建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct articles and verb forms, and add one specific detail. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes. There is a famous building near my house called Triangle Tower, which stands by the ocean. Because it is very iconic, many people visit to enjoy the beautiful view from its promenade.

建議: Make the response direct and concise. Begin with a clear yes/no topic sentence, correct negation and word choice, and use a linking word to contrast general habit with exceptions. Provide a specific example of a building you photograph.

範例: Not usually. I don't find most buildings interesting, so I rarely take photos; however, when I visit famous places such as the Old City Temple, I always take pictures to remember the visit.

建議: Answer directly and correct sentence structure. Name the building clearly, avoid repetition, and give one specific reason and a brief reference to how you learned about it. Use linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Tokyo Skytree. I want to go because its observation deck offers stunning night views, and after seeing photos on social media, I was impressed by how dramatic the city looks from above.

建議: This answer is clear and relevant. Improve by adding a brief supporting detail or example and a linking word to strengthen coherence. Keep it to two sentences maximum.

範例: No, I wouldn't. Because I'm afraid of heights, I prefer low-rise buildings where I feel more comfortable and safe, for example a two-story house with a small garden.

× Yes, there is famous store building near my house.

✓ Yes, there is a famous store building near my house.

Missing definite article 'a' before a singular countable noun 'famous store building'. Use 'a' to indicate one nonspecific building. Suggestion: include 'a' (a famous store building).

× I read Triangle tower by the ocean.

✓ I live near Triangle Tower by the ocean.

Likely wrong verb 'read' instead of 'live' and capitalization for proper noun. The sentence context asks about location; use 'live' not 'read'. Also proper nouns should be capitalized and 'Tower' capitalized. If intended meaning was different, choose an appropriate verb.

× It's very iconic in our area so people often visited because of its beautiful view.

✓ It's very iconic in our area, so people often visit because of its beautiful view.

Tense inconsistency: 'often' indicates a habitual action, so use present simple 'visit' not past 'visited'. Also add a comma before 'so' linking clauses.

× Because now I don't because I don't find buildings any interesting or attractiveness so I don't usually take photos.

✓ I don't take photos now because I don't find buildings interesting or attractive, so I don't usually photograph them.

Redundant 'because' and incorrect word forms 'any interesting' and 'attractiveness'. Use adjective forms 'interesting' and 'attractive', remove redundant 'because', and rephrase for clarity. 'Photograph' or 'take photos of them' is clearer.

× But if I go to famous temple or famous building I usually take photos to recall later.

✓ But if I go to a famous temple or a famous building, I usually take photos to remember later.

Missing articles 'a' before 'famous temple' and 'famous building' for singular countable nouns. 'Recall' is a verb but here 'remember' or 'review' fits better; 'to remember later' is clearer. Add comma before subordinate clause.

× Is there is a Tokyo sky tree in Tokyo?

✓ Is there a Tokyo Skytree in Tokyo?

Redundant 'is' and incorrect spacing/capitalization of the place name. Use 'Is there' as the question opener followed by the proper noun 'Tokyo Skytree' (capitalized, no extra words).

× And I really love to would love to visit because you can see beautiful night views from the observation deck and I have seen on social media once but it was absolutely stunning and amazing.

✓ I would really love to visit because you can see beautiful night views from the observation deck. I once saw photos on social media and they were absolutely stunning.

Mixed and duplicated modal constructions ('really love to would love') should be simplified to 'would really love'. Split into two sentences for clarity. 'I have seen on social media once' is awkward; use 'I once saw photos on social media'. Match plural 'they' to 'photos'. Use past simple 'were' for that past observation.

× No I don't because I am afraid of heights so I prefer to live in low rise buildings where I feel more comfortable and safe.

✓ No, I don't. I'm afraid of heights, so I prefer to live in low-rise buildings where I feel more comfortable and safe.

Missing punctuation and needed contraction for natural speech. Add commas and hyphenate compound adjective 'low-rise'. Break into two sentences for clarity: refusal and explanation. 'I am' -> 'I'm' is optional but natural.