nice and a good place to visit on my trip.

Problems: 'So I like I used to be there' mixes present and past incorrectly. Use past tense 'liked' or 'I used to go there' and express 'being there' with gerund. 'It's very nice and good to visit for my trip' should be past 'it was very nice' and 'a good place to visit on my trip'. Suggestions: maintain consistent past tense, use gerund for experiences ('being there'), and use 'a good place to visit' for natural phrasing.

× That really I want to live in a low rise building so I want to have a rooftop or garden so that I can plan my own.

✓ Actually, I really want to live in a low-rise building, so I would like to have a rooftop or garden that I can design myself.

Problems: word order 'That really I want' is incorrect; use 'Actually, I really want'. 'Low rise' should be hyphenated as 'low-rise' when used as adjective. 'So that I can plan my own' is vague; use 'design myself' or 'plan myself' and specify 'rooftop or garden'. Modal nuance: 'would like to' is more natural for desires. Suggestions: correct word order, hyphenate compound adjectives, and use clearer verbs for 'plan' meaning design or arrange.

× Treats like cherry tomatoes is my dream so I don't want to live with a high rise building.

✓ Growing things like cherry tomatoes is my dream, so I don't want to live in a high-rise building.

Problems: 'Treats like cherry tomatoes is my dream' is odd—use 'growing things' or 'having plants like cherry tomatoes'. Subject-verb agreement: 'treats ... is' mismatches; use plural or rephrase to singular gerund 'Growing things ... is'. 'Live with a high rise building' should be 'live in a high-rise building'. Hyphenate 'high-rise'. Suggestions: use gerund subjects for activities ('growing'), ensure subject-verb agreement, and use correct preposition 'in' for living inside a building.