建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct article use and verb forms (a supermarket, a big mall; my city has).

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, including a large shopping mall and a multi-storey supermarket. Moreover, the area is undergoing rapid development, so more high-rise projects are planned for the future.

建議: Good clear answer. Improve coherence by adding a brief reason and one specific example, using a linking word to connect ideas (because, so).

範例: No, I don't usually photograph buildings because I prefer natural scenery. For example, I often take pictures of hills and rivers during my weekend walks.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and accurate facts with correct grammar. Use linking words to add a short reason or detail. Avoid awkward phrases (highest long building, arrow shaping, tourist sport).

範例: Yes. I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is currently the tallest building in the world. Its slender, tapering design is very impressive, and I would like to go to the observation deck to enjoy the panoramic city views.

建議: Make a clear, grammatical topic sentence and support it with one specific reason or example. Use correct verb tenses and articles, and avoid vague phrasing (show the world from the cloud).

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the apartments usually offer amazing views over the city. For instance, living on a high floor would let me see sunsets and city lights every evening, and many high-rises also provide facilities like gyms and rooftop gardens.

× Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings near my home as a one supermarket and also have a one big mall and it looks very attractive and my city have the so many developments in the future also.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, including a supermarket and a large mall; the area looks very attractive, and my city will see many developments in the future.

This sentence has multiple structure and agreement problems (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Errors include incorrect quantifier and article usage ('a one supermarket', 'a one big mall'), incorrect subject-verb agreement ('my city have'), run-on sentence and awkward phrasing. Corrections: use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' before countable plural with simpler structure, use 'including' to list examples, change 'a one supermarket' to 'a supermarket' and 'a one big mall' to 'a large mall', fix subject-verb agreement to 'my city will see', and split clauses with punctuation to avoid a run-on sentence. Suggestions: break complex ideas into shorter clauses, ensure subjects and verbs agree, and use correct articles and quantifiers.

× No, I don't take photos of buildings and I mostly capture the scenery, views of land, landscapes and natural environment.

✓ No, I don't usually take photos of buildings; I mostly capture scenery, landscapes and the natural environment.

This sentence has tense and word-choice issues (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'Don't take' is acceptable, but 'mostly capture the scenery, views of land, landscapes and natural environment' is wordy and slightly awkward. Correction simplifies and uses 'usually' for frequency, removes redundant words ('views of land'), and adds 'the' before 'natural environment' for clarity. Suggestions: use adverbs of frequency in present tense ('usually'), choose concise nouns ('scenery', 'landscapes'), and include articles where needed.

× Yes, there one, there was a one building that I would like to visit in future and the building was Burj Khalifa.

✓ Yes, there is a building I would like to visit in the future: the Burj Khalifa.

This sentence misuses the 'there is/there are' construction and tenses (Grammar Problem Type ID 3). 'There one, there was a one building' is ungrammatical and mixes present desire with past tense. Correction uses 'there is' for existence, removes unnecessary 'one', and uses 'in the future' with 'would like to visit'. Suggestions: use 'there is/there are' correctly, avoid unnecessary 'one', and keep tenses consistent.

× It is located in Dubai and it is the highest long building in the world with a arrow shaping look and it's look it gives the attractive things and it's a highly tourist sport.

✓ It is located in Dubai and is the tallest building in the world, with an arrow-shaped design; it looks impressive and is a very popular tourist spot.

This sentence contains adjective/adverb errors and word-choice issues (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). 'Highest long building' is incorrect; use 'tallest'. 'Arrow shaping look' should be 'arrow-shaped design'. 'It's look it gives the attractive things' is ungrammatical; 'it looks impressive' is concise. 'Highly tourist sport' is incorrect; use 'very popular tourist spot'. Suggestions: use correct comparative/superlative forms ('tallest'), form compound adjectives with hyphens ('arrow-shaped'), prefer concise expressions, and use correct collocations ('tourist spot').

× Yes I want to be live in a tall building, it gives the very amazing view from the top of the building to all the city and it was a give a many facilities to to show the world from the cloud.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building; it would give an amazing view of the whole city from the top, and it would provide many facilities and a sense of being above the clouds.

This sentence has multiple tense and structure errors (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 26). 'Want to be live' is incorrect; use 'want to live'. 'It gives the very amazing view' should be conditional 'it would give an amazing view' to match hypothetical desire. 'To all the city' should be 'of the whole city'. 'It was a give a many facilities' mixes tenses and articles; use 'it would provide many facilities'. Suggestions: use correct infinitive forms ('want to live'), use conditional 'would' when describing hypothetical benefits, fix articles ('an amazing view') and quantifiers ('many facilities'), and avoid repetition.