建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct prepositions and plural forms, and add one brief supporting detail. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes. I live in a residential complex surrounded by many tall apartment blocks. I live on the 12th floor, and there are also several office buildings nearby.

建議: Give a direct answer then give a specific reason and an example. Use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., "when the weather is"), and avoid vague phrases. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially when the weather is cloudy or rainy because the light looks more dramatic. For example, I like photographing the glass facade of the city library after a storm.

建議: Answer directly and complete the thought. Use clear structure: name the building, say why you want to visit, and give a specific reason or feeling. Correct distance phrasing and emotion vocabulary. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit UV City Mall, which is about 24 kilometres from my home. I'm excited to go because it has a large entertainment complex and many shops I want to explore.

建議: State your preference clearly and give specific reasons. Use correct tense and comparative phrases (e.g., "I prefer medium-sized buildings because..."). Avoid hesitations and finish the sentence with a clear reason. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I grew up in a tall building, so I'm comfortable living in one, but I would prefer a medium-sized building because it feels less crowded and is easier to access amenities.

× I I stay in a society so there are so many tall buildings near my home.

✓ I stay in a housing society, so there are many tall buildings near my home.

Repetition and unnatural phrasing: 'I I' is a filler repetition; 'society' in this context should be 'housing society'; 'so many' is acceptable but 'many' is more concise. Improve by removing repeated words and using natural collocations.

× I also live in a 12th floor of a society so there are so many tall building near to and also multinational company also side by side.

✓ I also live on the 12th floor of the society, so there are many tall buildings nearby, and there are multinational companies side by side.

Preposition and article errors: use 'on the 12th floor' not 'in a 12th floor'; use 'the society' if referring to the same place; 'tall building' should be plural 'tall buildings'; 'near to' should be 'nearby' or 'near'; restructure sentence for clarity and parallelism.

× Yes I do when like whether it's cozy and rainy.

✓ Yes, I do, especially when the weather is cozy and rainy.

Wrong word choice: 'whether' should be 'the weather'; 'when like' is informal and redundant. Use 'especially when' and correct noun 'weather'.

× I used to take photos of building because it is looking very much nice in rather than normal day.

✓ I used to take photos of buildings because they looked much nicer than on a normal day.

Tense and number agreement: 'used to' indicates past habit so use past 'looked'; 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to match general reference; 'very much nice' is ungrammatical — use 'much nicer' or 'very nice'; 'in rather than normal day' is unclear — change to 'than on a normal day.'

× Sometime we got to see.

✓ Sometimes we got to see them.

Missing plural and incomplete object: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'; 'got to see' needs an object ('them' = buildings or scenes). Ensure subject-verb agreement and completeness.

× Uh, well, yes, uh, I, I in my vocality, there was a building, uh, that was uh, uh, UV city mall.

✓ Well, yes, in my locality there was a building called UV City Mall.

Word choice and structure: 'vocality' is incorrect — use 'locality'; remove filler words and repeated hesitations; use 'called' to name the building and capitalize proper noun 'UV City Mall.'

× the mall is 24 kilometers far from my home and I will really anxious about visit the city mall because I.

✓ The mall is 24 kilometers from my home, and I would really like to visit the city mall because I...

Preposition and modal/verb usage: say '24 kilometers from my home' not '24 kilometers far from'; 'I will really anxious' is ungrammatical — use 'I would really like to visit' or 'I am really anxious to visit'; sentence incomplete so finish thought. Use appropriate modal verb and verb form.

× Well, uh, since my childhood, I live, I have living in a, a tall building.

✓ Well, since my childhood, I have lived in a tall building.

Tense and aspect: 'since my childhood' requires present perfect ('have lived') not simple present; 'I live, I have living' is ungrammatical. Use 'have lived' for continuing situation from past to present.

× So there is no problem with me if I stay in a old building, uh, uh, in a tall building.

✓ So there is no problem for me if I stay in an old tall building.

Article and adjective order: use 'an' before a vowel sound 'old'; combine adjectives 'old tall building' or better 'an old tall building' though 'old' typically precedes size — consider 'an old high-rise' for natural phrasing. Also use 'no problem for me' rather than 'with me.'

× But uh, I would prefer to stay in a medium range like of buildings because in.

✓ But I would prefer to stay in medium-rise buildings because...

Awkward phrasing and incomplete sentence: 'medium range like of buildings' is ungrammatical — use 'medium-rise buildings' or 'buildings of medium height.' Sentence is incomplete; finish the reason. Ensure clear noun phrase and complete clause.