食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence (name the favourite food), then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitations and redundant phrases, and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'burgers, fries, and fried chicken' rather than 'chicken'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: My favourite food is fast food, especially burgers and fries. I enjoy it because it tastes good and smells appealing, and it’s very convenient for me as a busy student. Because I often study late, I don’t have time to cook, so I usually grab a quick meal from a nearby shop.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence about childhood preference, then give a specific reason and a brief supporting detail. Avoid filler words and incorrect grammar. Use linking words like 'because' or 'however' to connect ideas, and correct tense and word order (e.g., 'there weren't any stores selling them').

範例: When I was young, I loved burgers. I became curious after watching many mukbang videos that featured burgers, so I wanted to try them. However, there weren’t any shops selling burgers in my town at that time, so I had to wait until I moved to a bigger city.

建議: Good structure and clear contrast by season. Improve by removing repetition, correcting small grammar errors ('my menu depends'), and using varied vocabulary (e.g., 'lighter meals' and 'comforting hot dishes'). Add one brief specific example for each season to be more vivid.

範例: Yes, my food choices change with the seasons because my menu depends on the weather. In spring and summer I prefer lighter meals like salads or cold noodle dishes, which are refreshing. In winter I choose hot, comforting dishes such as hot pot or soups to keep warm.

建議: Answer directly and use correct tense and concise reasons. Start with a clear topic sentence ('No, it hasn't changed') then give 1–2 reasons using linking words such as 'because' and 'so'. Avoid repetition and informal fillers.

範例: No, my favourite food hasn’t changed. I loved fast food as a child because it tasted delicious and was a rare treat, and I still enjoy it now because it’s convenient when I’m busy studying.

× I really like eating fast food such as burger or fries, chicken because I think it's really nice.

✓ I really like eating fast food such as burgers, fries, and chicken because I think it's really nice.

The nouns 'burger', 'fries', and 'chicken' in this list should use correct plural or parallel forms. 'Burger' should be plural 'burgers' to match the general statement about types of food. Use commas to separate items and include 'and' before the last item for natural coordination. Suggestion: Use parallel plural nouns when listing types of food (e.g., 'burgers, fries, and chicken').

× It has a good taste and also the good smell.

✓ They have a good taste and a nice smell.

The subject refers to multiple foods (plural), so the singular verb 'has' is incorrect and 'good smell' sounds unnatural. Use plural pronoun/verb and a more natural adjective 'nice'. Suggestion: Match noun number and use natural collocations ('have a nice smell').

× Umm, I think it's convenient for me as a student because I don't have enough time to cook at home.

✓ Umm, I think it's convenient for me as a student because I don't have enough time to cook at home.

No grammatical error related to the allowed list; sentence is acceptable. No correction needed. Suggestion: None.

× Uh, when I was a kid, I really liked to try some burgers because, uh, I usually watch a lot of videos mukbang about burgers, so I really like to try it.

✓ Uh, when I was a kid, I really liked trying burgers because I usually watched a lot of mukbang videos about burgers, so I really wanted to try them.

Sequence of tenses and gerund use: 'liked trying' is a natural way to express past enjoyment. 'Usually watch' should be past 'usually watched' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'Mukbang videos' is the correct noun order. 'Try it' is mismatched singular; use 'try them' referring to burgers. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistent and use gerund for enjoyment verbs (liked trying); ensure pronoun number agrees with the noun ('them' for burgers).

× But at that time in Vietnam, it's, uh, don't have any store sell it.

✓ But at that time in Vietnam, there weren't any stores that sold them.

The original mixes 'it's' and 'don't have', causing subject-verb and existential construction errors. Use 'there were' (past tense of there be) for existence in the past, plural 'stores', and past 'sold'. Use 'them' to refer to burgers. Suggestion: Use 'there was/were' to say something existed/didn't exist in the past and match number (stores/them).

× Yes, of course, because my menu is depends on the weather and also the times of the year.

✓ Yes, of course, because my menu depends on the weather and the time of year.

'Is depends' incorrectly combines auxiliary 'is' with the simple present 'depends'; use 'depends' alone. 'Times of the year' is awkward; 'time of year' or 'seasons' is natural. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions ('my menu depends') and prefer natural expressions ('time of year' or 'seasons').

× For instance, like in the spring or in the summer, I I prefer to eat something light and I can eat it easily.

✓ For instance, in the spring or summer, I prefer to eat something light that I can eat easily.

Remove the duplicate 'I'. 'For instance, like' is redundant; choose one. Replace 'it' with a relative clause 'that I can eat easily' to clarify reference. Suggestion: Avoid redundancy and ensure pronouns clearly refer to a noun ('something light that I can eat easily').

× But in the winter I prefer to eat something hot like hot pot.

✓ But in winter I prefer to eat something hot, like hot pot.

Grammatically acceptable but improved punctuation and article use: omit 'the' before seasons in general statements ('in winter') and add a comma before the example. Suggestion: Use 'in winter' for general seasonal preferences and set off examples with a comma.

× Oh, I can say that is no, because when I was a kid I prefer to eat fast food and also up until now I also like to eat it because when I was young I think it is really delicious and also I cannot eat it often.

✓ Oh, I would say no, because when I was a kid I preferred to eat fast food and even up until now I still like to eat it because when I was young I thought it was really delicious and I couldn't eat it often.

Tense inconsistency: use past tense 'preferred' and 'thought' for past time references. 'Can say that is no' is awkward; 'I would say no' is natural. 'Cannot eat it often' should be past 'couldn't' when referring to childhood. Suggestion: Keep past time references in past tense and use polite modal 'would' for opinions ('I would say no').

× So I really like it, but up until now I think it's really convenient.

✓ So I really like it, and even now I think it's really convenient.

'But up until now' conflicts with the positive statement; 'and even now' better connects continuity of preference. 'Up until now' often pairs with a contrast implying change; use 'even now' to indicate continued state. Suggestion: Choose conjunctions that accurately reflect the intended contrast or continuity ('and even now' for continuity).