建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be grammatically accurate, concise, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement, and use plural/singular forms correctly. Add one specific detail about the area using a linking word.

範例: Yes. I live in Seoul, which has many tall buildings. For example, the business districts near my home are full of skyscrapers, so the skyline is very impressive.

建議: Give a clear direct answer then expand briefly with a specific reason or frequency. Use natural adverbs and correct noun forms (photos). Keep it to two or three sentences and use a linking word like "because" or "but".

範例: Not really. I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer taking pictures of people and nature, but I sometimes photograph architecture when I travel.

建議: Answer directly, avoid filler words, and clarify details coherently. Mention why you want to visit and give a specific feature or activity, using a linking word such as "because" or "for example." Correctly reference parts of the building (e.g. observation deck, mall, residences).

範例: Yes. I'd like to visit Lotte World Tower because it's the tallest building in South Korea and has an observation deck with panoramic views. For example, I want to see the city from the glass floor and visit the shops and restaurants there.

建議: Be consistent and avoid contradictory phrases. Start with a clear yes/no, then explain briefly with specific reasons. Remove fillers and unclear fragments. Use linking words like "because" or "so."

範例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a very tall building because I prefer a garden and more privacy, but I do enjoy visiting high floors occasionally to admire the views.

× Yes I live in Seoul which he have a lot of tall building.

✓ Yes, I live in Seoul, which has a lot of tall buildings.

The original sentence misuses the pronoun 'he' to refer to the city and uses incorrect verb form 'have'. Use 'which' to refer to 'Seoul' and the verb 'has' for third person singular. Also use the plural 'buildings' to match 'a lot of'. Improve by: replace 'he' with no pronoun (use relative clause with 'which') and use 'has' and plural noun form.

× Honestly, no, I don't usually take a photo a lot.

✓ Honestly, no, I don't usually take many photos.

The phrase 'take a photo a lot' is awkward and mixes singular 'a photo' with the adverb 'a lot'. Use plural 'photos' with quantifier 'many' for frequency. Also 'usually' already indicates frequency, so 'many photos' is natural. Suggestion: use 'don't usually take many photos' or 'I don't take photos often'.

× Yes, I want to go to uh, Lotte World Tower which is the tallest building in my country. Especially Signal is the residential area.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Lotte World Tower, which is the tallest building in my country. The Signal area is a residential neighborhood.

The original has awkward filler 'uh' and a fragmented second sentence 'Especially Signal is the residential area.' 'Especially' is misused; better to state clearly: 'The Signal area is a residential neighborhood.' Also add commas to set off the relative clause. Use 'neighborhood' for clarity and correct noun order.

× Yes, definitely I won't. I like to watch all large scale view such as. MMM.

✓ No, definitely I wouldn't. I like to watch large-scale views, such as cityscapes.

The response contradicts the question 'Do you want to live in a tall building?' The student likely means 'No, I wouldn't' rather than 'I won't'. Use conditional/modal 'wouldn't' for hypothetical preference. 'I like to watch all large scale view such as. MMM.' is ungrammatical and fragmented. Use 'large-scale views' (hyphenated adjective) and give an example like 'cityscapes'. Remove filler 'MMM'. Also add commas for clarity.