建筑— Part 1 評分報告

× Yes, there are numerous skyscrapers near my home, most of them, umm, made of wheels and glasses, which makes them modern.

✓ Yes, there are numerous skyscrapers near my home; most of them, umm, are made of steel and glass, which makes them modern.

The original sentence uses incorrect nouns 'wheels and glasses' for building materials. Also missing auxiliary 'are' for passive construction. Use 'are made of' + correct materials 'steel and glass'. Use a semicolon or comma with conjunction to join clauses clearly.

× I don't enjoy taking photos of modern skyscrapers or. Buildings.

✓ I don't enjoy taking photos of modern skyscrapers or buildings.

The sentence is split incorrectly with a period after 'or', creating a sentence fragment. Combine into one sentence and remove the extra punctuation: '...skyscrapers or buildings.' If contrast is intended, use 'but' or 'however' instead of 'or'.

× However, when I see some traditional buildings, I would take some pictures of them.

✓ However, when I see some traditional buildings, I take some pictures of them.

The conditional/modal 'would' is unnecessary for a habitual present action. Use present simple 'take' after 'when' to indicate a regular or typical response.

× Yes, I would like to visit the Forbidden City because there are many. Ancient buildings which were made by our intelligent ancestors. It's.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Forbidden City because there are many ancient buildings that were built by our intelligent ancestors.

The original has improper sentence breaks and capitalized 'Ancient' incorrectly. 'Which were made by' is awkward for buildings; use 'that were built by'. Combine fragments into one sentence and use lowercase 'ancient'. Remove the extraneous 'It's.'

× No, I don't think so. I'm not keen on living in tall buildings because I prefer the convenience of short buildings because they I can go.

✓ No, I don't think so. I'm not keen on living in tall buildings because I prefer the convenience of short buildings; I can go out more easily.

The sentence is ungrammatical and contains repetition of 'because' and a misplaced 'they'. Rephrase to show reason and result: use a semicolon or conjunction and provide a clear clause 'I can go out more easily' to complete the thought.