食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and unclear metaphors.

範例: I like ice cream. It has a rich, sweet flavor and a smooth texture that cools me on hot summer days. For example, I often choose fruit-flavored sorbets because they feel refreshing and not too heavy.

建議: Improve grammar and coherence: use past tense consistently and give clear reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “anything like that.” Be specific about which foods and why you stopped eating them.

範例: When I was young, I liked desserts such as cakes and biscuits because they were sweet and comforting. However, I stopped eating them often because they now feel too greasy and make me feel unwell after I eat them.

建議: This answer is clear and relevant; make it slightly more fluent by using linking words and combining sentences smoothly. Be specific about why you prefer certain foods in each season.

範例: Yes, I do. For example, I prefer ice cream in summer because it cools me down, while in winter I enjoy hot egg soup to keep warm. However, I eat certain fruits and vegetables like grapes and tomatoes throughout the year.

建議: Make the response more natural and grammatical: use a clear topic sentence, then explain reasons with linking words. Give one concrete example of a food you now prefer.

範例: Yes, my tastes have changed. For instance, I used to love cakes and biscuits, but now I prefer fresher foods like salads and grilled fish because they feel lighter and healthier.

× My favorite food is ice cream foods unique flavor and rich taste which can dance some it on my tongue while cooling me down in the hot summer days.

✓ My favorite food is ice cream because of its unique flavor and rich taste, which seems to dance on my tongue while cooling me down on hot summer days.

Original sentence has run-on structure and missing connectors; 'ice cream foods' is wrong noun phrase; 'because of' needed to link reason; use possessive pronoun 'its' for flavor; remove extra 'some it' and use 'seems to dance' for natural expression; 'in the hot summer days' should be 'on hot summer days'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× When I was young I preferred desserts such as biscuits or cakes for its sweet flavor and I like it, but now I just get rid of them because its taste is too oily F oily for me and make me feel sick of them after finishing one of the cake or biscuits.

✓ When I was young I preferred desserts such as biscuits or cakes for their sweet flavor, and I liked them, but now I avoid them because they are too oily for me and make me feel sick after finishing a cake or a biscuit.

Errors: wrong pronouns 'its' and 'it' referring to plural 'desserts' — use 'their' and 'them'; tense inconsistency 'I like' should be past 'I liked' to match 'When I was young'; 'get rid of them' is colloquial and awkward here — use 'avoid them'; duplicate 'F oily' is typo; 'make me feel sick of them' should be 'make me feel sick'; article use 'one of the cake or biscuits' is incorrect — use 'a cake or a biscuit'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× It depends. As for some seasonal food, I like to have ice cream in the summer and hot egg soup in the winter. But some of my favorite food such as some vegetables or fruit like grapes or tomatoes, I can have it for the whole year.

✓ It depends. As for seasonal foods, I like to have ice cream in the summer and hot egg soup in the winter. But some of my favorite foods, such as vegetables or fruits like grapes or tomatoes, I can have all year round.

Errors: 'some seasonal food' should be plural 'seasonal foods' (singular/plural issue); 'favorite food' should be 'favorite foods' when referring to multiple items; 'fruit' can be plural 'fruits' in this general sense; 'I can have it for the whole year' uses wrong pronoun 'it' and awkward phrase — use 'I can have all year round'. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Of course, my food tastes change as my life stages change and my the flavor I prefer to also change to.

✓ Of course, my food tastes change as my life stages change, and the flavors I prefer also change.

Errors: 'my food tastes change' is acceptable but 'my the flavor I prefer to also change to' has extra 'my' and awkward structure; 'the flavor I prefer' should be plural 'the flavors I prefer' to match 'tastes change'; remove unnecessary 'to' at end. Subject-verb agreement maintained: 'flavors... change'. Grammar problem type ID:27

× As I talked about, I like sweet desserts such as cake and biscuits when I was young, but now I don't like it and I prefer something more fresh.

✓ As I mentioned, I liked sweet desserts such as cakes and biscuits when I was young, but now I don't like them and prefer something fresher.

Errors: tense inconsistency — 'I like ... when I was young' should use past 'I liked' to match time frame; 'cake and biscuits' should be plural 'cakes and biscuits' when generalizing; pronoun 'it' should be 'them' for plural; comparative 'more fresh' is nonstandard — use 'fresher'. Grammar problem type ID:5