建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') correctly and finish the sentence. Also correct basic grammar (e.g., 'I live in a tall building' and 'in a residential area').

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home because I live in a residential area that has many high-rise apartments. For example, my building is 20 storeys high and there are two office towers across the street, so the neighbourhood feels very urban.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear reason and a concrete example. Reduce hesitations and avoid unclear phrases like 'this time make me very special.' Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example') and correct grammar (e.g., 'I take photos' and 'the view is amazing').

範例: Yes, sometimes I take photos of buildings because the view from some windows is amazing. For example, last week I photographed a modern glass façade at sunset because the colours reflected beautifully on the glass.

建議: Be specific: name or describe a building you want to visit and give clear reasons using linking words (for instance, 'because' or 'for example'). Avoid fillers ('uh') and repeated words. Use correct sentence structures (e.g., 'I would like to visit the Shard in London because...').

範例: Yes. I would like to visit the Empire State Building because it is an iconic tall structure with great views. I want to go to the observation deck to see the city layout and take photos of the skyline.

建議: Give a focused reasoned answer with one or two clear points and a specific detail. Avoid vague praise and unfinished sentences. Use correct tense and linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'for example') and finish your thought.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy the views and the modern facilities they often provide. For example, living on a high floor would give me a quieter environment and a nice view of the city skyline.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a tall building and around many tall buildings because I live in construction area and residential area that's why these buildings are very tall and it is very.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a tall building and around many tall buildings since I live in a construction area and a residential area; that's why these buildings are very tall.

The sentence has pluralization and article errors. 'construction area' and 'residential area' need the indefinite article 'a'. The phrase 'it is very' is incomplete and unnecessary. Also 'that's why these buildings are very tall' conveys the reason so use 'since' or 'because' once to avoid repetition. Suggestion: Use 'a construction area' and 'a residential area' and remove the fragment 'and it is very.' (ID reference: 1)

× Yes, sometimes I take photos of buildings because when I when I see a window outside view, this is amazing. That's why this time make me very special. That's why I too I take a photo and this photos.

✓ Yes, sometimes I take photos of buildings because when I see the view from a window, it is amazing. That moment makes me feel very special. That's why I also take photos.

Problems include awkward phrasing and incorrect noun forms. 'window outside view' should be 'the view from a window'. 'This time make me very special' is grammatically incorrect; 'that moment makes me feel very special' uses present simple correctly to describe a general reaction. 'I too I take a photo and this photos' has redundancy and wrong plural; use 'I also take photos.' Suggestion: keep verbs in simple present for habitual actions and use correct noun plurals. (ID reference: 10)

× Yes uh, when, uh, when, uh, building is very tall and beautiful, there's uh, that time I visit to building because this building is very beautiful and very organized and well decorated. That's why I am interested to visit uh, this building that's.

✓ Yes, when a building is very tall and beautiful, I visit it because the building is very well organized and decorated. That's why I am interested in visiting this building.

Preposition and article errors: 'visit to building' should be 'visit it' or 'visit the building'. 'Interested to visit' is incorrect; use 'interested in visiting'. Also include the indefinite article 'a' before 'building' when speaking generally. Remove filler words and repetitions. Suggestion: use 'interested in' + gerund and direct object pronoun 'it' after 'visit'. (ID reference: 11)

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building because it was it is very, very exciting thing and I love it and it is very beautiful building and when I live in tall building I.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building because it is a very exciting idea and I love it. It is a very beautiful building.

Tense and article errors: mix of past 'was' and present 'is' is inconsistent; use present 'is' to express desire. 'Exciting thing' is awkward; use 'exciting idea' or 'experience'. Use the articles 'a' before 'very exciting' and 'a' before 'tall building'. The sentence fragment at the end should be removed or completed; I removed it to keep a complete, coherent response. Suggestion: maintain present tense for current desires and include appropriate articles. (ID reference: 6)