食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 간결하고 문법적으로 정확한 문장으로 핵심을 먼저 말한 뒤, 구체적인 재료와 이유를 연결어(예: because, for example, and)로 자연스럽게 이어 쓰세요. 어색한 단어 선택과 발음 채움(umm)도 줄이세요. 예) 주제문 제시 → 구체적 재료 나열 → 이유(편리함, 맛, 영양 등) 제시 순으로 구성하세요.

範例: My favourite food is kimbap because it combines many ingredients in one roll. For example, it often contains rice, carrots, ham, and imitation crab, which makes it nutritious and convenient to eat on the go.

建議: 질문에 직접 답하는 주제문을 먼저 말하고, 구체적인 음식과 이유(맛, 기억 등)를 간단히 덧붙이세요. 문장 연결이 매끄럽지 않으므로 linking words(for example, because, and)로 논리를 강화하세요. 'macaroni'는 상황에 따라 정확한 표현(cookies, cake, macaroni salad 등)을 사용하세요.

範例: When I was young, I preferred sweet foods. For example, I often ate desserts such as cakes and cookies because I loved their sweet taste and the happy memories of birthday parties.

建議: 간단명료하게 계절별 식습관을 설명하세요. 불필요한 반복과 망설임(MMM, we are, we are) 을 제거하고 계절별 대표 음식 이름과 이유(시원함, 제철 재료 등)를 연결어로 설명하세요. 예시로 한두 계절의 구체적 음식과 이유만 말해도 충분합니다.

範例: Usually I don't change what I eat, but in Korea we have seasonal dishes. For example, in summer people enjoy cold soybean noodle soup because it is refreshing, and in winter kimchi stew is popular because it is warm and comforting.

建議: 명확한 시제와 문장 구조를 사용해 변화 여부를 먼저 말한 뒤, 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 반복되는 부정 표현과 단절된 문장을 고치고, 과거와 현재를 비교할 때는 'when I was young'과 'now'를 분명히 구분하세요.

範例: Yes, my tastes have changed. When I was young I preferred sweets and avoided savory dishes, but now I enjoy a variety of savory meals because I have learned to appreciate different flavors.

× My favorite food is kimbap because it has many ingredients in one food like carrot, umm ham, crabs or another things and it can be barias.

✓ My favorite food is kimbap because it has many ingredients in one dish like carrot, ham, crab, and other things, and it can vary.

The student used 'many' and 'another things' incorrectly; 'many' is okay but 'in one food' should be 'in one dish'. 'Crabs' should be singular 'crab' when listed as an ingredient. 'Another things' is ungrammatical; use 'other things'. 'Barias' is a misspelling of 'varies'. Suggestion: use 'dish' for prepared food, use parallel singular/plural forms in a list, and use 'vary'/'varies' correctly.

× When I was young I liked a food with sweet flavour I like.

✓ When I was young I liked sweet-flavored foods.

Redundant and awkward phrasing 'a food with sweet flavour I like' mixes present and past. Use past tense 'liked' and plural 'foods' for general preference. Suggestion: simplify to 'I liked sweet-flavored foods.'

× The I like a kind of dessert like cakes, macaroni.

✓ I liked desserts such as cakes and macarons.

'The I like' is ungrammatical; 'a kind of dessert like cakes, macaroni' mixes singular 'a kind' with plural examples. 'Macaroni' is a pasta not a dessert; likely 'macarons' was intended. Suggestion: use 'desserts such as' and correct 'macarons'.

× MMM, usually not, but there are many season food in Korea like in summer we ate, we are, we are eating soy noodle, soybean noodle, Kong soup and I enjoy eating them and in.

✓ Hmm, usually no, but there are many seasonal foods in Korea. In summer we eat kongguksu (soybean noodle soup) and I enjoy eating it.

Tense and form are inconsistent: 'we ate, we are, we are eating' mixes past, present continuous and present. For a general habit use present simple 'we eat'. 'season food' should be 'seasonal foods'. 'Kong soup' is better 'kongguksu' or 'soybean noodle soup' and treat it as singular 'it' or plural 'them' depending; here use singular. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct compound nouns and number agreement.

× Yes, when I was young, I don't like dishes because I don't. I didn't. Into eating, but I like eating no so I want I like eating dishes.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I didn't like certain dishes because I wasn't into eating them, but now I like eating dishes.

The student mixes present 'don't like' with past context 'when I was young'; use past 'didn't like'. Fragments 'I don't. I didn't.' are incomplete. 'Into eating' needs 'into' followed by object 'them'. 'I like eating no so I want I like eating dishes' is garbled. Suggestion: form a clear past clause ('I didn't like... because I wasn't into eating them') and contrast with present ('but now I like them').