食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and small fragments, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct basic grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, infinitive forms). Keep to under five sentences.

範例: My favourite food is pizza because I make it myself and I think it tastes great. For example, I use fresh tomatoes, mozzarella and local herbs which give it a rich flavour. I also enjoy eating pizza when I visit Antalya because the seaside restaurants serve it with a nice view.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, give a concise reason, and use correct verb forms and linking words. Replace literal translations (e.g., 'she learned me make') with natural English (e.g., 'she taught me to make it'). Provide one specific example or memory.

範例: When I was young, I loved chicken because my mother cooked it very well. She taught me how to make her special roast chicken, which had garlic and lemon, and I remember the whole family gathering for that meal.

建議: Answer directly and use correct tense and vocabulary. Explain with one or two specific examples and linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'so'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'expense ex' and use phrases such as 'try local dishes' or 'experience local cuisine'.

範例: Yes, I try different foods at different times of the year. For example, when I travel I taste local dishes so I can experience the country’s cuisine, such as seafood in coastal regions or spicy stews in colder areas.

建議: Give a clear yes/no topic sentence and then explain why with specific reasons. Remove filler words (uh, umm) and use correct grammar (e.g., 'I can't cook it' or 'I don't eat it as often'). Keep it concise and coherent with a linking word like 'however' or 'now'.

範例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. As a child I loved my mother’s chicken because she cooked it very well; however, now I rarely eat it because I don’t cook it myself and prefer other dishes like pasta or salads.

× My favorite food is pizza because my because I make really delicious.

✓ My favorite food is pizza because I make it really delicious.

The original sentence misuses words and omits the object 'it'. 'Really' should modify the adjective 'delicious', and 'make' needs an object. Rearranging to 'I make it really delicious' fixes word order and ensures correct adjective use. Suggestion: include the object after 'make' and place adverb before the adjective.

× And. And I like. Eat in Antalya.

✓ And I like eating in Antalya.

The fragmentary original has incorrect sentence structure and a bare infinitive 'eat' where a gerund is needed to express liking an activity. Use 'I like eating' for a general preference. Also remove unnecessary 'And.' repetitions. Suggestion: combine into one coherent sentence using the gerund.

× When I was young, my favorite kind of food was chicken, because my favorite my mother made really delicious and.

✓ When I was young, my favorite kind of food was chicken because my mother made it really delicious.

The sentence repeats words and omits the object for 'made'. Use past tense 'made' (already correct) and include 'it' as the object. 'Really' should modify 'delicious'. Remove the extra 'my favorite'. Suggestion: eliminate repeated phrases and supply missing objects.

× She learned me make.

✓ She taught me to make it.

'Learned me' is incorrect; English uses 'teach' for someone instructing another. Also, after 'teach' we use an object and either the base verb or 'to' infinitive depending on structure. 'Taught me to make it' or 'taught me how to make it' are correct. Suggestion: use 'taught me to...' or 'taught me how to...'.

× Yes, when I go travel I ate kind of countries food because I want expense ex.

✓ Yes, when I travel I eat the food of different countries because I want to experience them.

Tense and verb forms are inconsistent: 'go travel' should be 'travel', present simple for habitual actions. 'I ate' should be 'I eat'. 'Kind of countries food' is ungrammatical; use 'the food of different countries' or 'food from different countries'. 'I want expense ex' seems to aim for 'I want to experience them'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct noun phrases and infinitive 'to experience'.

× And yes, uh, when I was a child, uh, my favorite food was chicken and because my mother uh, made make umm, really delicious and uh, now, uh, I don't like it, uh, because I don't, I can't uh, cooked.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my favorite food was chicken because my mother made it really delicious, but now I don't like it because I can't cook it.

Multiple issues: remove filler words and fix verb forms. 'Made make' should be 'made it'. Contrast requires 'but now'. 'I can't cooked' is wrong — modal 'can't' must be followed by base verb 'cook'. Also include the object 'it' after 'cook'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence, use correct past 'made' and present modal + base verb 'can't cook'.