食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, grammatical and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., use 'is made of', 'is topped with') and avoid redundant phrases.

範例: I really like sushi. It is a Japanese dish made of seasoned rice topped with various fish such as salmon or tuna. I especially enjoy salmon nigiri because the rice and fish balance well.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and clean up the grammar. Use a linking phrase to explain the reason and avoid sentence fragments. Be specific about feelings or occasions when you ate them.

範例: When I was young, I loved sweet treats such as cupcakes, lollipops and cotton candy. I ate them mostly at birthday parties and fairs because their sweetness made me feel excited and happy.

建議: Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific example using clear linking words. Improve sentence structure and verb forms (e.g., 'I eat', 'I choose to eat'). Specify why you prefer them in that season.

範例: Not usually, but I do eat some seasonal foods at certain times of year. For example, I eat durian in June and July because that is when the fruit is freshest and most flavorful.

建議: Use a more formal reply (avoid 'Nope') and correct verb tense. Give a brief reason for the unchanged preference and avoid exaggeration or unclear numbers. Keep it to one or two sentences.

範例: No, my favourite food has not changed. I have liked sushi since I was seven because I enjoy the fresh flavors, and I still prefer it now at seventeen.

× It the sushi is made of rice and on top of the rice will cover different type of fish like for example salmon, tuna or thorough.

✓ Sushi is made of rice, and on top of the rice are different types of fish, for example salmon, tuna, or toro.

Errors: missing article and incorrect sentence structure. 'It the sushi' is ungrammatical; start with 'Sushi is made of rice'. 'on top of the rice will cover different type of fish' uses incorrect verb placement and singular 'type'. Use passive/active correct structure: 'are different types of fish' and 'for example' before examples. 'thorough' is a misspelling of 'toro' (tuna belly) or should be 'tuna' already listed. Suggestion: write clear subject-verb order, use plural 'types' for multiple items, and check vocabulary spelling.

× When I was young, I used to eat sweet foods like cupcakes, lollipops, and cotton candy. This is because I love the sweetness that give me when I was eating these foods which make my. Which make me happier?

✓ When I was young, I used to eat sweet foods like cupcakes, lollipops, and cotton candy. This was because I loved the sweetness they gave me when I ate these foods, which made me happier.

Errors: tense inconsistency and sentence fragments. The response refers to past habits, so use past tense throughout: 'This was because I loved' and 'they gave me' and 'ate' and 'made me happier'. Also 'which make my. Which make me happier?' is fragmented and incorrect; combine into one clause 'which made me happier.' Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and avoid sentence fragments.

× Not every food will eat at different times of the year, but for some food, for instance like durian, some seasonal fruit, I will choose to eat during June or July as these are the months which the durians are the best time to taste it.

✓ Not every food is eaten at different times of the year, but for some foods, for instance durian and other seasonal fruits, I choose to eat them in June or July because those months are the best time to taste durians.

Errors: article and noun number errors and awkward passive phrasing. 'Not every food will eat' is wrong; use passive 'is eaten' or active with subject. Use plural 'foods' and 'fruits' for generalizations. 'I will choose to eat during June or July' should be 'I choose to eat them in June or July.' 'the durians are the best time to taste it' mixes plural/ singular; correct to 'those months are the best time to taste durians.' Suggestion: match singular/plural and keep logical subject, verb, object order.

× Nope, I like sushi since I was 7 years old and now I'm 17 years old. So from 7 years old to 70 years old I did not change my choice.

✓ Nope, I have liked sushi since I was 7 years old and now I'm 17. So from age 7 to 17 I have not changed my choice.

Errors: incorrect tense for duration and wrong number '70'. Use present perfect 'have liked' with 'since' to show a state continuing to present. 'I did not change my choice' should be 'I have not changed my choice.' Also 'from 7 years old to 70 years old' is incorrect and likely a typo; correct logical range is '7 to 17.' Suggestion: use present perfect for actions/states continuing to now and check numbers for accuracy.