食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details linked with a connector. For example, correct tenses and subject-verb agreement, and a linking word like "because" or "so" will make your answer more natural.

範例: My favourite food is pasta because I usually eat it at the weekend. I add vegetables such as spinach and bell peppers, so the meal is healthier and more balanced.

建議: Correct word choice and past tense usage are needed. Avoid inappropriate words ("drunk") and repetition. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words like "for example" or "often".

範例: When I was young, I liked sweet foods. For example, I often ate chocolates, candies and cake at parties.

建議: Make sentences concise and grammatically correct. Use linking phrases ("in winter", "in summer") and give specific examples. Remove fragments and unclear words. Keep within 3–4 sentences maximum.

範例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. In winter I usually have warm soups to keep me warm, while in summer I prefer spicy noodle dishes and light snacks like spring rolls.

建議: Use correct past and present structures and clearer reasons for change. State the contrast with a linking word like "but" or "however", and give a brief reason for the change in taste.

範例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was a child I loved candies and chocolate, but now I prefer spicy food because my tastes have matured and I enjoy stronger flavours.

× My favorite food is pasta mostly I eat pasta on the weekend.

✓ My favorite food is pasta. Mostly I eat pasta on the weekends.

Run-on sentence and preposition/time expression: 'on the weekend' is acceptable in some dialects but 'on the weekends' or 'at the weekend' is more natural to indicate 'usually on weekend days'. Also sentences should be separated with a period to avoid run-on. Suggestion: split into two sentences and use 'on the weekends' to express habitual action.

× I put some vegetables in it so it make healthy for me.

✓ I put some vegetables in it so it makes it healthy for me.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference issue: 'it make' is wrong because 'it' (pasta) requires third person singular verb 'makes'. Also need an object 'it' after 'makes' to indicate what becomes healthy. Suggestion: use 'it makes it healthy for me' or 'which makes it healthy for me'.

× When I was drunk, I like sweet food like a chocolates and candies.

✓ When I was young, I liked sweet foods like chocolates and candies.

Wrong word choice and tense: 'drunk' is incorrect contextually; likely 'young' was intended. The sentence refers to past habits, so use simple past 'liked'. 'a chocolates' is ungrammatical; 'chocolates' is plural and does not need 'a'. Suggestion: use 'When I was young, I liked sweet foods like chocolates and candies.'.

× I eat. I eat a lot that time when when I went to somewhere party and I ate cake over there.

✓ I ate a lot at that time when I went to parties and I ate cake there.

Mixed tenses and repetition: use past tense 'ate' for past events. 'that time' needs 'at that time' and avoid double 'when when'. 'went to somewhere party' is ungrammatical; use 'went to parties' or 'went to a party'. 'over there' is informal; use 'there'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and correct prepositions: 'I ate a lot at that time when I went to parties and I ate cake there.'.

× Yes, I eat different food at different time of the whole year.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

Count and time expressions: use plural 'foods' to indicate different kinds and 'times' and idiom 'of the year' -> 'of the year' is okay but 'in the year' less natural. Suggestion: 'different foods at different times of the year.'.

× I like in the winter I eat a warm soup to feel me warm and in the summer I eat spicy food like noodles.

✓ In winter I like to eat warm soup to keep myself warm, and in summer I eat spicy foods like noodles.

Word order and pronoun use: 'I like in the winter I eat' is awkward; start with 'In winter'. 'a warm soup' unnecessary article; 'warm soup' is fine. 'to feel me warm' is ungrammatical; use reflexive 'keep myself warm'. Also 'spicy food like noodles' -> plural 'spicy foods'. Suggestion: restructure sentence and use reflexive pronoun.

× Spring roll Mamas.

✓ I also like spring rolls and mamas (instant noodles).

Fragment and unclear noun: sentence fragment lacks verb. 'Mamas' likely refers to a brand of instant noodles; clarify and use plural nouns and a verb. Suggestion: make it part of previous sentence or say 'I also like spring rolls and Mamas (instant noodles).'.

× When I was a child my favorite food candies and chocolate, but nowadays I like spicy food.

✓ When I was a child my favorite foods were candies and chocolate, but nowadays I like spicy food.

Missing verb 'were' and number agreement: need past tense 'were' to link subject and complement. Also 'favorite food candies and chocolate' should be 'favorite foods were candies and chocolate'. Suggestion: use 'were' and plural 'foods'.

× Maybe when I'm going more older than my taste change.

✓ Maybe as I get older my tastes will change.

Incorrect tense and comparative phrasing: 'going more older' is ungrammatical; use 'get older'. 'my taste change' needs subject-verb agreement and number: 'tastes will change' or 'my taste will change'. Also future likelihood: use 'will' or 'might'. Suggestion: 'Maybe as I get older my tastes will change.'.