走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives specific details (frequency, location, distance). To improve, make the response more concise, avoid repetition (e.g., 'every other day' and 'every morning' may conflict), and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Not really. I usually walk every other morning with my mother along the boulevard near her house, and we typically cover about five kilometres; it’s a good way for us to exercise and chat.

建議: Good to mention memories and activities, but watch tenses and repetition ('we we') and use correct vocabulary (scenery, not scenaries). Structure the answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Use linking words like 'and' or 'which' to join ideas properly.

範例: Yes. When I was a child my mother and I often walked around our neighborhood to visit her friends, and during those walks we enjoyed the changing scenery and the fresh breeze, which made the outings relaxing.

建議: Your answer gives reasons, but it’s long and slightly repetitive. Break it into a topic sentence and linked supporting reasons. Use clearer expressions (e.g., 'less crowded' instead of 'calmer') and punctuation or linking words to avoid run-on sentences.

範例: People enjoy walking in parks because they are usually quieter and less crowded than shopping areas. Also, parks let you be closer to nature, enjoy pleasant scenery and breathe fresh air without the pressure to shop.

建議: The idea is clear and specific (Han River), but the answer has fragmented sentences, repetition ('always'), and minor grammar issues. Keep to a topic sentence then provide one or two concise supporting details. Avoid starting sentences with 'And' and combine related ideas using connectors like 'because' or 'moreover'.

範例: I would love to walk along the Han River in South Korea because I’ve seen beautiful photos and videos of its riverside paths. Moreover, there are many activities there, such as cycling and riverside cafes, which would make a long walk more enjoyable.

建議: This answer is clear and specific, mentioning recent habit, frequency, and benefits. To improve, make tense usage consistent (present perfect 'I've been' then present 'I do walk') and keep it concise using one coherent sentence or two short sentences connected by a linking word.

範例: Lately I’ve been walking along the boulevard near our house, usually every other morning with my mother; it’s a great way to exercise and get some vitamin D.

× Yes, I do remember my mom and I used to walk around the neighborhood to visit her friends and while walking we we see different scenaries and feel the fresh breeze and the nature.

✓ Yes, I do remember my mom and I used to walk around the neighborhood to visit her friends, and while walking we saw different sceneries and felt the fresh breeze and the nature.

Errors: incorrect present tense 'see' and 'feel' used in a sentence about past habitual actions; misspelling 'sceneries'; duplicated word 'we'. Use past tense verbs 'saw' and 'felt' to match 'used to', remove duplicate 'we', and correct spelling to 'sceneries'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for past events and proofread for duplicates and spelling.

× No, I don't walk a lot, but I walk every other day with my mom every morning in the boulevard near her house and we usually walk for five kilometers.

✓ No, I don't walk a lot, but I walk every other morning with my mom on the boulevard near her house, and we usually walk for five kilometers.

Error: wrong preposition 'in the boulevard' should be 'on the boulevard'; repetition 'every other day' and 'every morning' is redundant—'every other morning' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use 'on' with 'boulevard' and avoid redundant time phrases.

× I think people like to walk in parks because it's calmer and you're not pressured to walk in a retail store and spend some money in parks you become one with nature, you enjoy the scenery and you feel the fresh breeze of the air.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because it's calmer and you're not pressured to walk into retail stores and spend money; in parks you become one with nature, enjoy the scenery, and feel the fresh breeze.

Errors: preposition 'in a retail store' better as 'into retail stores' for the idea of entering and 'spend some money' is awkward—'spend money' is smoother. Also remove 'of the air' (redundant). Add punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: choose appropriate prepositions ('into') and avoid redundant phrases.

× If given the chance I would love to take a walk beside the Han River in South Korea. I've seen so many pictures and videos of it and it always And I'm always fascinated by the beauty of it. And there's a lot of activities you can do like ride a bike, you can cycle around.

✓ If given the chance, I would love to take a walk beside the Han River in South Korea. I've seen so many pictures and videos of it, and I'm always fascinated by its beauty. There are a lot of activities you can do, such as riding a bike and cycling around.

Errors: sentence fragments and faulty connectors ('and it always And I'm always'); awkward phrasing 'the beauty of it' better as 'its beauty'; misuse of 'like' for examples—use 'such as' and gerund forms 'riding' instead of bare verbs. Suggestion: fix fragments, use consistent connectors, replace 'like' with 'such as' for clarity, and use gerunds for listed activities.

× Lately, I've been walking in the boulevard near our house and I do walk every other morning with my mother and it has been a great way to exercise and get some vitamin D.

✓ Lately, I've been walking on the boulevard near our house, and I walk every other morning with my mother; it has been a great way to exercise and get some vitamin D.

Errors: preposition 'in the boulevard' should be 'on the boulevard'; 'I do walk every other morning' is awkward—use simple present 'I walk every other morning' or keep continuous 'I've been walking' for ongoing habit. Suggestion: use consistent tense and correct preposition, avoid unnecessary auxiliary 'do' when not used for emphasis.