食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, give two brief reasons with linking words, and avoid filler words like 'obviously' and 'so it's good'. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'crust' instead of 'dough' if you mean base) and limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I love pizza because it's perfect for sharing at parties and brings people together. In addition, there are many types of crust and toppings to choose from, so I can always try new flavors.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and combine supporting details with linking words. Reduce repetition and avoid hesitation. Use specific vocabulary (e.g., 'decorating cupcakes with colored frosting and sprinkles'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: As a child I loved sweet treats, especially decorating cupcakes. I enjoyed choosing colored frosting and sprinkles, which made the process creative and fun.

建議: Begin directly and reduce hesitation. Use correct names and brief explanation: say the dish name confidently and describe ingredients concisely. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'for instance' and avoid vague phrases like 'we can eat normally'.

範例: Yes. For example, on New Year's Day we eat tteokguk, a traditional Korean soup made with sliced rice cakes, egg, and broth. It is a special seasonal dish that people usually enjoy to celebrate the new year.

建議: Answer directly and give concise reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words and awkward phrasing like 'my taste is getting changed.' Use precise expressions such as 'my tastes have changed' and give a short explanation why (e.g., health, exposure to new recipes).

範例: Yes, my tastes have changed. I used to avoid vegetables like broccoli and eggplant, but now I include them in my cooking because I have learned to enjoy their flavors and I want to eat healthier.

× My favorite food is pizza, obviously, because it's really good food for the party and everything I can share with other people.

✓ My favorite food is pizza, obviously, because it is great for parties and I can share it with other people.

Use of adjectives/adverbs and noun phrases: 'really good food for the party' is awkward and unidiomatic. Use the adjective 'great' and plural 'parties' to match general meaning. Replace 'everything I can share with other people' with 'I can share it with other people' to make the sentence clear and concise.

× And the second reason is that I have a lot of variety of dough and toppings that I can choose, so it's good.

✓ The second reason is that there is a lot of variety in doughs and toppings I can choose from, so it is enjoyable.

Quantifier and noun form: 'a lot of variety of' is incorrect; use 'a lot of variety in' or 'a wide variety of'. 'Dough' as a countable here should be 'doughs' or change structure to 'types of dough'. Also add 'from' with 'choose' to be grammatically correct.

× When I was young, I think I really liked some sweets like desserts.

✓ When I was young, I really liked sweets and desserts.

Redundant modal/time reference: mixing 'When I was young' with 'I think' weakens the past timeframe. Use simple past 'I really liked' and simplify 'some sweets like desserts' to 'sweets and desserts' for clarity.

× I remember that I was really into the cupcake because I could choose the whipped cream with color.

✓ I remember that I was really into cupcakes because I could choose colored whipped cream.

Awkward noun phrase and modifier order: 'the cupcake' should be plural 'cupcakes' to express general preference. 'Whipped cream with color' is unidiomatic; use 'colored whipped cream'. This is not truly passive voice error but fits 'incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs' and restructuring; however per list select 21 as closest for structural misuse.

× So it was very fun to me that I could decorate a lot of cupcakes with some toppings.

✓ It was very fun for me to decorate many cupcakes with different toppings.

Incorrect prepositional phrase and quantifier order: 'very fun to me that I could' is unidiomatic; use 'fun for me to'. 'A lot of cupcakes with some toppings' is vague; use 'many cupcakes with different toppings' for natural phrasing.

× Umm, there is very traditional Korean dish which is called takuk, and we eat that food on the new year.

✓ Umm, there is a very traditional Korean dish called tteokguk, and we eat it on New Year's Day.

Preposition and article errors: missing article 'a' before 'very traditional'. Use 'called' without 'which is' for a defining clause. 'on the new year' is wrong; use 'on New Year's Day'. Also correct romanization to standard 'tteokguk' and replace 'that food' with 'it'.

× So, umm, that's made of rice cake and some eggs and some white soup.

✓ It is made of rice cakes, eggs, and a white broth.

Use of past participle 'made' is fine but surrounding nouns and articles are incorrect. 'Rice cake' should be plural 'rice cakes' or 'tteok (rice cakes)'. 'Some white soup' is awkward; 'a white broth' is more natural. Also replace 'that's' with 'it is' for formality.

× This is really good and we can eat normally, but we especially look for it on the New Year day.

✓ It is really good and we usually eat it, but we especially look for it on New Year's Day.

Adverb placement and word choice: 'we can eat normally' is awkward; 'we usually eat it' fits. 'the New Year day' should be 'New Year's Day'. Place adverbs near verbs they modify.

× Yes umm, I remember I didn't used to eat broccoli, eggplant and mushrooms but now I really love to put those ingredients in my food when I cook.

✓ Yes, I remember I didn't use to eat broccoli, eggplant, and mushrooms, but now I really like to add those ingredients when I cook.

Past tense/infinitive: after 'didn't' the base form 'use' (not 'used') is required: 'didn't use to'. Also 'love to put' is acceptable but 'like to add' is more natural. Add commas and adjust list punctuation.

× I think umm, my taste is getting changed and also my favorite uh food which is great because now I eat more vegetables.

✓ I think my taste is changing, and that's great because now I eat more vegetables.

Present tense and sentence structure: 'is getting changed' is passive/unidiomatic; use active 'is changing' or 'my tastes have changed'. 'my favorite uh food which is great' is a fragmented clause; replace with 'that's great' to refer to the change. Ensure subject-verb clarity.