食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (why you like it, when you eat it) using linking words. Correct grammar (use present perfect or past correctly) and avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g., "a sushi tea restaurant").

範例: My favourite food is sushi. I’ve loved it since childhood because I enjoy the delicate flavours of fresh fish and vinegared rice. For example, I often go to a local sushi bar on weekends, where I try different types like salmon nigiri and tuna rolls, which keeps things interesting.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and correct tense. Provide one or two specific reasons and link them coherently. Avoid unclear words and fragments, and use accurate vocabulary for ingredients and simple connectors ('because', 'so', 'and').

範例: When I was young, I liked fried rice. My mother made it often because it was quick and inexpensive, usually with egg, vegetables and a bit of soy sauce, which made it comforting and tasty.

建議: Stay on-topic and use clear seasonal contrasts. Use present simple to describe habits and give one or two concrete examples tied to seasons or occasions, connected with linking words ('for example', 'in summer', 'during festivals'). Avoid unrelated or unclear items and incorrect grammar.

範例: Yes, I do. For example, in winter I prefer warm, hearty dishes like stews and fried rice, while in summer I eat lighter foods such as sushi and fresh salads. Also, during festivals I sometimes try special sweets like mochi.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence stating the change, then explain reasons using linking words ('because', 'so', 'now'). Use correct tense and grammar, avoid repetition, and add a specific detail (when or why you switched). Keep it to two or three sentences.

範例: Yes, it has changed. I used to love fried rice because my mother cooked it often, but now I prefer sushi because I enjoy trying different flavours and textures at sushi restaurants.

× I ate sushi since I was a child.

✓ I have eaten sushi since I was a child.

The sentence expresses an action that started in the past and continues to the present, so present perfect tense ('have eaten') is required rather than simple past ('ate'). Use 'have/has + past participle' for ongoing past-to-present situations.

× Sushi is a traditional Japanese style food.

✓ Sushi is a traditional Japanese food.

'Japanese style food' is awkward and wordy. Use the adjective-noun order ('Japanese food'). Removing 'style' makes the phrase natural and grammatically correct.

× I always eat sushi and a sushi tea restaurant.

✓ I always eat sushi at a sushi restaurant.

The original mixes nouns incorrectly and uses no preposition. Use the preposition 'at' to indicate location and correct 'sushi tea restaurant' to 'sushi restaurant' (unless 'tea' was intended). This fixes noun phrase and preposition use.

× When you were young. So I like fried rice when I was young because my mom always cook it for me.

✓ When I was young, I liked fried rice because my mom always cooked it for me.

The student repeated 'you' incorrectly and used present tense 'like' and 'cook' for past events. Change subject to 'I', use past tense 'liked' and past simple 'cooked'. Also combine fragments into one sentence for correct structure.

× The test is very delicious and the ingredient is very cheap.

✓ The taste is very delicious and the ingredients are very cheap.

'Test' is a misspelling for 'taste'. 'Ingredient' should be plural 'ingredients' to match meaning. Use plural form and correct noun spelling.

× It is only need price.

✓ It only needs cheap ingredients.

The original is ungrammatical. To express that the dish requires only inexpensive items, use 'only needs' + plural noun 'ingredients' or rephrase as 'It only requires a small cost.' This corrects verb form and noun choice.

× Butter, uh, and egg, yeah.

✓ Butter and egg, yes.

This fragment should be a simple list: 'Butter and egg.' Remove filler sounds and add a suitable affirmative word if needed. Use plural 'eggs' if referring to more than one.

× Yeah, of course, last year I have eaten fried rice and this year I love eating sushi, federal food like pistachio, Dubai mochi, and it tastes very good.

✓ Yeah, of course. Last year I ate fried rice, and this year I love eating sushi and seasonal foods like pistachio and Dubai mochi; they taste very good.

Mixing present perfect 'have eaten' with a specific past time ('last year') is incorrect; use simple past 'ate'. 'Federal food' is likely wrong — 'seasonal' or 'local' fits better. Ensure plural agreement 'they taste' for multiple items. Also fix punctuation and run-on structure.

× It's very.

✓ It's very good.

The fragment 'It's very.' is incomplete; 'very' needs a modifier like an adjective. Add 'good' to complete the thought.

× Yeah, my favorite food has changed because when I was a child I love eating fried rice.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed because when I was a child I loved eating fried rice.

The clause 'when I was a child' refers to past time, so use past tense 'loved' not present 'love'. The main clause correctly uses present perfect 'has changed' to indicate change up to now.

× And for now it's so boring to eating fried rice because my favorite food now is sushi.

✓ And now it's so boring to eat fried rice because my favorite food is sushi.

After 'to' use the base verb 'eat', not the '-ing' form. Also 'for now' can be simplified to 'now' and avoid repetition of 'now'. This corrects verb form and improves clarity.

× It's very tasty.

✓ It is very tasty.

This sentence is grammatically correct but 'It's' contraction can be expanded if formality is desired. No tense change needed; provided correction only expands contraction for clarity.