食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition, make the response more concise and varied in vocabulary, and ensure coherence with linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., favourite types, where you eat it, and why). Avoid repeating the same adjective twice.

範例: I love sushi, especially salmon and shrimp, because I enjoy seafood. I often go to Japanese restaurants where the fish is very fresh, and I like the delicate, subtle flavours; I also sometimes order grilled octopus for variety.

建議: Correct tense and reduce hesitations. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give two specific details (what you liked, what you disliked, and a brief reason or example). Use linking words like 'however' to contrast likes and dislikes.

範例: When I was young, I preferred pasta and meat dishes. However, I disliked most vegetables and only ate a few like cucumbers and tomatoes because I didn’t like their taste.

建議: Be decisive and use correct tense; avoid fillers. Give a concise general statement, then give a specific seasonal example with a brief reason and one detail about the food you eat during that time.

範例: Not usually. The main exception is spring, when we celebrate Easter in my country, and I usually eat boiled eggs and special Easter cakes during the holiday.

建議: Use clear past and present comparison and avoid contradictions. Start with a clear statement about change, then explain how your tastes expanded and give one example. Remove repeated words and hesitations.

範例: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I mainly ate pasta and meat, but as I grew up I became more adventurous and now enjoy vegetables and a wider variety of dishes.

× As a child I prefer pasta or some kind of meat, but I really hated uh, vegetables, so I didn't eat any kind of vegetables expect uh, uh, cucumbers and uh, tomatoes.

✓ As a child I preferred pasta or some kind of meat, but I really hated vegetables, so I didn't eat any vegetables except cucumbers and tomatoes.

The sentence mixes present tense 'prefer' with past context 'As a child' and the rest of the sentence uses past tense verbs. Change 'prefer' to past 'preferred' for consistent past narration (Grammar problem type 6). Also 'expect' is a misspelling of 'except' (preposition error, type 11). Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate words for clarity. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent when describing past habits; use 'preferred' and 'didn't' together, and use 'except' for exclusions.

× Not really, Maybe, uh, only in the spring, because in the spring in my country, we celebrate Easter. So when it's time to celebrate Easter, I preferred, uh, to eat umm, eggs or Easter cakes, umm, that's all.

✓ Not really. Maybe only in the spring, because in my country we celebrate Easter. So when it's time to celebrate Easter, I prefer to eat eggs or Easter cakes.

The student uses present tense 'we celebrate' correctly but then switches to past 'I preferred' while talking about a habitual action that still occurs; use present 'I prefer' (Grammar problem type 6). Remove unnecessary filler words and fix punctuation for clarity. Also avoid repeating 'in the spring'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits that still happen: 'I prefer to eat.'

× Of course when I was a child I preferred regular food, maybe some uh, pasta and some meat. But when I I grow up I can eat everything, so I can eat vegetables and our dishes, but I hate it when I was child.

✓ Of course when I was a child I preferred simple foods, maybe pasta and meat. But when I grew up I could eat everything, so I started to eat vegetables and our dishes; I hated them when I was a child.

This sentence has mixed and incorrect tenses: 'when I I grow up' should be past 'when I grew up' and 'I can eat' should be past 'I could eat' to describe a change after childhood (Grammar problem type 5). Also 'hate it when I was child' is inconsistent: use past 'I hated them when I was a child' and correct noun agreement 'simple foods' rather than 'regular food'. 'our dishes' might be intended as 'our traditional dishes'—clarify if needed. Remove duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: Keep past tense when describing changes that happened after childhood: 'when I grew up I could... I hated them when I was a child.'

× My favorite food is sushi because I like seafood, especially salmon and shrimp. I also enjoy grilled octopus, and I often go to Japanese restaurants because the fish is very fresh and the flavors are delicate. Delicate and subtle.

✓ My favorite food is sushi because I like seafood, especially salmon and shrimp. I also enjoy grilled octopus, and I often go to Japanese restaurants because the fish is very fresh and the flavors are delicate and subtle.

The original ends with a sentence fragment 'Delicate and subtle.' that repeats adjectives without a subject or verb. Combine it with the previous sentence to form a complete idea (Grammar problem type 26: sentence structure errors). Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; attach short adjective phrases to the sentence they modify or write a complete sentence like 'The flavors are delicate and subtle.'