建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundant phrasing and incorrect word order.

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city centre. For example, a cluster of glass office towers and several high-rise apartments make the area look modern and very busy.

建議: Correct grammar and add a linking phrase to connect ideas. Give one specific example of a building you photographed and why it appealed to you to make the answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing unique buildings when I travel; for instance, I took several photos of a historic cathedral because its intricate facade looks especially beautiful in the morning sunlight.

建議: Improve accuracy and clarity. Use correct grammar and explain clearly why you want to visit, giving one specific feature of the building. Avoid unclear phrases like 'twins in the media.'

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Canton Tower in Guangzhou because it is a famous landmark with a striking twisted design. I want to see its observation deck and photograph the twisting structure up close.

建議: Make the sentence structure natural and correct. Start with a clear opinion, then give two concise, linked reasons with correct grammar and a linking word.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers great views of the whole city, and moreover, there are usually fewer insects on higher floors.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings because I live in the city central.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings because I live in the city center.

Use the correct noun phrase for the area: 'city center' is the standard collocation in English. 'Central' is an adjective and would need a noun (e.g., 'central area') but 'city center' is more natural here.

× It looks the area very modern and busy.

✓ The area looks very modern and busy.

The original word order is wrong. In English, the subject ('The area') should come before the verb ('looks'). Also omit the extra definite article 'the' before 'area' when the subject is already 'The area'.

× Yeah, definitely. I love taking pictures of interesting and unique buildings when I travel, and some buildings very beautiful under the sunlight.

✓ Yeah, definitely. I love taking pictures of interesting and unique buildings when I travel, and some buildings look very beautiful in the sunlight.

A verb is missing: use 'look' to describe appearance. Also prefer the preposition 'in' with 'sunlight' ('in the sunlight'). This fixes verb and preposition usage and makes the sentence grammatical.

× Yeah, I want to visit Canton Tower in Guangzhou. It's one of the most famous landmarks in China with a very unique design.

✓ Yes, I want to visit Canton Tower in Guangzhou. It's one of the most famous landmarks in China and has a very unique design.

The original is mostly correct but sounds better by linking clauses with 'and has' to show the tower possesses the design. Also 'Yeah' is changed to more formal 'Yes' to match register.

× The tower is not straight, its body twins in the media.

✓ The tower is not straight; its body twists in the middle.

'Twins in the media' is incorrect word choice and structure. Likely intended meaning is that the tower 'twists in the middle'. Use a semicolon or two sentences to join related clauses and correct vocabulary: 'twists' and 'middle'.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building because I have a great view of a whole city and I found there are fewer insect on high floors.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building because I would have a great view of the whole city, and I have found there are fewer insects on high floors.

Tense and article issues: 'want' is fine for preference, but describe the hypothetical view with 'would have'. 'a whole city' should be 'the whole city' to refer to that city specifically. Use past participle 'have found' or present perfect 'have found' to indicate experience, and plural 'insects'. Also add 'the' before 'whole city' and plural for 'insects'.