建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng chính xác, nói rõ ràng và ngắn gọn hơn. Tránh lỗi số từ (’two’ vs ‘tall’) và lỗi chính tả (ví dụ: ‘tour’→‘tall’/‘tour’ không phù hợp). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó dùng 1–2 câu hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ: số lượng, vị trí, tác động).

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city center of Civital City. For example, several office towers and apartment blocks are within a five-minute walk, so I often see sunlight reflecting off their glass facades in the morning.

建議: Cần cải thiện sự mạch lạc và câu hoàn chỉnh; tránh lặp từ và lỗi phát âm/chính tả (‘skycrabble’→‘skyscraper’). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, rồi giải thích ngắn gọn với ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng liên từ để kết nối ý (for example, because).

範例: I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not very interested in architecture. However, I will photograph famous or architecturally impressive structures, for example a historic cathedral or a modern skyscraper, especially if the design is unique.

建議: Cần sửa câu hỏi tu từ không cần thiết (‘Is it?’) và cấu trúc câu cho tự nhiên hơn. Trả lời ngắn gọn rồi nêu lý do cụ thể, sử dụng động từ đúng cấu trúc (e.g., 'see how tall it is'). Thêm chi tiết về hoạt động cụ thể bạn muốn làm trong tòa nhà để tăng tính cụ thể.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Landmark 81 because it's the tallest building in Vietnam. I want to see how tall it is and admire the view from the observation deck, and maybe try a restaurant or sky bar there to experience the atmosphere.

建議: Cần rút gọn câu và dùng cấu trúc ngữ pháp chính xác (ví dụ 'living in a tall building would...'). Tránh lặp và ý mơ hồ (‘energy from the sunshine’). Nên nêu 2–3 lợi ích rõ ràng (view, natural light, proximity to services) và kết luận ngắn gọn.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer great views and plenty of natural light. Also, high-rise apartments in the city center are usually close to shops and public transport, which is very convenient.

× Yes, there are a lot of two buildings near my house because I live in the center of Civital City in Vietnam.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of buildings near my house because I live in the center of Civital City in Vietnam.

The phrase 'a lot of two buildings' mixes a quantifier with a specific number; 'two' makes the count specific so 'a lot of' is incorrect. Use 'two buildings' or 'a lot of buildings'. Use consistent plural form for 'buildings'. Suggestion: choose either 'two buildings' (if you mean exactly two) or 'a lot of buildings' (if many).

× So every day I will be surrounded by a lot of tour building that I can directly see the sunshine.

✓ So every day I am surrounded by a lot of tall buildings that can get a lot of sunlight.

Several issues: 'will be' is inappropriate for a habitual action (Present simple should be used), 'tour' is a misspelling of 'tall', 'building' should be plural 'buildings', and 'directly see the sunshine' is unnatural; use 'get a lot of sunlight'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and correct adjective and plural forms.

× I'm not really interested in building so I usually don't take photos of them.

✓ I'm not really interested in buildings so I usually don't take photos of them.

The noun should be plural 'buildings' when referring to buildings in general. 'Building' as singular is incorrect here. Suggestion: Use plural when speaking generally about a class of objects.

× For me, I only take photos when a building is well known. Well known and architecturally impressive.

✓ For me, I only take photos when a building is well known and architecturally impressive.

The second fragment 'Well known and architecturally impressive.' is a sentence fragment. Combine it with the previous sentence for grammatical completeness. Suggestion: Join fragments to form a complete sentence or add a subject and verb.

× For example, a historic or iconic skycrabble.

✓ For example, a historic or iconic skyscraper.

The word 'skycrabble' is a misspelling of 'skyscraper'. Also the phrase is a fragment; include it in a full sentence or attach to the previous sentence. Suggestion: Correct the spelling and ensure sentence completeness.

× Yes, Is it? I really want to visit La Marque 81 because it's the tallest building in Vietnam and I want to directly see how tall is it, how impressive it is and try some special thing in that building to know exactly what it is.

✓ Yes, I really want to visit Landmark 81 because it's the tallest building in Vietnam and I want to see how tall it is, how impressive it is, and try some special things there to find out what they are.

Problems: 'Is it?' is unnecessary and incorrect. 'La Marque 81' seems to be a misspelling of 'Landmark 81'. Word order 'how tall is it' should be 'how tall it is' in an indirect statement. 'Try some special thing in that building to know exactly what it is' is awkward; use 'try some special things there to find out what they are.' Suggestion: Remove unnecessary question, fix name spelling, use correct word order for indirect questions, and pluralize/clarify 'things'.

× Yes, I do, because I think that live in the tall buildings will give me a lot of opportunities to enjoy the sunshine, the energy from the sunshine and so the wind and so live in some buildings can give me a lot of convenience.

✓ Yes, I do, because I think that living in tall buildings will give me a lot of opportunities to enjoy the sunshine, the energy from the sun, and the breeze, and living in such buildings can be very convenient.

Errors: 'live' should be the gerund 'living' after 'think that'; 'the energy from the sunshine' is wordy — 'energy from the sun' or remove; 'so the wind' is ungrammatical — use 'the breeze' or 'wind'; sentence is repetitive and awkward. Use parallel gerunds 'living... and living...' and improve word choice. Suggestion: Use gerunds after verbs like 'think that' when describing general situations, keep parallel structure, and choose natural collocations like 'sunlight' or 'breeze'.