建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên và cấu trúc: trả lời trực tiếp, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh các từ lặp (uh) và lỗi ngữ pháp (in near, to shopping). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể với liên từ để làm câu mạch lạc (e.g., because, and). Giữ độ dài tối đa 3–4 câu.

範例: Yes, there are a few tall buildings near my home. One is a modern shopping complex where I often go because it has a cinema and several restaurants. I usually visit it at weekends when I want to shop or meet friends.

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và mở rộng lý do: tránh lặp 'I', sử dụng cấu trúc đúng với động từ (like taking photos). Thêm một câu giải thích ngắn và có liên từ để hợp lý hóa ý (for example, because or so).

範例: Not really, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not very interested in photography. Instead, I prefer taking pictures of landscapes or family events.

建議: Cải thiện rõ ràng ý và từ vựng chính xác: dùng danh từ đúng (e.g., 'a quirky bar building' hoặc tên cụ thể), tránh lặp 'so' và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (a special architecture → special architecture/features). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do bạn muốn tới (design, history, view) và dùng liên từ để kết nối ý.

範例: Yes, there's a quirky bar building in Da Nang that I'd love to visit. It has a unique façade and interesting interior design, and I've heard it offers great views of the river, which makes it very attractive to me.

建議: Cải thiện độ rõ ràng, ngữ pháp và lập luận: trả lời trực tiếp, dùng cấu trúc đúng (I'm scared if the power goes out), tránh lặp từ, giải thích cụ thể mối quan tâm (anxiety, safety, emergency access). Kết thúc bằng một câu kết luận ngắn.

範例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I'm worried about what would happen during a power cut. I would prefer a low-rise house because it feels safer and easier to evacuate in an emergency.

× Uh, yes, there are some high buildings in near my house.

✓ Uh, yes, there are some tall buildings near my house.

'in near my house' is incorrect because 'near' already indicates location; do not combine with 'in'. Also 'high buildings' is unnatural for location — use 'tall buildings'. Suggestion: remove 'in' and use 'tall' for natural collocation."

× Uh, it is a model building and sometime I go there to shopping here.

✓ Uh, it is a model building and sometimes I go there to shop.

After 'go' the base verb with -ing is required ('go shopping') but here the intended meaning is 'go to shop' or 'go shopping'. Use 'go there to shop' or 'go shopping there'. Also 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Remove redundant 'here'."

× No, not yet, because I I don't like take photo.

✓ No, not yet, because I don't like taking photos.

After 'like' use the gerund ('taking') not the base verb. Also plural 'photos' is more natural. Remove duplicated 'I'."

× Yes, I really love a guy bar building, uh, which is in Danang City, so it has a special a architecture, so it's so attractive and building and.

✓ Yes, I really love the Gui Bar building in Da Nang City; it has special architecture, so it's very attractive.

Use correct proper name spelling 'Gui Bar' if that is name; use 'the' for a specific building. 'a architecture' is wrong — 'architecture' is uncountable so no 'a'. 'so it's so attractive and building and' is ungrammatical and redundant; simplify to 'it's very attractive'. Also standardize place name 'Da Nang'."

× MMM no I don't like sleep in high building because I scare when lost electricity.

✓ Mm, no, I don't like sleeping in tall buildings because I get scared when the electricity goes out.

After 'like' use gerund 'sleeping'. Use plural 'buildings' to match general preference. 'I scare' should be 'I get scared' or 'I'm scared'. 'when lost electricity' is incorrect; say 'when the electricity goes out'. Also 'high' -> 'tall'."

× The building can can active activity and so it's so serious.

✓ The building can have unexpected problems when that happens, and that would be serious.

'can can' is a repetition error. 'active activity' is meaningless; likely intended 'unexpected problems' or 'safety issues'. Rephrase to clear, grammatical sentence. Use modal 'can' once and appropriate nouns ('problems', 'issues').