建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Use linking words and correct word choices (e.g. "many" instead of "quite a few the"). Avoid filler sounds and repetition.

範例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a large city. For example, there are several high-rise apartment blocks and large shopping centres within walking distance, so the area feels very busy and modern.

建議: Give a focused topic sentence, then support it with a clear reason and a specific example. Improve grammar (e.g. "reflect" -> "reflects") and avoid vague endings like "it's really worth it if you take" — finish the thought. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example."

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings when I travel because architecture reflects a city’s culture and history. For example, I recently took pictures of colonial-era buildings in my trip, and I compared their style with modern skyscrapers back home.

建議: Provide a clear, direct answer naming the building, then explain why with specific reasons. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "many people really want to visit"). Use linking words like "because" and be precise with vocabulary ("French architecture" rather than "the architecture of French people").

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it is an iconic landmark and a fine example of 19th-century engineering. Visiting would let me appreciate its design and learn more about French architectural history.

建議: Answer directly and organize ideas clearly: state your current preference, then contrast with future plans using linking words like "however" or "in the future." Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g. "I want to live in a tall building" not "leave another tall buildings"). Be specific about reasons.

範例: At the moment I prefer living in a tall building because I enjoy city life and the convenience of being close to shops and public transport. However, in the future I would like a small house with a garden because it would be quieter and more peaceful.

× Yes, they are quite a few the buildings close to where I live, uh since I live in the big city so there's a lot of shopping centers and also sleeping more or high rise apartments for residents to live in.

✓ Yes, there are quite a few buildings close to where I live, since I live in a big city, so there are a lot of shopping centers and also several high-rise apartment buildings for residents to live in.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and plural agreement: 'they are quite a few the buildings' is ungrammatical. Use 'there are quite a few buildings' to state existence (plural). 'the big city' should be 'a big city' unless a specific city was previously referenced. 'sleeping more or high rise apartments' is incorrect word choice and number; use 'several high-rise apartment buildings'. Improve by using 'there are' for plural existence and correct noun phrases.

× So I also live in apartment now and it's filled.

✓ I also live in an apartment now and it's fully furnished.

'live in apartment' misses the article 'an' before a singular countable noun (article error, also fits 'Article errors' but corrected under present tense issue as requested). 'it's filled' is vague and unidiomatic; likely meant 'fully furnished' or 'filled with furniture'. Use present simple 'I live' for current situation and include appropriate article and adjective phrase.

× Yes, I often take many photos of buildings when I travel.

✓ Yes, I often take many photos of buildings when I travel.

Sentence is grammatical. 'take photos' and 'when I travel' correctly use base verb forms. No change needed.

× I find architecture reflects a city, culture and history so I like to photograph landmarks and compare their styles with their in my own country.

✓ I find architecture reflects a city's culture and history, so I like to photograph landmarks and compare their styles with those in my own country.

Original has incorrect noun linkage and missing possessive: 'reflects a city, culture and history' should be 'reflects a city's culture and history' to show possession. 'compare their styles with their in my own country' is ungrammatical; use 'those' to refer to 'styles' and 'in my own country'. Correct prepositions and use of demonstrative pronoun improve clarity.

× So I think it's really worth it if you take.

✓ So I think it's really worth it to take photos of buildings.

Original sentence ends abruptly 'if you take' without an object; this is a sentence structure/ellipsis error. Make the object explicit: 'to take photos of buildings' or 'if you take photos of buildings'. This completes the thought and matches prior context.

× I would like to visit FM Towers in Paris since this is an iconic landmark in the world, so many people really want to visit these buildings to explore the beauty of the building and also learn more about the culture and the architecture of French people.

✓ I would like to visit the FM Towers in Paris since it is an iconic landmark in the world; many people want to visit those buildings to appreciate their beauty and learn more about French culture and architecture.

Use definite article 'the FM Towers' if referring to a specific named place. 'this is an iconic landmark' should match plural/singular: if 'FM Towers' is plural use 'they are'; here rephrased to treat as a site 'it is' or use plural consistently. 'these buildings' and 'the building' inconsistent—use 'those buildings' and 'their beauty'. 'culture and the architecture of French people' is awkward; use 'French culture and architecture'. Fix articles, pronoun reference and conciseness.

× I think it depends, Right now I'm still young, so I want to leave another tall buildings to enjoy the life lively city and also connect with the modern life in the city.

✓ I think it depends. Right now I'm still young, so I want to live in a tall building to enjoy life in a lively city and connect with modern city life.

Original has modal/verb choice issues and multiple grammatical problems: 'leave another tall buildings' is incorrect — likely intended 'live in a tall building'. 'another' plus plural doesn't match; choose singular/plural appropriately. 'enjoy the life lively city' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'enjoy life in a lively city'. Use 'connect with the modern life in the city' -> 'connect with modern city life'. Modal verb 'want to' is fine once verbs corrected.

× But in the future I really want to live in a small house with a garden, which make me feel more peaceful.

✓ But in the future I would really like to live in a small house with a garden, which would make me feel more peaceful.

Use conditional/future-in-the-future phrasing: 'I would really like' or 'I really want to' is acceptable; 'which make me' has subject-verb agreement error—'which would make me' or 'which would make me feel more peaceful' fits hypothetical future. Correct tense/modal to express future desire and fix verb agreement.