走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 注意流利度和重复问题（如多次重复“when I”或“go”）。回答要更简洁自然，第一句直接回答，后面用一到两句具体细节支持。可改进语法（时态和主谓一致）并减少犹豫词。

範例: Yes, I walk almost every night after dinner. My mother usually asks if we can take a walk, so we stroll around the neighborhood and chat about our day.

建議: 注意时态一致（描述过去用过去时）。避免重复（如“I I”,“at at”）。组织上先给直接回答，再给原因和对比。可加入一两个具体例子丰富内容。

範例: No, I rarely went for walks as a child because I found them boring and preferred playing with friends. Now at 20, I enjoy walking more because it helps me relax and exercise.

建議: 回答总体清楚但注意用词准确和连贯（如“digest meals”，“deepen bonds”）。避免重复（“you you”）。可以用连接词使逻辑更流畅并举具体例子说明。

範例: People like walking in parks because it is relaxing and good for digestion after dinner. It also offers a quiet setting to deepen bonds with family or friends, where you can talk about things you missed during the busy day.

建議: 注意发音和流利度（如“I've”重复、犹豫）。语法要正确（‘a walkway built for tourists’），句子要紧凑并提供具体细节或感受。避免断句和不完整句子。

範例: I'd love to walk around Jeju Island in Korea because there's a coastal walkway with varied sea views and traditional villages, which would be great for sightseeing and photography.

建議: 减少犹豫词（如“uh”）並改正时态和词形（‘spent an evening walking around’）。结尾要完整表达感受（如'memorable'）。可以加入一两处具体细节使回答更生动。

範例: Recently, on my first evening at graduate school, I walked around the campus to get familiar with it. I walked slowly, took many photos of historic buildings, and found the experience very memorable.

× Yes, I almost walk every night after dinner and when I when I am home my mom always ask me whether we go go outside to take a walk or not.

✓ Yes, I walk almost every night after dinner, and when I am home my mom always asks me whether we should go outside to take a walk.

主谓一致错误：主语是第三人称单数 my mom，因此动词应为 asks。原句 also 有词序和多余重复（"when I when I"、"go go"），需删去重复并调整词序；另外应该使用 should 表示询问建议。建议：检查主语人称并相应变形动词，删除重复词。

× Actually when I was a child, I don't want to go for a walk with my mom or dad because I think that's boring.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I didn't want to go for a walk with my mom or dad because I thought it was boring.

时态错误：句子描述过去的习惯或状态，主句与从句应使用过去时（didn't want, thought），而原句用了现在时 don't/would。建议：叙述过去事件时将动词改为过去式。

× So I I would rather spend time on playing with my friends.

✓ So I would rather spend time playing with my friends.

语法与搭配错误：短语 "spend time" 后接动名词形式，正确为 spending/ spend time doing sth，但不应加介词 on。原句多余重复 "I I"。建议：去掉重复，用 spend time + -ing 结构或直接 spend time playing。

× But at at the age of 20 is what now I am, I would rather go for a walk I think.

✓ But at the age of 20, which is what I am now, I would rather go for a walk, I think.

时态与句子结构：描述现在的年龄应用一般现在时或现在时态表达（I am now 20）。原句有重复 "at at"、语序不自然。建议：删除重复，改用 which 引导定语从句并把 now 放在合适位置。

× I think walking in parks is kind of relaxing and if you go for a walk in parks after dinner, you can digest your meals and you can have a deeper bond with the friend or the families you walked with.

✓ I think walking in parks is relaxing, and if you go for a walk in a park after dinner, you can digest your meal and have a deeper bond with the friends or family you walk with.

介词与冠词使用错误："in parks" 可用泛指或 "in a park" 更自然；"digest your meals" 应为 digest your meal（消化一顿饭）或 digest meals；"the friend or the families" 数与冠词错配，改为 friends or family。时态一致性：后半句改为一般现在时。建议：注意可数名词复数/单数形式与冠词搭配，保持时态一致。

× You can chat something you you don't talk about during the days.

✓ You can talk about things you don't talk about during the day.

副词/词序与搭配问题：英语中常说 "talk about things" 而不是 "chat something"；重复 "you you"；"during the days" 应为 during the day（指白天）。建议：使用固定搭配 talk about things，并注意去掉重复词与正确使用时间短语。

× I would love to go to the Jeju island in Korea because I I've heard that there is a walkway that built for tourists to walk around the island and during the work you can see many different views of the sea and you can also see different.

✓ I would love to go to Jeju Island in Korea because I've heard that there is a walkway built for tourists to walk around the island, and during the walk you can see many different views of the sea and traditional villages in Jeju.

冠词与句子结构错误：地名 Jeju Island 不需要定冠词 the；"that built for tourists" 缺少被动形式的动词或应为 "that is built" 或直接用过去分词 built。拼写/词汇错误："work" 应为 walk；句尾不完整，需补全 "traditional villages"。建议：注意地名冠词用法，使用正确的被动或分词结构并检查拼写。

× Uh, lately I worked in my school in the evening. Uh, that was my first day in the Graduate School.

✓ Lately I have worked at my school in the evening. That was my first day in graduate school.

时态问题：lately 表示最近一段时间应使用现在完成时（have worked）；介词选择：work at school 更常用；专有名词大小写：graduate school 小写即可或作为一般名词。建议：lately 与完成时搭配，注意介词与大小写。

× So in order to get familiar with the campus, I spent an evening, uh, walk around the school and took lots of pictures of the school.

✓ So in order to get familiar with the campus, I spent an evening walking around the school and took lots of pictures of it.

句子结构与动名词形式："spent an evening" 后应接动名词 walking，而不是不定式或原形动词。重复词汇 "of the school" 可简化为 "of it"。建议：使用 spend time/ spend an evening + -ing 结构，避免重复表述。

× I think that's very, uh, memor.

✓ I think that's very memorable.

词类和拼写错误：原词 "memor" 不是正确形容词，应为 memorable（形容词）或 I remember it 很难直接用 memor。建议：使用正确形容词 memorable 来表达“令人难忘”。