食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장 구조와 문법을 정확히 고치세요. 답변이 단순하고 반복적이며 어색한 표현(예: "As listed", "I fixed my habit drinking milk")이 있습니다. 주제문으로 직접 답한 뒤 이유를 한두 문장으로 구체화하고 연결어를 사용하세요. 또한 단어 선택을 자연스럽게 바꾸세요.

範例: My favourite drink is milk. I grew up drinking it every day, so it became a habit. Because of this routine, I still enjoy having milk in the morning as it feels comforting and energizing.

建議: 불분명한 단어 사용과 문법 오류를 고치세요. 음식 이름이 정확하지 않아 이해가 어렵습니다. 간단한 주제문을 제시하고, 구체적인 설명(맛, 질감, 이유)을 연결어와 함께 덧붙이세요. 짧은 문장 여러 개로 끊지 말고 논리적으로 이어지게 말하세요.

範例: When I was young, I loved eating chocolate-coated biscuits. I still enjoy them occasionally because they are sweet and crunchy, and they remind me of happy moments with my family.

建議: 너무 장황하고 어색한 표현(예: 'It was I it passed such terrible')을 정리하세요. 부정문 사용시 명확히 말하고, 과거 경험을 설명할 때는 원인과 결과를 연결하는 문장으로 구성하세요. 감정 표현은 더 자연스러운 어휘로 바꾸세요.

範例: Not really. I usually stick to familiar dishes because once, when I was a child, I tried a new food my mother suggested and disliked it so much that I felt uncomfortable. Since then, I have been reluctant to try unfamiliar foods.

建議: 문법(시제와 주어-동사 일치)을 바로잡고 문장을 간결하게 만드세요. 좋아하는 음식이 어떻게 변했는지 구체적인 이유(취향 변화, 건강, 경험 등)를 설명하고 예를 들 때는 명확히 연결어를 사용하세요.

範例: Yes, my tastes have changed since childhood. For instance, I preferred simple foods like milk before, but now I enjoy sushi because I appreciate its fresh flavors. However, sometimes I avoid it because of personal sensitivity to raw fish.

× As listed, I think that I fixed my habit drinking milk.

✓ As mentioned, I think that I fixed my habit of drinking milk.

The phrase 'habit drinking milk' is missing the preposition 'of' which links 'habit' to the gerund 'drinking'. Also 'As listed' is unnatural; 'As mentioned' is more appropriate. Use 'habit of + -ing' to express a regular behavior. Suggestion: say 'I fixed my habit of drinking milk' or better 'I formed the habit of drinking milk'.

× When I was a child, I used to eat Kindle Goonies.

✓ When I was a child, I used to eat 'Kindle Goonies'.

The sentence structure is acceptable for past habitual action using 'used to'. If 'Kindle Goonies' is a food name it should be set off appropriately; otherwise no tense change needed. Ensure proper capitalization and punctuation. Suggestion: confirm the correct food name and use 'used to' for past habits.

× To be honest, I still eat that good.

✓ To be honest, I still eat that; it tastes good.

'Eat that good' incorrectly uses the adjective 'good' to modify the verb 'eat'. Use an object then a comment about its taste: 'it tastes good' or use the adverb 'well' if describing how you eat. Suggestion: 'I still eat that; it tastes good.' or 'I still eat that food; it is good.'.

× It keeps me. Flux. So flavor.

✓ It gives me energy and has a strong flavor.

Fragments like 'It keeps me. Flux. So flavor.' are incomplete and unclear. Combine ideas into a full sentence: subject + verb + object/complement. 'Keeps me' needs an object (keeps me what?) and 'flux' is unclear. Suggestion: replace with 'It keeps me energized and has a strong flavor.'.

× Not really actually I don't like trying new food.

✓ Not really; actually, I don't like trying new foods.

Use plural 'foods' or 'new food' as uncountable with different meaning. Comma or semicolon is needed after 'Not really' for clarity. Suggestion: 'I don't like trying new foods.' or 'I don't really like trying new food.'.

× That's because when I was a child I tried new food that my mom recommended.

✓ That's because when I was a child I tried new foods that my mom recommended.

When referring to various items, use plural 'foods'. The past tense 'tried' is correct for a past event. Suggestion: 'I tried new foods my mom recommended.'.

× It was I it passed such terrible and it was trauma for me.

✓ It was terrible and traumatising for me.

The original is ungrammatical and contains redundant pronouns and wrong verb phrases ('it passed such terrible'). Use a single clear adjective and correct noun form: 'trauma' -> adjective 'traumatising' or noun 'a trauma'. Suggestion: 'It was terrible and traumatised me.' or 'It was a traumatic experience for me.'.

× Yes, I think that I has like tainted my favorite food is because it is really different to my favorite when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I think that my taste has changed; my favourite food now is very different from what it was when I was a child.

Multiple errors: 'I has' should be 'I have' but the intended meaning is 'my taste has changed'. 'Tainted' is inappropriate here. Use 'different from' not 'different to' in many varieties of English (both can be used but 'different from' is safe). Also restructure into clear clauses. Suggestion: 'My taste has changed; my favourite food now is very different from when I was a child.'.

× For example, I like sushi now but I can't eat it.

✓ For example, I like sushi now, but I can't eat it.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable; just add a comma before 'but' for clarity. 'Like' present tense is correct to express current preference. Suggestion: keep as 'I like sushi now, but I can't eat it.'.