食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and more precise supporting details. Reduce redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas. Also correct verb agreement and articles (e.g., “is the heart,” “it has ingredients”). Give one or two specific reasons why you prefer beef biryani (taste, aroma, memories) rather than general statements.

範例: My favourite food is beef biryani. It is a traditional dish in my country and is considered the heart of our cuisine because of its rich aroma and complex spices. I prefer beef biryani because the meat is tender and the spices create a satisfying, layered flavour that reminds me of family celebrations.

建議: Use past tense consistently for past habits, correct noun forms, and avoid vague phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence (I liked...), then give one or two specific examples and reasons. Fix adjective use (“tender” not “tenderness”) and article/noun agreement (“a burger,” “kinds of”).

範例: When I was young, I liked eating fast food more than other kinds of food. For example, I often ate French fries and fried chicken, and I loved burgers because they were juicy and filling.

建議: Avoid repetition and be precise about seasons and typical foods. Use correct articles and prepositions (“in summer,” “in the summer,” “available in season”). Provide contrasting examples for different seasons with linking words (for example, “in summer ... whereas in winter ...”).

範例: Yes. In the summer I eat more fresh fruits and salads that are in season, and I often enjoy ice cream to cool down. In contrast, in the winter I prefer hot soups and stews to keep warm.

建議: Use consistent past and present tense and improve phrasing for clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then explain reasons and give a specific example of a food you liked as a child and one you prefer now. Correct grammar (“since I was a child,” “I used to eat sweets or candy,” “nowadays I prefer spicy foods”).

範例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since I was a child. As a child I used to eat a lot of sweets and candy, but now I prefer spicy dishes such as spicy curries because I enjoy the bold flavours and variety of spices.

× It is a traditional food among the country or worldwide.

✓ It is a traditional food in the country and is also popular worldwide.

The original sentence misuses the article and preposition 'among the country'. Use 'in the country' for being traditional within the country. Also connect the idea of worldwide popularity with 'also' and parallel structure.'

× You can say biryani is heart of our culture and it have ingredient like chicken, mutton or beef.

✓ You can say biryani is the heart of our culture and it has ingredients like chicken, mutton, or beef.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'heart'. Subject-verb agreement error 'it have' should be 'it has' (see subject-verb agreement as well). 'Ingredient' should be plural 'ingredients' when listing several. Also add commas in the list for clarity.'

× I prefer beef biryani over all the food.

✓ I prefer beef biryani over all other foods.

'All the food' is unidiomatic and mixes singular/plural. Use 'all other foods' to compare one dish to other types of food. This corrects number and improves natural wording.'

× When I was young, I prefer to eat more fast food than other kind of food.

✓ When I was young, I preferred to eat more fast food than other kinds of food.

The time expression 'When I was young' requires past tense 'preferred' not present 'prefer'. Also 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' to match 'other'.'

× In fast food, there are many kind of dishes like French fries, fried chicken or burger.

✓ In fast food, there are many kinds of dishes like French fries, fried chicken, or burgers.

Use plural 'kinds' to match 'many' and plural 'burgers' to be consistent when listing examples. Also add a comma before 'or' in the list for clarity.'

× I like burger because it's rich and tenderness.

✓ I like burgers because they're rich and tender.

'Burger' should be plural 'burgers' to match general preference. 'It's' refers to singular; use 'they're' for plural. 'Tenderness' is a noun; use adjective 'tender' to describe food. 'Rich' and 'tender' are coordinate adjectives describing the burgers.'

× On the summer I like to eat fresh fruits and vegetables which are available, and in summer I prefer to enjoy ice cream.

✓ In the summer I like to eat fresh fruits and vegetables that are available, and I also enjoy ice cream in summer.

Use 'in the summer' not 'on the summer'. 'Which' is often replaced by 'that' for essential clauses. Reorder second clause for natural flow and include 'also' to connect ideas. Avoid repeating 'in summer' twice; keep consistent tense.'

× Yes, of course my favorite food changed since I was child because when I was child I used to eat sweet things or candy, but when I grew up I am into spicy foods.

✓ Yes, of course my favorite food has changed since I was a child because when I was a child I used to eat sweets or candy, but when I grew up I became into spicy foods.

The phrase 'since I was a child' requires present perfect 'has changed' because the change affects the present. Also add article 'a' in 'a child'. Use 'sweets' plural for general term. 'I am into spicy foods' is present; because the speaker is describing past change, use 'became' or 'I am now into spicy foods.' Better: 'but when I grew up I became interested in spicy foods.'

× I like spicy foods more than sweet nowadays.

✓ I like spicy foods more than sweets nowadays.

Compare plural forms: 'spicy foods' vs 'sweets'. 'Sweet' should be plural noun 'sweets' when comparing types of food. 'Nowadays' fits with present tense 'like'.'