食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct vocabulary, start with a clear topic sentence, avoid mixed drink/food terms, fix pronunciation and word choice, and add one brief specific detail using a linking word. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: My favourite drink is bubble milk tea. I often have it after school because my mother buys it as a small snack before dinner. I like its sweet taste and the chewy tapioca pearls, which make it fun to drink.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and grammar, avoid fillers, and be specific about flavors. Use linking words to connect reasons and an example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: When I was young, I loved a candy called rainbow candy. It came in many colours and flavours, so I enjoyed trying each one; my favourite was the orange flavour because it tasted fresh and sweet.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, use correct grammar and smoother linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so'), avoid hesitations, and be specific about examples. Keep answers well-structured and under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I eat different foods throughout the year. In winter I often have Japanese-style noodle soup because it feels warm and comforting, whereas in summer I prefer cold salads or grilled fish because they are light and refreshing.

建議: Start with a clear yes/no topic sentence, correct grammar and pronunciation, eliminate unclear words, give specific reason(s) and a brief comparison with clear figures if used. Keep it concise and coherent (2–3 sentences).

範例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. I loved a special rice dish as a child, but it has become much more expensive — it used to cost about 50 TWD and now costs around 80–90 TWD — so I don't eat it as often anymore.

× To be honest, my favorite drink is bubble milk tea because I enjoy drinking it after school, my mom often buys it for me as a little snack before the dinner, and I like the sweet taste and cheesy Tapicola palace.

✓ To be honest, my favorite drink is bubble milk tea because I enjoy drinking it after school, my mom often buys it for me as a small snack before dinner, and I like the sweet taste and cheesy tapioca pearls.

The phrase 'a little snack' is awkward here; 'a small snack' is the natural collocation (adjective use). 'Before the dinner' incorrectly uses the definite article; use 'before dinner' (article error but corrected as part of adjective/adverb fix). 'Cheesy Tapicola palace' appears to be incorrect word choice and capitalization; the intended phrase is 'cheesy tapioca pearls' (adjective/noun choice and spelling). Suggestion: use common collocations ('small snack', 'before dinner') and check spelling and noun choice ('tapioca pearls').

× When I was a child I really liked a type of the candy called, uh, rainbow candy and I like it because it's came in many different colors and flavors and I enjoy to try each one.

✓ When I was a child I really liked a candy called rainbow candy, and I liked it because it came in many different colors and flavors, and I enjoyed trying each one.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'I like it' should match past context -> 'I liked it'. 'It's came' is incorrect: past tense of 'come' is 'came' and 'it's' (it is) should not be used; use 'it came'. 'I enjoy to try' uses wrong verb pattern: after 'enjoy' use gerund -> 'enjoyed trying'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent in narratives about childhood and use correct verb forms ('liked', 'came', 'enjoyed trying').

× And by the way, my favorite one was their or orange flavors.

✓ By the way, my favorite ones were the pear or orange flavors.

Pronoun 'their' is incorrectly used to refer to candy flavors; 'the' is needed to specify particular flavors (article/pronoun misuse). Also number agreement: 'one was' vs 'ones were' — if referring to flavors (plural), use 'ones were'. The word 'pear' likely intended instead of 'their'; confirm intended flavor. Suggestion: use 'the pear or orange flavors' or 'one was the orange flavor' depending on meaning, and ensure pronouns match the noun number.

× In cold weather I often eat the Japanese style noodle soup because it is umm feel warm and comforting and in summer I prefer to eat some umm cold salad or the fish because they feel more refreshing.

✓ In cold weather I often eat Japanese-style noodle soup because it feels warm and comforting, and in summer I prefer to eat cold salads or fish because they feel more refreshing.

Incorrect verb form 'it is umm feel' mixes auxiliary and base verb; use 'it feels' for present simple third-person singular. 'Japanese style' should be hyphenated as 'Japanese-style' when used as a compound adjective. 'Some cold salad or the fish' has article and number issues: use plural 'cold salads or fish' for general preference. 'They feel' is acceptable for plural; maintain consistent subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: simplify structure and ensure correct verb forms ('feels') and pluralization for general statements.

× My favorite food has changed because the type of rice I love as a child and cold Rudolfan and has become much more expensive. Is used to cost about 50 MMM dollars TWD but now it's around 80 to 90 TW so is so I don't buy it as often anymore.

✓ My favorite food has changed because the type of rice I loved as a child, called cold Rudolfan, has become much more expensive. It used to cost about 50 TWD, but now it's around 80 to 90 TWD, so I don't buy it as often anymore.

Original has multiple structural problems: tense inconsistency ('I love as a child' should be past 'I loved'), missing connector and punctuation, and garbled product name placement. 'Is used to cost' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'It used to cost'. Currency abbreviations were inconsistent ('MMM dollars TWD', 'TW'); standardize to 'TWD'. Suggestion: break into clear sentences, keep past tense for childhood references, use 'used to' for past habitual cost, and standardize names and abbreviations.