食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples with brief reasons. Reduce fillers and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words (for example, also, because) to connect ideas and keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

範例: My favourite foods are Chinese street food and Korean ramen. For example, I enjoy Hakka noodles and Manchurian because they are flavorful and affordable, and I love Korean ramen because it’s comforting and easy to eat any time of day. I also enjoy an Indian sweet called fried milk cutlets occasionally.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence about childhood preferences, then contrast with present preferences using linking words (however, but). Avoid vague phrases and fillers; give one or two specific examples of homemade dishes and a short reason why you liked them.

範例: As a child I preferred homemade food, such as chapati and home-cooked vegetable curries, because they were comforting and cooked by my family. However, I also enjoyed simple Chinese or Korean dishes even then, so my tastes have broadened rather than changed completely.

建議: Answer clearly and use specific seasonal or festival examples. Use linking words (for example, during, when, and) and correct small grammar errors. Keep it concise and avoid vague fillers like 'you know'.

範例: Yes, I do. For example, at Christmas I bake pastries and small cupcakes at home, while during Diwali we make popular street-food items at home to celebrate with family. I also go out with friends on special occasions to cafés for fries, cake, or coffee.

建議: Give a direct answer first (yes/no) and then explain briefly with specific comparisons and reasons. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases. Use linking words (for instance, now, whereas) and provide one or two concrete examples of new favourites.

範例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. Whereas I mostly ate Indian homemade dishes as a child, now I prefer Chinese and Korean food—for instance, Hakka noodles and ramen—because I enjoy the different flavours and variety. I also sometimes eat simple Western dishes like omelettes.

× My favorite food is mostly fast food.

✓ My favorite food is mostly fast food.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence is acceptable. 'Mostly' correctly modifies 'fast food'. Keep as is.

× I love Chinese street food like Hakka noodles and Manchurian as well as I also like Korean ramen.

✓ I love Chinese street food like Hakka noodles and Manchurian, and I also like Korean ramen.

Original sentence incorrectly uses 'as well as' together with 'also', creating redundancy and a conjunction error. Use a single coordinating conjunction 'and' to connect two independent clauses, and keep 'also' only if needed. Suggestion: Use 'and I also like' or 'as well as' without 'I also'.

× I can eat Korean ramen at any time of day at anywhere.

✓ I can eat Korean ramen at any time of day and anywhere.

Using both 'at' before 'anywhere' is unnecessary and incorrect. Use 'and anywhere' or 'anywhere at any time'. Also 'at any time of day' is correct; connect ideas with 'and'.

× Like these are my 2 most favorite, uh, cuisines in traditional.

✓ These are my two favorite traditional cuisines.

Remove filler 'Like' and 'uh' and reorder words: 'two' should be spelled out in formal speech, 'favorite' doesn't need 'most' when using 'favorite', and 'traditional' should modify 'cuisines'. This fixes awkward word order and redundancy.

× In Indian food, I would like to say I love fried milk cutlets.

✓ Speaking of Indian food, I would like to say I love fried milk cutlets.

'In Indian food' is an awkward prepositional phrase here. Use 'Speaking of Indian food' or 'As for Indian food' to introduce the topic clearly.

× When I was a child, I think I did.

✓ When I was a child, I think I did.

Sentence is unclear but not strictly ungrammatical; however it is incomplete in meaning. Consider adding what you did: 'When I was a child, I think I liked the same foods.' This clarifies the past-tense reference.

× My choices have not been changed since childhood as I like straightforward Korean or even if it's Chinese, I used to like them in childhood too.

✓ My choices have not changed since childhood; I like straightforward Korean food, and I used to like Chinese food in childhood too.

Use present perfect 'have not changed' without passive 'been changed'. 'Straightforward Korean' needs 'food'. Split clauses for clarity and use 'used to' for past habits. Remove 'even if it's' which is confusing.

× But I think in when I was young, I love to eat homemade food, like, uh, the traditional chapati or you know, the homemade cooked vegetables.

✓ But I think when I was young, I loved to eat homemade food, such as traditional chapati and homemade cooked vegetables.

Remove extra 'in' and use past tense 'loved' for habitual past action. Use 'such as' instead of 'like, uh' and 'and' rather than 'or' to list examples. Avoid filler words.

× I used to eat them more.

✓ I used to eat them more often.

Add 'often' to clearly express frequency. 'Used to' correctly indicates a past repeated action.

× Yes. On a rare days, I would go out with my friends to celebrate.

✓ Yes. On rare days, I would go out with my friends to celebrate.

'A rare days' mixes singular article with plural noun. Use 'on rare days' or 'on a rare day'. The corrected phrase matches plural 'days'.

× We eat like in a cafe, if it's French fries, cake or, you know, coffees.

✓ We eat in a cafe: we might have French fries, cake, or coffee.

Remove filler 'like' and 'you know' and correct plural 'coffees' to 'coffee' as an uncountable item in this context or 'cups of coffee'. Use clearer clause structure.

× When it's Christmas, we I make pastries and small cupcakes at home.

✓ When it's Christmas, we make pastries and small cupcakes at home.

Remove the incorrect extra pronoun 'I' to match subject 'we'. Ensure subject and verb agree.

× When it's a traditional festival like Diwali, we make some street food at home.

✓ When there's a traditional festival like Diwali, we make some street food at home.

Original is acceptable, but 'When there's a traditional festival' clarifies occurrence. 'Make some street food at home' is fine.

× Since my childhood, I don't know, I think I remember I used to eat more of St. foods like Indian.

✓ Since my childhood, I think I remember I used to eat more street foods like Indian ones.

'St.' is unclear abbreviation; expand to 'street foods'. Use 'used to' for past habits and 'ones' to refer back to 'street foods'. Keep tense consistent.

× I don't remember. I have if I have ever tried Korean or Chinese restaurant when I was a child.

✓ I don't remember if I ever tried a Korean or Chinese restaurant when I was a child.

Original has duplicated 'I have' and incorrect word order. Use 'I don't remember if I ever tried' plus 'a' before 'Korean or Chinese restaurant'.

× But yeah, I like the choice is have been changed.

✓ But yeah, my choices have changed.

Replace awkward phrase 'I like the choice is have been changed' with correct present perfect 'my choices have changed' to indicate change from past to present.

× Now I like more Chinese and Korean and also I like some Western dishes too like omelette and you know, yeah.

✓ Now I like Chinese and Korean food more, and I also like some Western dishes, such as omelettes.

Reorder 'like more' to 'like ... more', remove redundant 'also' vs 'too', change 'omelette' to plural 'omelettes' for general preference, and remove filler 'you know, yeah'.