建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Reduce filler words (umm, uh, MMM) and correct grammar (e.g., 'a 20-story building', 'very close to my apartment', 'luxury apartment'). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'also' or 'because').

範例: Yes. There is a 20-story apartment building directly in front of my flat. Because it has modern finishes and a guarded garage, it looks very luxurious and I think rents there are quite high. From my window I can even see people on the stairwell.

建議: Organize your answer: state clearly whether you take photos, then give two concrete preferences with examples. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'historic buildings', 'large glass windows', 'cafés on the ground floor') and linking words like 'also' or 'for example'.

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings when I go out. For example, I enjoy taking pictures of historic buildings because of their detailed facades, and I also like modern structures with large glass windows and street-level cafés, which make good compositions.

建議: Clarify your meaning and remove contradictions (e.g., 'no specific one I won't avoid' is confusing). Give a single clear example and explain why. Use conditional structure correctly: 'If I had the chance, I would visit... because...'. Reduce hesitations and be specific about the place and reasons.

範例: I don't have a single must-see building, but if I visited Australia I would like to see the historic warehouses in Sydney's Rocks district because they combine old brick architecture with interesting shops and cafés, and they reflect the city's maritime history.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., 'live in a tall building', 'cityscape', 'the tallest building'). Avoid repetition and filler words. Offer concise, coherent sentences within five-sentence limit.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers impressive cityscape views. Also, living high up would allow me to enjoy sunrises and sunsets, and the skyline at night looks beautiful from above.

× Yes, in front of my apartment there's about 20 stories building I think it's apartment umm it's a very close to my apartment and when I open my window I can see the people MMM on the staircase and umm garage area.

✓ Yes, in front of my apartment there's about a 20-story building; I think it's an apartment. It's very close to my apartment, and when I open my window I can see people on the staircase and in the garage area.

The sentence has multiple singular/plural and count noun issues: '20 stories building' should be 'a 20-story building' (compound adjective + singular noun). 'It's apartment' needs an article: 'it's an apartment'. 'the people' is unnecessary; use 'people' or 'the people' only if specific. Preposition 'on the staircase and umm garage area' also needed 'in the garage area' (see next item). Suggest breaking long run-on into shorter clauses and use appropriate articles and singular/plural forms.

× Uh, but I think it's very luxury type apartment, so I think it's very expensive, uh, for rent out, yeah.

✓ Uh, but I think it's a very luxurious apartment, so I think it's very expensive to rent out.

'Luxury type apartment' is awkward; use adjective 'luxurious'. Include the article 'a'. 'For rent out' is incorrect; use the infinitive 'to rent' or the phrasal 'to rent out' after a subject. The corrected sentence uses proper adjective form and correct verb construction.

× Yes, obviously I'm very good at taking pictures of anything when I go out, uh, or when I saw different type or very good interior, uh, building with very good interior, I definitely take a photo with me and also building.

✓ Yes, obviously I'm very good at taking pictures of anything when I go out, or when I see interesting buildings with good interiors; I definitely take photos of them.

Tense and verb form: 'when I saw' should be 'when I see' to match habitual present. 'Different type or very good interior' is ungrammatical; use 'interesting buildings with good interiors'. 'I definitely take a photo with me and also building' is unclear; use 'I definitely take photos of them'. Maintain plural 'photos' for habitual action.

× Uh, then personally, I like, uh, building type with, with historical. The historical type buildings and building with glass windows, very large type glass windows.

✓ Personally, I like historical buildings and buildings with very large glass windows.

Word order and adjective use: 'building type with historical' is incorrect—use 'historical buildings'. Avoid repeating 'building'; combine into 'buildings with very large glass windows'. Use plural nouns when speaking generally.

× And I like the building with coffee shop. I think it's very nice.

✓ And I like buildings that have coffee shops. I think they're very nice.

Use plural 'buildings' for general preference. 'With coffee shop' needs an article and relative clause: 'that have coffee shops'. Match pronoun 'they're' with plural noun.

× There's no specific one I won't avoid. I want to visit, but uh, if I had a chance to visit Australia, I definitely, I definitely go for visit umm, a warehouse in Sydney MMM because it's a one off my favorite dis destination in Australia.

✓ There's no specific one I won't avoid; I want to visit them all. But if I had a chance to visit Australia, I would definitely visit a warehouse in Sydney because it's one of my favorite destinations in Australia.

Several issues: 'There's no specific one I won't avoid' is confusing—rewrite for clarity. Conditional tense requires 'would' for hypothetical: 'I would definitely visit'. 'Go for visit' is incorrect; use 'visit'. 'a one off my favorite dis destination' should be 'one of my favorite destinations'. Use plural 'destinations' for general category.

× Well, it's MMM, uh, other shop. As I mentioned, I like to uh, uh, building type with historical MMM interest.

✓ Well, it's near other shops. As I mentioned, I like buildings with historical interest.

'Other shop' should be 'other shops' or 'near other shops'. 'Building type with historical interest' should be 'buildings with historical interest'. Use plural nouns for general statements and concise phrasing.

× Yes, I would like to eat live in a tall builder because when I open my window I can see the world scene of the city or village, whatever I live in.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because when I open my window I can see the city or village scenery wherever I live.

'Would like to eat live' contains extraneous 'eat'—remove it. 'Builder' is wrong; use 'building'. 'World scene' is unnatural—use 'scenery'. 'Whatever I live in' should be 'wherever I live'. Modal 'would like to' is correct for polite desire.

× And also I think it's very it would be very beautiful in the night and morning.

✓ I also think it would be very beautiful at night and in the morning.

Mixed tense phrasing 'I think it's very it would be' should use one structure: 'I think it would be'. Use prepositions 'at night' and 'in the morning'. Keep conditional mood consistent.

× Also I can watch sunrise and sunset when I live in a highest building.

✓ Also I can watch the sunrise and sunset when I live in the highest building.

Use articles: 'the sunrise and sunset'. 'A highest building' is incorrect; use 'the highest building' or 'a high building'. Superlative 'highest' requires 'the' unless modified. Match noun phrases properly.

× I hope I can take apartment in umm most highest building.

✓ I hope I can get an apartment in the highest building.

Use 'get an apartment' or 'rent an apartment' rather than 'take apartment'. Include article 'an'. 'Most highest' is redundant superlative; use 'the highest'. Use correct preposition 'in'.