食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 最初に「My favourite food is ramen」と直接答えましょう。「noodle」は通常複数形の「noodles」を使い、「Japanese traditional food」は「a traditional Japanese dish」、「worldwide famed food」は「famous worldwide」と表現します。また、「hardly to swallow」は意味が不自然です。病気のときに食べやすいという意味なら、「it is easy to swallow」と言いましょう。文を区切り、理由や具体例を1つ加えると、より自然で効果的な回答になります。

範例: My favourite food is ramen, which is a traditional Japanese dish that is famous worldwide. I especially enjoy it because the warm broth is comforting and easy to swallow when I feel sick. I usually add eggs and vegetables to make it more nutritious.

建議: 「When I was a child, I used to eat udon」と答えた後、ラーメンとの違いを明確に説明しましょう。「different with」は「different from」、「more like soft taste」は「has a milder taste」、「more easy」は「easier」、「not too light」は文脈上「not too strong」または「mild」に直します。うどんの食感や、子どもの頃に好きだった理由を具体的に述べると、内容がより豊かになります。

範例: When I was young, I really liked udon, a type of thick Japanese noodle. It is different from ramen because it has a milder flavour and a softer texture. I found it easier to eat as a child because the soup was not too strong.

建議: 質問は季節ごとの食事について尋ねているため、まず「Yes, I do」と直接答え、季節との関係を説明する必要があります。現在の回答は、留学生活やホストファミリーの話が中心で、季節とのつながりが弱くなっています。「for study upgrad」は「to study」、「change their house」は「move between host families」、「a multicultural house」は「a multicultural household」と表現します。夏・冬などの具体的な季節と料理を1つずつ挙げ、つなぎ言葉で整理しましょう。

範例: Yes, I do. In winter, I tend to eat warm dishes such as ramen and hot pot, while in summer I prefer lighter foods like salads and fruit. Since I live with different host families in New Zealand, I also sometimes enjoy Filipino or Japanese dishes.

建議: 「Yes, it has changed a little」と最初に簡潔に答え、その後に「子どもの頃も現在も麺が好きだが、最近はトマトも好きになった」と対比して説明しましょう。「it's not that big difference」は「the change is not very significant」、「when I was a child and currently」は「both as a child and now」に直します。「tomato」は一般的な食べ物として「tomatoes」とし、「makes me feel fresh and my skin」は「makes me feel refreshed and is good for my skin」のように完成した文にしてください。

範例: Yes, my favourite food has changed slightly. I still love noodles, just as I did when I was a child, but recently I have started eating more tomatoes. They make me feel refreshed, and I believe they are good for my skin.

× Mainly I enjoy eating noodle especially ramen which is Japanese traditional food and its worldwide famed food When I feel sick I always eat noodle because it's hardly to swallow it

✓ Mainly, I enjoy eating noodles, especially ramen, which is a traditional Japanese food and a world-famous dish. When I feel sick, I always eat noodles because they are easy to swallow.

Noodles are generally countable and are normally used in the plural when referring to the food in general. The pronoun they must also agree with the plural noun noodles.

× Mainly I enjoy eating noodle especially ramen which is Japanese traditional food and its worldwide famed food When I feel sick I always eat noodle because it's hardly to swallow it

✓ Mainly, I enjoy eating noodles, especially ramen, which is a traditional Japanese food and a world-famous dish. When I feel sick, I always eat noodles because they are easy to swallow.

Its shows possession, but the intended meaning is it is, which must be written as it is or it's. Also, after changing noodles to a plural noun, they is the appropriate pronoun.

× Mainly I enjoy eating noodle especially ramen which is Japanese traditional food and its worldwide famed food When I feel sick I always eat noodle because it's hardly to swallow it

✓ Mainly, I enjoy eating noodles, especially ramen, which is a traditional Japanese food and a world-famous dish. When I feel sick, I always eat noodles because they are easy to swallow.

Hardly means almost not, so it changes the intended meaning. Use hard to swallow when describing something that is difficult to swallow. World-famous is also the natural adjective for something known throughout the world.

× Mainly I enjoy eating noodle especially ramen which is Japanese traditional food and its worldwide famed food When I feel sick I always eat noodle because it's hardly to swallow it

✓ Mainly, I enjoy eating noodles, especially ramen, which is a traditional Japanese food and a world-famous dish.

A singular countable noun such as food or dish needs an article when it is introduced in this way. Use a before traditional Japanese food and a before world-famous dish.

× Mainly I enjoy eating noodle especially ramen which is Japanese traditional food and its worldwide famed food When I feel sick I always eat noodle because it's hardly to swallow it

✓ Mainly, I enjoy eating noodles, especially ramen, which is a traditional Japanese food and a world-famous dish. When I feel sick, I always eat noodles because they are easy to swallow.

The original answer contains several ideas joined without appropriate punctuation or sentence boundaries. Separate the ideas into two complete sentences and use commas around the extra information about ramen.

× When I was a child I used to eat Udon which is also noodle but the taste is kind of different with ramen. Udon is more like soft taste and children can more easy to eat it because the taste is not too light.

✓ When I was a child, I used to eat udon, which is also a type of noodle, but its taste was different from ramen. Udon has a softer taste, and children can eat it more easily because it is not too strongly flavored.

When referring to noodles as a general food category, use noodles or a type of noodle rather than noodle by itself. The phrase a type of noodle makes the singular noun grammatical.

× When I was a child I used to eat Udon which is also noodle but the taste is kind of different with ramen. Udon is more like soft taste and children can more easy to eat it because the taste is not too light.

✓ When I was a child, I used to eat udon, which is also a type of noodle, but its taste was different from ramen.

The correct preposition after different is from, not with. Use different from to compare two foods or things.

× When I was a child I used to eat Udon which is also noodle but the taste is kind of different with ramen. Udon is more like soft taste and children can more easy to eat it because the taste is not too light.

✓ Udon has a softer taste, and children can eat it more easily because it is not too strongly flavored.

Easy is an adjective, but a word describing how children eat must be an adverb, easily. The adverb more easily should come after the verb phrase eat it.

× When I was a child I used to eat Udon which is also noodle but the taste is kind of different with ramen. Udon is more like soft taste and children can more easy to eat it because the taste is not too light.

✓ Udon has a softer taste, and children can eat it more easily because it is not too strongly flavored.

Taste is a singular countable noun in the phrase a soft taste, so it needs the article a. The revised sentence uses the natural structure has a softer taste.

× Absolutely yes because I live in New Zealand for study upgrad with my host family and I often change their house so it is multicultural house every time so I sometimes eat Filipino traditional food and Japanese food.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I live in New Zealand to study, and I stay with host families, often moving to a different house. As a result, I sometimes eat traditional Filipino food and Japanese food.

Use to study to express purpose. The phrase for study upgrad is not grammatically correct for this meaning.

× Absolutely yes because I live in New Zealand for study upgrad with my host family and I often change their house so it is multicultural house every time so I sometimes eat Filipino traditional food and Japanese food.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I live in New Zealand to study, and I stay with host families, often moving to different houses. As a result, I sometimes eat traditional Filipino food and Japanese food.

Because the speaker refers to more than one host family and more than one house over time, host families and different houses should be plural.

× Absolutely yes because I live in New Zealand for study upgrad with my host family and I often change their house so it is multicultural house every time so I sometimes eat Filipino traditional food and Japanese food.

✓ As a result, I sometimes eat traditional Filipino food and Japanese food.

In English, the general descriptive adjective usually comes before the nationality adjective. Therefore, use traditional Filipino food, not Filipino traditional food.

× Absolutely yes because I live in New Zealand for study upgrad with my host family and I often change their house so it is multicultural house every time so I sometimes eat Filipino traditional food and Japanese food.

✓ I stay in a multicultural house each time I move to a new home.

A singular countable noun such as house needs the indefinite article a when it is mentioned generally or for the first time.

× Absolutely yes because I live in New Zealand for study upgrad with my host family and I often change their house so it is multicultural house every time so I sometimes eat Filipino traditional food and Japanese food.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I live in New Zealand to study, and I stay with host families, often moving to different houses. As a result, I sometimes eat traditional Filipino food and Japanese food.

The original answer is a long run-on sentence with several ideas connected by so. Divide it into complete sentences and use As a result to show the relationship between the ideas.

× Yes, my favorite food has changed but it's not that big difference because when I was a child and currently I still love eating noodles but recently I like to eat tomato because it makes me feel fresh and my skin

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed, but the difference is not that big. When I was a child, I loved eating noodles, and I still do. Recently, however, I have started eating tomatoes because they make me feel refreshed and make my skin feel healthier.

Difference is a singular countable noun, so it needs a determiner. The natural expression is the difference is not that big or it is not such a big difference.

× Yes, my favorite food has changed but it's not that big difference because when I was a child and currently I still love eating noodles but recently I like to eat tomato because it makes me feel fresh and my skin

✓ Recently, however, I have started eating tomatoes because they make me feel refreshed and make my skin feel healthier.

When talking about tomatoes as a food in general, use the plural form tomatoes. The plural pronoun they must agree with tomatoes.

× Yes, my favorite food has changed but it's not that big difference because when I was a child and currently I still love eating noodles but recently I like to eat tomato because it makes me feel fresh and my skin

✓ Recently, however, I have started eating tomatoes because they make me feel refreshed and make my skin feel healthier.

The pronoun it does not clearly or correctly connect to the intended subject after tomato is changed to the plural noun tomatoes. Use they for tomatoes, and use my skin as the object of make.

× Yes, my favorite food has changed but it's not that big difference because when I was a child and currently I still love eating noodles but recently I like to eat tomato because it makes me feel fresh and my skin

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed, but the difference is not that big. When I was a child, I loved eating noodles, and I still do. Recently, however, I have started eating tomatoes because they make me feel refreshed and make my skin feel healthier.

The original answer contains several clauses joined by but and because, and the final clause is incomplete. Use separate complete sentences and repeat the verb make before my skin to create a complete structure.