建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct singular/plural and countability errors, avoid redundancy and keep to 2–3 sentences. Add a brief specific detail (e.g. location or examples) and a linking word if you expand.

範例: Not really. I live in a small town, so most buildings are only two or three storeys high. For example, the tallest building nearby is just a local library, not a skyscraper.

建議: Clarify and correct vocabulary and tense errors; use natural linking and concise phrasing. Say why you take photos and give a specific example or context. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I do. I'm training to be an architect, so I often photograph interesting facades and structural details when I visit other neighbourhoods or travel, for future reference.

建議: Eliminate repetition and correct grammar; give one clear reason and a specific detail about what interests you. Use linking words (for example, because or since) and avoid saying the same idea twice.

範例: Yes. I would love to visit the Beacon National Museum because I’ve heard its architecture and sculptures are outstanding. For instance, I’m particularly keen to see the museum’s modernist façade and a famous sculpture I saw pictures of online.

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (No, I wouldn't), then briefly explain why with correct grammar and a linking word. Offer a specific preference to support your opinion.

範例: No, I wouldn't. I get dizzy using high elevators, so I prefer living in a two- or three-storey house where stairs are manageable and I feel more comfortable.

× there are not much high and tall buildings in my town.

✓ there are not many high and tall buildings in my town.

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns; 'many' is used with countable plural nouns like 'buildings'. Replace 'much' with 'many' to match plural countable noun agreement.

× I do 'cause I am really interested in bidding as I'm going to be an architect, so I usually take photos of buildings whenever I go to my in my towns or somewhere places that I am not being.

✓ I do, because I am really interested in building design as I'm going to be an architect, so I usually take photos of buildings whenever I go to my town or to other places I haven't been to.

Multiple issues: 'bidding' is incorrect; use 'building design' or 'architecture' for the intended meaning. The phrase 'my in my towns' is ungrammatical; use 'my town'. 'Somewhere places' should be 'other places' or 'somewhere else'. 'That I am not being' attempts present continuous incorrectly; use 'I haven't been to' to indicate places not yet visited. Corrections keep tense consistent and use correct participle/past participle forms.

× Is there a building that you would like to visit? Of course, I wish I could visit the Beacon National Museum in the future 'cause I have have heard that that buildings, architecture and sculptures are really, really incredible and I'm also interested in the pieces of that building when I see them in online.

✓ Of course. I wish I could visit the Beacon National Museum in the future because I have heard that the building's architecture and sculptures are really incredible, and I'm also interested in the pieces from that building when I see them online.

Errors include duplicated words 'have have' and 'that that'. Use 'the building's architecture' to show possession or 'the building, its architecture'. 'Buildings' should be singular here because referring to one museum building. 'In online' is incorrect preposition; use 'online'. Also split into clearer clauses. 'There be' ID applied because article/there structure and noun number were incorrect.

× I am not an elevator person 'cause it make me feel dizzy.

✓ I am not an elevator person because it makes me feel dizzy.

Subject 'it' requires third person singular verb form 'makes' (add -s). Also 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech; contraction acceptable but grammar fix uses full form.

× I prefer living in a two or three story building. That is enough for me.

✓ I prefer living in a two- or three-story building. That is enough for me.

Compound adjectival form modifying 'building' should use hyphens: 'two- or three-story building'. Also consistency in singular 'building' is fine because you refer to the type of building; hyphenation clarifies meaning.