走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Keep answers concise and directly address the question with a clear topic sentence. Avoid repetition and hesitations, use linking words to explain reasons (e.g., "because", "so"). Give a specific, fluent explanation: one clear sentence stating you don't walk much, followed by one or two short sentences with reasons and a specific example.

範例: No, I don't walk much because I usually use a car or scooter. My college is about a 45-minute drive away, so walking would be impractical, except for very short distances of around 500 metres.

建議: Answer in the past simple and keep sentences grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence about your childhood habit, then add one specific supporting detail and a brief reason. Avoid unfinished sentences and filler words.

範例: No, I didn't often go for walks as a child because I was quite lazy and preferred travelling by car or scooter. My mother sometimes forced me to walk so I wouldn't stay indoors all the time.

建議: Give a clear, organized answer with linking words and specific reasons. Use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "paths", "shade") and avoid vague phrases. Provide 2–3 concrete reasons and a short example or result.

範例: People like walking in parks because there are safe paths and plenty of shade from trees, which makes walking comfortable. Also, parks are family-friendly so parents can walk while their children play, and the peaceful environment helps people relax.

建議: Respond directly with a specific place and a reason. Avoid repeating that you're lazy; instead show willingness and give coherent reasons. Use one topic sentence (place) plus one or two supporting reasons with linking words.

範例: I'd like to take a long walk along a coastal promenade because the sea breeze is refreshing and walking by the water would be motivating. Also, regular long walks would help me lose weight and improve my fitness.

建議: Use correct past tense and concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence saying where you went, then add two specific descriptive details (what you saw, how you felt). Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g., "hair" → "air").

範例: Recently I went to Kokod Lake, a park by the river. My partner and I walked along the riverside; there were many trees and the fresh air was very relaxing.

× No I don't walk a lot because I have vehicles such as car and scooty and considering my normal activity such as going to college I will uh it is far away like needed 45 minutes to reach there.

✓ No, I don't walk a lot because I have vehicles such as a car and a scooter, and considering my usual activities like going to college, it is far away and takes about 45 minutes to reach.

Pronoun and noun reference and article usage were inconsistent and unclear. 'such as car and scooty' needs articles and the word 'scooty' is informal; 'scooter' is clearer. The clause about distance and time was mixed with modal and filler words. Use clear subject-verb structure: 'it takes about 45 minutes to reach' instead of 'needed 45 minutes to reach there.' Also add commas to separate ideas.

× So by walk it would it won't be possible only if I if I had if I should walk only I will walk 500 meter.

✓ So walking would not be possible; only if I had to walk would I walk 500 meters.

The original is ungrammatical with repeated fillers and incorrect word order. This is a conditional structure: use 'only if I had to walk' or 'only if I had no other option' and invert auxiliary for the conditional 'would I walk 500 meters.' Also 'meter' should be plural as a general distance ('500 meters'). This fixes sentence structure and subject-verb relationships.

× When I was a child, I don't prefer to walk because I was so lazy.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't prefer to walk because I was very lazy.

The sentence mixes past time frame with present-tense 'don't prefer.' Use past tense 'didn't prefer.' Also 'so lazy' is acceptable colloquially but 'very lazy' is clearer.

× I prefer to go in using vehicles such as car or scooty.

✓ I preferred to go by vehicle such as a car or a scooter.

Use the preposition 'by' with modes of transport ('go by car'). Also adjust tense to past to match 'When I was a child.' Use articles 'a car' and 'a scooter.' 'Go in using' is incorrect and redundant.

× I don't like to walk but my mother would force me because, uh, when I means I because I mostly spent inside my.

✓ I didn't like to walk but my mother would force me because I mostly stayed inside the house.

Pronouns and clauses are fragmented. 'I don't like' should be past 'I didn't like.' 'When I means I because I mostly spent inside my' is ungrammatical. Use 'I mostly stayed inside the house.' 'Spent' needs an object and time frame; 'stayed' is correct for location.

× I guess people prefer to walk in park because their children could play in the park and they could freely work around the park and also the bar consist of trees and shadow shadow to walk them for them easily.

✓ I guess people prefer to walk in parks because their children can play there, they can move around freely, and parks have many trees that provide shade for walking.

Use plural 'parks' for general statements. 'Walk in park' -> 'walk in parks.' 'Could' suggests possibility but 'can' is better for general habits. 'Work around the park' is incorrect; use 'move around' or 'walk around.' 'Bar consist of trees' is likely 'park consists of trees'; correct to 'parks have many trees.' 'Shadow' should be 'shade.' Remove redundant words and clarify meaning.

× Actually, I never thought about it because I have already told you that I'm so lazy to work, but I consider to work, uh, in my upcoming days because I think walking is a better, better way to lose fat and also for many other health issues.

✓ Actually, I never thought about it because I already told you that I'm lazy, but I plan to become more active in the coming days because I think walking is a good way to lose fat and help with other health issues.

Tense and verb forms need consistency. 'I have already told' can be simplified to 'I already told you.' 'I'm so lazy to work' is unnatural; use 'I'm lazy' or 'lazy to exercise.' 'I consider to work' is ungrammatical — use 'I plan to become more active' or 'I intend to start exercising.' 'Better, better' is redundant. Use 'a good way' and make the sentence concise.

× Lately I have went to Kokod Lake which is a park with the river.

✓ Lately I went to Kokod Lake, which is a park by the river.

Use correct past participle with present perfect auxiliary: either 'I have gone' or simple past 'I went.' 'Lately' with 'went' is acceptable; 'have went' is incorrect because 'went' is simple past; proper past participle is 'gone.' Also 'with the river' is better as 'by the river.'

× So me and my partner had walked around the along the Riverside and it was so beautiful because there consists of so many so many trees and the hair we inhale was so comforting.

✓ My partner and I walked along the riverside, and it was very beautiful because there were so many trees, and the air we breathed was very comforting.

Use correct subject order 'My partner and I.' 'Had walked' is unnecessary; simple past 'walked' is fine. Remove duplicated words. 'There consists of so many trees' is ungrammatical; use 'there were so many trees.' 'Hair' is a spelling error for 'air.' 'We inhale was so comforting' needs active phrasing: 'the air we breathed was comforting.'