食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence naming the favourite food, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (taste, aroma, who makes it) using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Also correct small errors (e.g., “make me so happy” not “so ha brainstorming”).

範例: My favourite food is chicken biryani. I love it because the chicken is well-spiced and the rice has a rich aroma. Moreover, my mother makes it at home, which adds a comforting, homemade flavour.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar: begin with a clear statement about childhood preferences, then give specific examples and reasons. Use linking words (for example, especially) and avoid hesitations and unfinished sentences. Correct plural and article errors (e.g., “spicy ones” → “spicy foods”; “I enjoyed gulab jamun”).

範例: When I was young, I enjoyed many kinds of food, but I especially loved desserts. For example, I often ate gulab jamun because it was very sweet and comforting.

建議: Be more specific and coherent: start with a direct answer about seasonal changes, then give concrete examples with linking words (for instance, in winter… whereas in summer…). Remove unclear phrases and correct odd wording (e.g., “a loud cold footage” is meaningless).

範例: Yes, I do. For instance, in winter I prefer hot dishes like soup and stews to stay warm, whereas in summer I choose cold desserts such as ice cream or fruit salads.

建議: Good structure and clear meaning. Improve accuracy and naturalness: correct subject-verb agreement (“habits have changed”), avoid repetition, and add one linking word to explain cause and effect. You can give a brief example of a specific vegetable or dish to be more concrete.

範例: Yes, my eating habits have changed since childhood. I rarely ate vegetables before, but now I eat them regularly—for example, steamed spinach and salads—because I want to stay healthy and energetic.

× There are lots of food which I love.

✓ There is a lot of food that I love.

Use singular 'a lot of' or 'lots of' with uncountable noun 'food'; 'There are' requires a plural count noun. Also use 'that' instead of 'which' in restrictive clauses.

× The authentic taste of the chicken as well as rice and aroma which my mother made make me so ha brainstorming.

✓ The authentic taste of the chicken, the rice and the aroma that my mother made make me so happy.

Sentence had several issues: 'ha brainstorming' is not correct and likely meant 'happy'; list items need articles and commas; use 'that' for restrictive clause; original verb 'make' is OK with plural subject 'taste, rice and aroma'. Clearer ordering and word choice fix meaning.

× When I saw it, I loved it.

✓ When I saw it, I loved it.

Sentence is grammatically correct but may be unnecessary repetition; keep as is. No change needed.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? -> I loved all sorts of food when I was young.

✓ I loved all sorts of food when I was young.

Sentence correctly uses past tense 'loved' to match question about past; no correction required.

× I particularly loved desserts even more than a spicy ones.

✓ I particularly loved desserts even more than spicy ones.

Remove the article 'a' before plural 'spicy ones'; 'a' cannot be used with plural nouns.

× I allowed uh, gulab jamun, which is very delicious and.

✓ I always allowed myself gulab jamun, which is very delicious.

Original used 'allowed' incorrectly; likely intended 'always ate' or 'always allowed myself'. Ending 'and.' is incomplete. Use 'which is very delicious' to complete the thought.

× It completely depends on my mood.

✓ It completely depends on my mood.

This present simple sentence is correct to express habitual truth; no change required.

× If it's winter I would prefer to have hot food, whereas in summer I like to have ice creams or cakes.

✓ If it's winter, I prefer to have hot food, whereas in summer I like to have ice cream or cakes.

Use simple present 'prefer' for general preferences; 'would prefer' can be used but simple present is more natural here. Use uncountable 'ice cream' for general preference or 'ice creams' only when plural servings are intended.

× A loud cold footage.

✓ A loud cold footage.

This fragment is unclear and ungrammatical; likely the speaker meant 'I feel cold' or 'a loud, cold atmosphere' depending on context. Recommend rephrasing to a complete sentence, e.g. 'It feels very cold.'

× Yes, the food habits has changed since my childhood.

✓ Yes, my food habits have changed since my childhood.

'Food habits' is plural so use plural verb 'have'; also more natural to say 'my food habits'.

× I usually never had much vegetables during the early times, but now I prefer to have more to keep me fit and active.

✓ I usually never had many vegetables during the early years, but now I prefer to eat more to keep myself fit and active.

Use 'many' with countable plural 'vegetables' rather than 'much'. 'Early times' is awkward; 'early years' is better. 'Eat more' is clearer than 'have more'. Use reflexive 'myself' for emphasis.

× I'm more concerned about my health, so I eat nutritious food nowadays.

✓ I'm more concerned about my health, so I eat nutritious food nowadays.

Sentence is correct; pronoun use is appropriate. No change needed.