食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 발음 오류를 줄이고 문장을 명확한 구조로 바꾸세요. 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 이유와 간단한 예시를 연결어로 이어주면 자연스럽습니다. 예: ‘My favourite food is tiramisu.’ 라고 명확히 말한 뒤 ‘because’로 이유를 연결하고 ‘I often make it at home as a hobby’ 같은 구체적 활동을 덧붙이세요. 또한 불필요한 단어(Drams, cake 등)를 제거하고 단어 선택을 정확히 하세요.

範例: My favourite food is tiramisu because I often make it at home as a hobby. I enjoy preparing the coffee-soaked ladyfingers and mascarpone cream, and I usually bake it for family gatherings, so it always feels special.

建議: 문장을 간결하고 문법적으로 정확하게 고치세요. 과거 취향을 말할 때는 과거형을 사용하고, 현재와의 비교는 ‘but now’로 명확히 연결합니다. 구체적인 음식 예시를 명확하게 제시하고 이유를 덧붙이세요. 또한 모호한 표현(‘powerful color’)을 피하세요.

範例: When I was young, I loved junk food such as cup noodles and brightly colored snacks, but now I prefer healthy food because I care more about nutrition and my digestion.

建議: 계절에 따른 식습관 변화를 말할 때는 계절과 음식의 구체적 연결을 보여주세요. 주제문 뒤에 ‘for example’나 ‘in summer’ 같은 연결어로 구체적 사례(예: cold noodles in summer, hot soups in winter)를 제시하면 좋습니다. 문장 길이는 최대 3~4개로 유지하고 반복이나 불필요한 단어를 제거하세요.

範例: Yes. In Korea we eat different foods in different seasons. For example, I enjoy cold noodles and chilled fruits in summer, while in winter I prefer hot soups and stews to keep warm.

建議: 과거와 현재의 선호 변화를 명확한 비교 구조로 표현하세요. ‘When I was young, I preferred X, but now I prefer Y’ 형태를 사용하고, X와 Y는 실제 음식명으로 정확히 적으세요. 오타와 알 수 없는 단어(‘8 donkey’)를 제거하고 이유를 간단히 덧붙이면 점수가 올라갑니다.

範例: Yes. When I was young, I preferred sweet snacks and fast food, but now I prefer seafood because I enjoy the fresh flavours and it feels healthier.

× My favorite food is tiramis because I often making the tiramisu homemade turmis at my home.

✓ My favorite food is tiramisu because I often make tiramisu at home.

The sentence has article and verb form issues. Use 'tiramisu' without extra articles when speaking generally, and 'make' (base form) after 'often' rather than 'making'. Also remove redundant words 'the' and 'homemade' as they are unnecessary here. Suggestion: say 'I often make tiramisu at home.'

× That is my hobby also so I love it.

✓ Making tiramisu is also my hobby, so I love it.

The original lacks clear subject and natural word order. Begin with a gerund phrase 'Making tiramisu' as the subject and connect ideas with a comma and 'so'. This clarifies meaning and fixes sentence structure.

× Dramas, cake.

✓ I also enjoy watching dramas and eating cake.

Fragmentary list lacks verb and clear relation to previous sentence. Transform into a full sentence with verb 'enjoy' and parallel objects 'watching dramas and eating cake' for clarity.

× Enables you I love junk food like cup noodle or not healthy snacks like powerful color well now I love health food because.

✓ When I was younger, I loved junk food like cup noodles and other unhealthy snacks, but now I prefer healthy food.

Original is ungrammatical and contains incorrect words. Use past tense 'loved' for past preference, plural 'cup noodles', contrast with 'but now' and present 'prefer healthy food'. Remove unintelligible phrases like 'powerful color'.

× Yes, I live in Korea. So in Korea we're we as different.

✓ Yes, I live in Korea. The seasons are different here.

Original repeats pronouns and is unclear. State the fact: 'The seasons are different here.' This corrects structure and meaning.

× It's season like like such as we usually eat slamming in the summer and in spring we are eating.

✓ Each season has different foods. For example, we usually eat cold dishes in the summer, and in spring we eat seasonal vegetables.

Original has wrong words and prepositions. Use 'in the summer' and 'in spring' and appropriate food descriptions. Provide specific examples to make sentence natural.

× Yes, I think so. When I was young I prefer 8 donkey first, but now I prefer it has seafood I.

✓ Yes, I think so. When I was young I preferred fast food, but now I prefer seafood.

Mixes past and present incorrectly and has unintelligible words ('8 donkey'). Use past tense 'preferred' for childhood preference and present tense 'prefer' for current preference. Replace incorrect nouns with likely intended words: 'fast food' and 'seafood'.