食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons with linking words, avoid fillers and repetition, and keep answers under five sentences. For example, mention a pasta type or a situation when it makes you feel optimistic and explain why.

範例: I love pasta, especially spaghetti with tomato sauce. It makes me feel optimistic because it’s comforting and reminds me of family dinners, which relax me after a stressful day.

建議: Answer directly, avoid filler words, and use clearer grammar and specific examples. Provide one topic sentence followed by a reason and an example or brief detail, using linking words like 'because' or 'for example.' Keep it concise.

範例: When I was young I loved sweets because I enjoyed the strong, sugary taste. For example, I often chose candy and cakes at birthday parties, which made those events more exciting.

建議: Clarify the time/season aspect and be specific. If you mean seasonal foods or trying international cuisines, say so. Use linking words to structure the answer and give one concrete example of seasonal or cultural food.

範例: Yes. In winter I tend to eat heartier, warming dishes like stews, while in summer I prefer salads and grilled fish. I also try foods from other countries, for example tasting sushi during a trip to learn about Japanese cuisine.

建議: State the change clearly, give reasons and one specific example of what you choose now versus before. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' and eliminate hesitations. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, it has changed. I used to prefer desserts, but now I choose healthier options because I want to reduce sugar intake and feel fitter. For example, I now prefer grilled chicken and vegetables instead of cakes.

× My favorite food is pasta. I enjoy pasta because it's a very delicious dish and it's helped me to feel better and uh, uh, optimistic.

✓ My favorite food is pasta. I enjoy pasta because it's a very delicious dish and it helps me feel better and optimistic.

The error: 'it's helped me to feel' mixes past participle with present meaning. Use simple present 'it helps' to indicate general truth/habit. Also remove unnecessary 'to' after 'feel'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual effects (it helps me feel) and avoid extra words like repeated 'uh'.

× That's what the most food that I enjoy and like.

✓ Those are the foods that I enjoyed and liked the most.

The original mixes singular/plural incorrectly: 'the most food' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'foods' and correct word order: 'the foods that I enjoyed and liked the most'. Also match past tense 'enjoyed/liked' since speaking about childhood.

× That's because it has a good taste and delicious flavors, uh, for children.

✓ That's because they have a good taste and delicious flavors for children.

Pronoun reference and agreement: 'it' refers to 'sweets' (plural), so use 'they' and 'have'. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun and place modifiers together: 'delicious flavors for children'.

× So that's why I prefer it most when I used to, to be a kid.

✓ So that's why I preferred it most when I was a kid.

Mixed tenses: 'prefer' (present) conflicts with 'when I used to be a kid' (past). Use past tense 'preferred' and past simple 'was' for childhood. Also remove duplicate 'to' and unnecessary 'used to' when 'when I was' suffices.

× Yes, uh, I prefer to eat and try different foods from different countries or different cultures that help me to gain more information and to gain an experience about the food in different country and also, uh, makes me, uh, helps me to choose which.

✓ Yes, I like to eat and try different foods from other countries and cultures because they help me learn more about those cuisines and gain experience, and they help me decide which I prefer.

Run-on sentence, unclear pronoun references, and awkward phrasing. 'Prefer to eat and try' is repetitive; use 'like to eat and try'. 'Different country' should be plural 'countries'. Fix verb agreement: 'they help me' (plural). Clarify final clause: 'help me decide which I prefer'. Remove fillers 'uh'.

× Well, this is a great question because yes, uh, when I used to, when I used to love desserts over salty food, but now, uh, my opinion has changed because now I prefer more to eat, uh, healthier food and food that does not contain sugar because it's healthier and it's helped me.

✓ Well, that's a great question because yes, I used to prefer desserts over salty food, but now my opinion has changed because I prefer to eat healthier foods that do not contain sugar because they are healthier and help me.

Redundant phrasing 'when I used to, when I used to' removed. Use past simple 'used to prefer' for past habit. 'Prefer more to eat' is awkward; use 'prefer to eat'. 'Food' should be plural 'foods' when general. Replace 'it's helped me' with 'help me' to use present simple for current, ongoing benefit. Remove fillers and extra 'now'.