建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and filler words, and give one specific detail. Use linking words if adding details (for example, “It houses offices for banks”).

範例: Yes. There is a tall skyscraper near my home. It mainly houses bank offices, so it looks very modern and busy during weekdays.

建議: Reduce repetition and clarify the timing/detail: give a concise topic sentence, then one specific example with linking words (e.g., “for example” or “often”). Avoid vague phrases like “in the rush moment.”

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings. For example, I like to photograph tall buildings with the sky as a backdrop because it creates a dramatic cityscape, especially at sunrise or sunset.

建議: Good answer: clear and specific. To improve, shorten slightly and add a linking reason phrase to sound more natural (e.g., “because” or “so”). Avoid minor hesitations like “Oh.”

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower at night because I have only seen it during the day and I imagine the lights and sparkle would be spectacular.

建議: Make the response more fluent and structured: start with a clear statement, then give one specific reason and a brief example. Remove fillers and repeat words. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building if I could afford it because of the amazing views. For example, when I visited Taipei 101 I loved looking at the city from high up.

× Yes, there is a tall building near my home.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my home.

The student answers 'Are there tall buildings near your home?' so the verb 'there is' is incorrect because the question uses plural 'buildings'. Use 'there are' to match the plural subject. Suggestion: Listen to the question plurality and match 'there is' (singular) vs 'there are' (plural).

× It's a building like skyscraper and in that skyscraper it's umm office for those umm bank.

✓ It's a building like a skyscraper and in that skyscraper there are offices for those banks.

Missing article before 'skyscraper' and incorrect singular/plural and article use: 'like skyscraper' needs 'a skyscraper'. 'it's umm office' should be 'there are offices' because multiple offices are implied, and 'those umm bank' should be 'those banks' to match plural. Also use 'there are' for existence in a location. Suggestion: Use 'a' before singular countable nouns, use 'there is/are' for existence, and ensure noun plurality matches what you mean.

× Yes I do, I do take photos of the buildings.

✓ Yes, I do. I take photos of buildings.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' implies specific buildings previously mentioned; general habit uses plural without article: 'take photos of buildings.' Also reduce repetition 'I do take' to natural 'I take'. Suggestion: For general statements about habits, use plural nouns without 'the' and avoid redundant auxiliary emphasis unless needed.

× For example I would take the building with the sky in the back and it illustrates a beautiful city view.

✓ For example, I take a building with the sky in the background to illustrate a beautiful city view.

Tense and structure mismatch: 'would take' suggests conditional but student means habitual action, so use present simple 'take'. 'with the sky in the back' is awkward; use 'in the background'. 'it illustrates' is awkwardly placed; rephrase to show purpose: 'to illustrate.' Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and choose natural prepositional phrases like 'in the background.'

× Umm in the rush moment.

✓ Um, in a rush moment.

Fragment lacking context and article: 'in the rush moment' is not idiomatic. Use 'in a rush' or 'in a moment of rush' but best is 'when I'm in a rush.' Suggestion: Complete the sentence and use the idiom 'when I'm in a rush' for clarity.

× Oh yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris, especially at night, and I have seen it during the day, but I have never seen it illuminated.

✓ Oh yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris, especially at night; I have seen it during the day, but I have never seen it illuminated.

Mostly correct but replace comma with semicolon or split sentences for clarity. Tenses are appropriate: 'would like' for desire, present perfect 'have seen' for past experiences. Suggestion: Punctuate to improve clarity; no grammatical tense change required.

× I think the lights and the sparkle would be spectacular.

✓ I think the lights and the sparkle will be spectacular.

Mixing modal 'would' with present opinion 'I think' causes inconsistency. Use 'will' to express expectation about a future event when stating personal belief, or keep 'would' if describing hypothetical. Here 'will' fits better. Suggestion: Match modality: use 'will' after 'I think' for expected future events.

× Umm, yes I do. I want, I, if I have an opportunity to afford it, I would like to live in a tall building because the view, for example, umm, uh, I have once been to the 101, uh, building in Taiwan, Taipei.

✓ Um, yes. If I have the opportunity and can afford it, I would like to live in a tall building because of the view. For example, I once visited Taipei 101 in Taiwan.

Word order and modal use: 'if I have an opportunity to afford it' is incorrect and awkward. Use 'if I have the opportunity and can afford it.' Use 'would like' for conditional desire. 'I have once been to the 101, building' is awkward; use simple past 'I once visited Taipei 101.' Also 'because the view' needs 'because of the view.' Suggestion: Use clear conditional structure 'If I have X and can Y, I would...' and tidy noun phrases and prepositions for natural expression.