走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cümleyi daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için basit, doğru zaman kullanımı ve net yapı kullanın. Gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu sözlerinden kaçının. Örneğin başlangıçta doğrudan cevap verin, ardından kısa destekleyici detay ekleyin (ne sıklıkta, nerede ve neden).

範例: Yes, I walk quite a lot in my daily life. I usually walk to and from the gym about four times a week because I prefer traveling on foot for short distances.

建議: Kısa geçmiş zaman cümlesi kurun ve tekrarları kaldırın. 'When I was a child' ifadesini yalnızca bir kez kullanın ve biraz sebep verin. Bağlaç kullanarak cümleleri akıcı bağlayın.

範例: No, I didn't. When I was a child I was quite shy, so I rarely went outside to walk and preferred staying at home.

建議: Cevap verirken mantıklı ve spesifik nedenler sıralayın; karışık liste yapmaktan kaçının. Bağlaçlarla fikirleri düzenleyin ve doğru kelime seçimlerine dikkat edin (ör. 'enjoy' yerine 'like', 'atmosphere' gibi).

範例: People like walking in parks because the atmosphere is pleasant and relaxing. They can enjoy fresh air, see trees and wildlife, and spend time with family or friends.

建議: Cümleyi tamamlarken daha açık bir tercih ve sebep verin. 'If I had the chance' yapısını kullanarak hayali durum ifade edin ve nedenini bağlayın. Gereksiz duraklamalardan kaçının.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a remote forest because I enjoy quiet places and being close to nature.

建議: Geçmiş zaman kullanımı, düzgün bağlam ve mantıklı nedenleri netleştirin. 'Lately' ile birlikte present perfect ya da simple past tercih edin. Konuşmada dolgu sözcüklerini azaltın ve cümleyi tamamlayın (neden gittiğiniz veya gitmediğiniz).

範例: Lately I have been going to the gym instead of walking outside because I paid for a membership and want to make the most of it.

× Yes, I am walking lots of in my daily life, especially I am going to gym and uh, I stayed, I stay there uh. 2 are nearly so yes I.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot in my daily life. Especially, I go to the gym and I stay there often.

The student uses continuous tense incorrectly and mixes forms. Use simple present 'I walk' and 'I go' for habitual actions. Remove filler words and correct word order: 'walk a lot', 'go to the gym', 'stay there often'. Suggested improvement: When describing routines use simple present (I walk, I go, I stay) and avoid mixing tenses or unnecessary prolonged fillers.

× No, because I was shy child when I was a child. So, uh, I didn't go outside. For walking.

✓ No, because I was a shy child when I was young, so I didn't go outside to walk.

Missing article 'a' before 'shy child' and awkward repetition 'when I was a child'. Use 'when I was young' and place infinitive 'to walk' with purpose. Past tense 'was' and 'didn't go' are correct but sentence structure needed fixing. Suggested improvement: Use 'a shy child' and concise phrases: 'when I was young' and attach purpose with 'to'.

× Because there are lots of people or lots of things likes babies and animals or trees or employ. So this is it feel like very crowded for human.

✓ Because there are lots of people and many things like babies, animals, trees, or workers. So it feels very crowded for people.

Incorrect pluralization and word choice: 'likes' should be 'like'; 'lots of things' followed by examples should use commas and correct nouns ('workers' instead of 'employ'). 'This is it feel' is ungrammatical; use 'it feels'. 'Human' used as adjective is wrong; use 'people'. Suggested improvement: Use 'like' for examples, ensure nouns are correct and plural if needed, and use 'it feels' for impressions.

× I would go, uh, desolate forests and.

✓ I would go to desolate forests.

Missing preposition 'to' before destination and unnecessary conjunction 'and'. Use 'to desolate forests' as the correct prepositional phrase. Keep sentence complete. Suggested improvement: Include the preposition 'to' with places and avoid trailing conjunctions.

× I go to gym lately because I have a. Apone So I paid lots of money for the gym and I don't want to, uh, necessary.

✓ I have been going to the gym lately because I have an appointment. I paid a lot of money for the gym, so I don't want to stop going.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been going' or present perfect 'have gone' for recent repeated actions with 'lately'. 'I have a. Apone' is unclear; likely 'an appointment'. 'Paid lots of money' -> 'paid a lot of money'. 'I don't want to, uh, necessary' -> 'I don't want to stop going' clarifies meaning. Suggested improvement: Use 'have been going' with 'lately' for recent habits, correct article use ('an appointment'), and express intent clearly ('don't want to stop').