食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 명확한 주제문을 사용하고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 예: ‘Uh’ 같은 말버릇을 줄이고, 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 특정 종류의 초밥, 맛의 특징, 가족과의 기억). 또한 문장 연결을 위해 간단한 연결어를 사용하세요.

範例: My favourite food is sushi. I especially like salmon nigiri because it has a rich, buttery flavor and melts in my mouth. I first tried it with my mother, who often took me to sushi restaurants when I was young, so eating sushi also reminds me of family time.

建議: 시제와 문법을 정확히 사용하세요(예: 과거 시제). 중복 표현을 피하고 구체적인 세부사항을 더하세요: 어떤 파스타였는지, 어떤 재료가 들어갔는지, 왜 좋아했는지. 연결어로 이유를 명확히 하세요.

範例: When I was young, I loved pasta, especially spaghetti with tomato sauce. My father is an excellent cook and he often made it with fresh tomatoes, basil and garlic, which made the dish very flavorful and comforting.

建議: 불명확한 단어와 발음을 정정하고(예: ‘ear cheer’ → ‘eorei-chae’ 잘못됨 — 실제 표현은 ‘eum-shik’이 아님) 정확한 표현을 사용하세요. 관용구를 사용하기보다 계절에 따른 음식의 예시와 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 연결어로 대조를 분명히 하세요.

範例: Yes. In Korea we often change what we eat depending on the season. For example, in summer people eat cold noodles or watermelon to cool down, while in winter we eat hot stews like kimchi jjigae to keep warm.

建議: 문법(시제·조동사)과 어순을 고치고, 마지막에 불필요한 단어·오류(‘It's called Ukraine, Korea’)를 제거하세요. 변화를 설명할 때 구체적 이유(습관, 경험, 여행 등)를 제시하고 연결어로 대비를 명확히 하세요.

範例: Yes, it has changed a lot. When I was a child I couldn't eat spicy food or raw fish, but over time I developed a taste for them because I tried many dishes with friends and family. Now I enjoy spicy Korean dishes and sushi, so my preferences are quite different from before.

× Uh, I like pasta when I was young because my dad is a very good cooker, so he usually made me a pasta and it was very good.

✓ Uh, I liked pasta when I was young because my dad was a very good cook, so he usually made pasta for me and it was very good.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I like' with past time 'when I was young'; use past tense 'liked' (Present tense issue and Past tense issue). 'Dad is' should be 'dad was' to match past context. 'Cooker' is incorrect for the person who cooks; use 'cook'. 'Made me a pasta' is incorrect word order and article use; say 'made pasta for me' or 'made me pasta'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense and correct noun and word order.

× Uh, my favorite food is sushi. Uh, my mom loves sushi and when I was young she recommended sushi for me and I fell in love with sushi because of her.

✓ Uh, my favorite food is sushi. Uh, my mom loves sushi and when I was young she recommended sushi to me and I fell in love with sushi because of her.

Use of 'recommended sushi for me' is incorrect preposition choice; the correct collocation is 'recommend something to someone'. This is primarily an incorrect use of prepositions. Also tense usage 'when I was young' is fine; ensure preposition 'to' is used. Suggestion: use 'recommended sushi to me'.

× In Korea we have the world called ear cheer. It means when we are hot, we eat hot food and we are cold, we eat cold food.

✓ In Korea we have the word called 'yeol-si' (or a similar term). It means when we are hot, we eat cold food, and when we are cold, we eat hot food.

Original has 'world' instead of 'word' (spelling) and confusion in meaning: it says eat hot food when hot and cold when cold, which is likely reversed; common practice is to eat cold food when hot and hot food when cold. Also sentence lacks 'when' in second clause. Suggestion: correct spelling to 'word', add 'when' and reverse food-temperature pairing if intended.

× So that is the way to protect ourselves from to from the season.

✓ So that is the way to protect ourselves from the season.

Phrase 'from to from' is redundant and ungrammatical; use a single preposition 'from'. Also 'the season' is vague but acceptable; could say 'from the weather' or 'from seasonal changes'. Suggestion: remove extra words and use 'from the season' or better 'from the weather'.

× Uh, yes, it's very changed because when I was young I can't eat, I cannot eat spicy foods and sushi.

✓ Uh, yes, it has changed a lot because when I was young I couldn't eat spicy foods or sushi.

'It's very changed' is unnatural; use present perfect 'it has changed' to describe a change from past to present. 'I can't eat' mixes present with past; use past tense 'couldn't' for the past inability. Also use 'or' not 'and' when listing items you could not eat. Suggestion: use 'has changed' and 'couldn't' and 'spicy foods or sushi'.

× However, right now I can eat spicy food and sushi and raw meat too. It's called Ukraine, Korea.

✓ However, right now I can eat spicy food, sushi, and raw meat too. It's common in Korea and Ukraine.

Add commas in list for clarity. Original 'It's called Ukraine, Korea' is incorrect phrasing; likely intended to say the practice is common in Korea and Ukraine. This is a sentence structure and word choice error. Suggestion: say 'It's common in Korea and Ukraine' to convey meaning.