建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition and fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, articles) and finish the answer within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Not really. I live in a suburb a bit far from the city, so there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. However, when I visit the city centre I see many new high-rise developments.

建議: Give a direct answer then add one clear reason and an example. Remove fillers and split long sentences for clarity. Use linking words like 'because' or 'however' to connect ideas.

範例: Not often. I only photograph buildings if they look unusual or special because I like unique architecture. For example, I took photos of an old cathedral last year, but I rarely revisit those pictures.

建議: Good direct answer and reason, but tighten language and use varied vocabulary. Use a linking word to connect the reason and add a specific detail about the attraction to make the answer more vivid.

範例: Yes — I would like to visit the Skydeck in Melbourne because I’ve heard it offers panoramic views of the city. I especially want to see the skyline at sunset and take photos from the observation platform.

建議: Answer directly, then give one specific reason and an example. Remove hesitation and avoid repeating words. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to make the response coherent.

範例: No, I wouldn’t. I prefer living in a house with a garden because I enjoy gardening and having access to fresh air and open green space.

× Not much, but I there are lots of tall buildings in the City side.

✓ Not many, but there are lots of tall buildings on the city side.

The original sentence mixes subjects and has incorrect word order and article/case choices. 'Not much' is used for uncountable nouns; use 'Not many' for countable 'tall buildings'. 'I there are' is ungrammatical; remove 'I'. Use the preposition 'on' with 'city side' and use lowercase 'city'. Suggestion: simplify to 'Not many, but there are lots of tall buildings on the city side.'

× As I am staying bit far from the city, there are not much tall buildings closer to my home umm but I have seen lots of uh, rising buildings and closer to the.

✓ As I live a bit far from the city, there are not many tall buildings close to my home, but I have seen many new buildings closer to it.

Multiple issues: 'am staying' is OK but 'I live' is more natural for residence; 'bit' needs article 'a bit'; 'not much' should be 'not many' for countable 'tall buildings' (Grammar Problem Type: Singular and plural issue). 'closer to my home' should be 'close to my home' (adverb placement). The fragment 'and closer to the.' is incomplete (sentence structure error). Replace with 'many new buildings closer to it'. Suggestion: use 'not many' and complete the clause.

× Not much, but when it's something special and uh, I have never seen before, I like to take a photo but it stays in my gallery and I do not enjoy looking at it later so sometimes I just delete it.

✓ Not often, but when it's something special that I have never seen before, I like to take a photo; it stays in my gallery and I do not enjoy looking at it later, so sometimes I just delete it.

'Not much' is inappropriate for frequency; use 'Not often'. The clause needs 'that' after 'special' to connect the relative clause. 'It stays' is grammatical but punctuation improves clarity. Suggestion: use clearer adverb for frequency and add 'that' to link clauses.

× I have heard about the view we can see from the sky deck but I didn't get a chance to go there and see through it.

✓ I have heard about the view we can see from the sky deck, but I haven't had a chance to go there and see it.

Tense inconsistency: 'have heard' (present perfect) pairs better with 'haven't had' rather than simple past 'didn't get'. Also 'see through it' is incorrect phrasing; use 'see it'. Suggestion: keep present perfect for experiences and use 'see it'.

× So I hope one day I can visit and enjoy the scenery.

✓ So I hope one day I will be able to visit and enjoy the scenery.

'I hope one day I can' is acceptable colloquially but more precise is 'I will be able to' to express future ability. Suggestion: use 'will be able to' when referring to a future possibility you plan.

× Not really. I prefer staying in a place where I have a landscape and lots of, uh, space for space to do some gardening and enjoy the uh, fresh air and green spaces.

✓ Not really. I prefer living in a place with space for gardening, a nice landscape, fresh air, and green areas.

Awkward repetition 'space for space' and informal fillers 'uh' create noisy sentence structure. 'Prefer staying' is acceptable but 'prefer living' is more natural. Order the elements clearly: 'space for gardening, a nice landscape, fresh air, and green areas.' Suggestion: remove fillers and repetition and reorder for clarity.

× So I do not like to stay in a tall building.

✓ So I do not like living in a tall building.

'Like to stay in' is grammatically acceptable but 'living in' is more natural when expressing a preference for residence. Suggestion: use 'living in' for habitual residence.