食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve accuracy, clarity and fluency. Correct the name of the dish (e.g., 'tteokbokki' instead of 'Takuki/tapuki'), make a clear topic sentence and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also reduce minor grammar errors (e.g., article use, verb forms).

範例: My favourite food is tteokbokki, a traditional Korean dish made of rice cakes in a sweet and spicy sauce. Because it combines spicy and slightly sweet flavours, eating it relaxes me after a long day, and I often share it with friends at street stalls.

建議: Make the time reference and tense consistent and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence about childhood preference, then add a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and correct tense errors ('couldn't' rather than 'cannot').

範例: When I was young, I preferred sweet foods such as macarons and ice cream because I couldn't tolerate spicy flavours. For example, I often chose vanilla ice cream after school instead of hot meals.

建議: Give a clearer, more natural response and fix grammar. Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No) and briefly explain with a specific reason and an example. Correct verb forms and phrasing ('I am hesitant', 'different times of the year'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

範例: No, I usually eat similar foods throughout the year because I'm hesitant to try new dishes. For example, I often eat tteokbokki in both summer and winter rather than exploring seasonal specialties.

建議: Clarify the meaning and correct grammar. Start with a direct answer, provide a concise reason and an example contrasting past and present tastes. Remove unclear phrases ('I referred it') and use past/present verb forms correctly.

範例: No, my favourite food hasn't changed much. When I was a child I loved sweets and I still enjoy them today; for instance, I still choose desserts like macarons and ice cream after meals.

× My favorite food is Takuki, which is the traditional food of Korea.

✓ My favorite food is tteokbokki, which is a traditional Korean dish.

The original sentence used 'the traditional food of Korea' which is awkward; 'a traditional Korean dish' is more natural. Also the food name was misspelled (Takuki -> tteokbokki). Use of 'the' implies there is only one traditional food; use 'a' for one of many. Use adjectives before nouns ('traditional Korean dish').

× It is sweet and spicy, so as I add tapuki, my stress is relieved and I feel very happy.

✓ It is sweet and spicy, so when I eat tteokbokki, my stress is relieved and I feel very happy.

The phrase 'so as I add tapuki' is ungrammatical and contains a misspelling; 'when I eat tteokbokki' correctly expresses cause and time. 'So' + clause should be followed by a result clause; using 'when' clarifies the action that causes the feeling. Also corrected spelling 'tapuki' -> 'tteokbokki'.

× When I was a young child, I used to eat sweet food like macaron or ice cream.

✓ When I was a young child, I used to eat sweet foods like macarons or ice cream.

Count nouns like 'macaron' should be plural when speaking generally ('macarons'). 'Sweet food' is better as 'sweet foods' to indicate variety. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habit, so keep tense but pluralize nouns appropriately.

× As I was a young child, I cannot eat very spicy food, so I enjoy eating sweet.

✓ As I was a young child, I could not eat very spicy food, so I enjoyed eating sweet foods.

Tense mismatch: referring to childhood requires past tense ('could not', 'enjoyed'). 'Enjoy eating sweet' is incomplete; use 'sweet foods'. 'As I was a young child' is acceptable but leads to past verb forms.

× No, I usually eat similar food.

✓ No, I usually eat similar foods.

For general habitual actions use plural 'foods' to indicate different items. 'Eat similar food' is understandable but nonnative; 'eat similar foods' is more natural.

× It is because I hesitant to try something new so I eat similar food in different year.

✓ It is because I am hesitant to try something new, so I eat similar foods in different years.

'I hesitant' lacks the verb 'am' (be verb). Use present simple 'am hesitant'. Pluralize 'food' and 'year' to 'foods' and 'years' when speaking generally. Add a comma before 'so' joining two clauses.

× Therefore I enjoy like tteokbokki or ice cream macaron as I was young.

✓ Therefore I enjoy tteokbokki or ice cream and macarons, as I did when I was young.

The structure 'I enjoy like' is incorrect; say 'I enjoy tteokbokki or ice cream and macarons'. Use past reference 'as I did when I was young' for clarity. Use plural 'macarons' and separate items with 'and'.

× No, my favorite food doesn't change it a lot.

✓ No, my favorite food hasn't changed much.

When speaking about change from past to present, use present perfect 'hasn't changed'. The original 'doesn't change it a lot' is ungrammatical and mixes tenses; remove the unnecessary 'it' and use 'much' for natural negation.

× As I was young I liked eating sweets and treats and now I also like sweets.

✓ When I was young I liked eating sweets and treats, and now I also like sweets.

Replace 'As I was young' with 'When I was young' for natural time clause; add comma before 'and now'. Tenses are correct: past 'liked' and present 'like' express continuity. No major grammar error beyond stylistic improvement.

× It is because I referred it I do not like.

✓ It is because I prefer them that I still like them.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical: 'referred it' is incorrect verb and pronoun usage. Likely intended meaning is 'I preferred them' or 'I still prefer them'. I corrected to 'I prefer them that I still like them' but best clear phrasing: 'Because I preferred them, I still like them' or 'Because I prefer them, I still like them.' Ensure pronouns agree with plural 'sweets and treats' using 'them'.