建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words correctly and avoid literal translations like "completely not". Also correct grammar: "I live" not "I'm living"; "constructions" or "famous buildings."

範例: No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home. I live in the countryside, so most houses are low and spread out; the nearest high-rise is several miles away.

建議: Answer directly and use natural linking words. Fix grammar and vocabulary ("completely yes" → "Yes"; "skyscrapers" not "sky wrappers"). Give a specific example and reason, but avoid run-on sentences.

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I enjoy architectural photography. For example, I like taking pictures of the skyscrapers in Ho Chi Minh City because of their reflections and dramatic shapes.

建議: Be precise and correct grammar. Provide a clear reason and an example of what you would do there. Replace unclear phrases ("iconic optimistic") with accurate descriptions like "iconic landmark" and use correct verb forms ("provides").

範例: Yes. I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because it is an iconic landmark with an observation deck that provides panoramic views of the city. I would go to the top at sunset to take photos and enjoy the skyline.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons. Fix pronunciation-based spellings and grammar ("skyscraper," "an outstanding view"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example" appropriately and avoid filler phrases like "you know."

範例: Yes, I would probably like to live in a tall building because it would offer an outstanding view of the city. For example, after a long day I could relax on a balcony and watch the city lights.

× Completely not. This is mainly because I'm living in the countryside, therefore we don't have a lot of tall buildings or many famous construction.

✓ Not at all. This is mainly because I live in the countryside; therefore we don't have a lot of tall buildings or many famous constructions.

Pronoun and verb form: 'I'm living' suggests a temporary continuous action; simple present 'I live' is more appropriate for a permanent situation. Also 'Completely not' is unnatural; 'Not at all' is idiomatic. 'Construction' should be plural ('constructions') when referring to multiple structures. Use a semicolon or period before 'therefore' to join independent clauses correctly.

× Completely yes, because I'm a big fan of taking photos, therefore many tall and high building such as sky wrappers in Ho Chi Minh City. This is my favorite.

✓ Yes, definitely, because I'm a big fan of taking photos, especially of many tall and high buildings such as skyscrapers in Ho Chi Minh City. This is my favorite.

Quantifier and noun number: 'many tall and high building' needs plural 'buildings'. 'Skyscraper' was misspelled as 'sky wrappers'. 'Completely yes' is unnatural; 'Yes, definitely' is idiomatic. Add 'especially of' to link the ideas smoothly.

× Absolutely yes, that would be the landmark 81 floor in Ho Chi Minh City. This is mainly because it is not only the iconic optimistic, but it also provide a full view of this city.

✓ Absolutely yes; it would be Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City. This is mainly because it is not only iconic and impressive, but it also provides a full view of the city.

Adjective and verb agreement: 'the landmark 81 floor' is awkward; use 'Landmark 81' (proper name). 'Iconic optimistic' is incorrect collocation; likely meant 'iconic and impressive'. 'Provide' must be 'provides' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also 'the city' is more natural than 'this city' in this context.

× Probably yes, because you know living in a sky rappers that will give you a outstanding view of the whole city which will make you feel relaxed after a long day walking.

✓ Probably yes, because living in a skyscraper will give you an outstanding view of the whole city, which will help you relax after a long day of walking.

Prepositions and articles: 'in a sky rappers' has spelling error and wrong plural; use singular 'in a skyscraper'. 'A outstanding' should be 'an outstanding' due to vowel sound. 'Make you feel relaxed' is acceptable but 'help you relax' is more natural. 'After a long day walking' should be 'after a long day of walking' to use the correct preposition.