走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答有主体内容，但有多处词汇和语法错误，信息重复，逻辑不够清晰。建议：1) 开始用一句直接回应并给出原因（1句）；2) 用1-2句具体细节支持（地点、频率或活动），使用衔接词如“because”、“so”来保持连贯；3) 注意词汇准确（use 'walk' as verb, 'Shen Lake' as location）和时态；4) 控制在3-4句之内，避免重复“walking/exercise”。具体练习：把“work in the Shen Lake”改为“walk at Shen Lake”并说明频率或时间。

範例: Yes, I walk often because it helps me stay fit and clear my mind. I usually walk at Shen Lake in Nanjing, which has beautiful scenery and quiet paths. Because I go there nearly every morning, I always feel relaxed and more positive afterwards.

建議: 回答内容混乱，词汇使用不当（将 'walking' 写成 'working' 多次），缺乏清晰的支持细节或时间表达。建议：1) 先直接回答（Yes/No），再说明频率和谁陪同；2) 用具体细节（例如常去的公园、做的活动、给你的感受）；3) 修正关键词错误（use 'walking' not 'working'）；4) 每个句子长度适中，避免重复。

範例: Yes, I often went for walks with my family when I was a child. My parents liked taking us to the nearby park, where we would walk along the lake and talk for hours. Those outings felt very relaxing and helped me enjoy being outdoors.

建議: 回答有基本想法，但表达不准确且句子不够连贯，词汇错误（例如 'working' 应为 'walking'，'manning animals' 不合适）。建议：1) 给出一到两个清晰原因（景色、空气、社交或运动），并用连接词展开；2) 使用恰当词汇如 'walking','exercising','walking pets'；3) 用具体例子或结果来支持观点；4) 句子不宜过多且避免语法错误。

範例: People like walking in parks because parks offer fresh air and pleasant scenery, which makes exercise more enjoyable. Also, parks are social places where people can meet friends or walk their dogs, so it feels safe and friendly.

建議: 回答明确地点，但存在地名不一致（Shuang Wu / Shen Wu），句子结构和语法有错误，表达重复。建议：1) 确认并统一地名拼写；2) 先直接回答并说明原因（景色、氛围或距离），再用一两句具体细节支持；3) 用正确的语法（e.g. 'people exercise and socialize'）；4) 保持语言简洁自然。

範例: I would like to take a long walk around Shuang Wu Lake in Nanjing because it has wide paths and lovely scenery. The park is lively, with many people exercising or chatting, which makes the walk feel safe and enjoyable.

建議: 回答能表达地点和原因，但有语法错误和词序问题（'to enjoying' 应为 'to enjoy'），句子略显冗长且重复。建议：1) 用一句直接回应（I walked on campus recently），2) 用一两句具体细节说明地点特征（植物、花卉、空气），3) 纠正动词形式和定语从句结构；4) 控制句子数并使用连接词如 'because' 或 'so'.

範例: Recently I went for a walk on my university campus. The campus is known for its beautiful gardens and many different flowers, so I walked there to enjoy the fresh air and scenery.

× I usually work in the Shen Lake in Nanjing.

✓ I usually walk in Shen Lake in Nanjing.

原句中把動詞“work”誤用於表示“散步/走路”的語境，應使用“walk”。此外介詞“in the Shen Lake”可簡化為“in Shen Lake”（專有名詞前通常不加定冠詞或依具體習慣）。建議：根據語境選擇正確動詞（walk 表示走路），並注意專有地名前冠詞的使用。

× It has the most beautiful scenery and when I work here I feel comfortable and positive.

✓ It has very beautiful scenery, and when I walk here I feel comfortable and positive.

原句用“the most beautiful”會比較級過強，且語境應用“very beautiful”或“beautiful”。更重要的是同樣錯用“work”而非“walk”。建議：用“walk”表達在此走路時的感受；修正形容詞強度以符合說話語氣。

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

該句本身時態和語序正確，使用過去式“did...when you were a child”符合詢問兒時習慣的語境，因此無需改動。提示：保持過去一般疑問句結構“Did + 主語 + 動詞原形”。

× Yes, because my family all like working.

✓ Yes, because all my family members liked walking.

原句中“my family all like working”在人稱和數的一致性以及動詞選擇上有問題：一是“family”作集合名詞時可視為複數或用“family members”；二是“working”誤用，應為“walking”。另外，因在回憶兒時習慣，應使用過去式“liked”。建議：使用“all my family members”或“my whole family”並搭配正確動詞和時態。

× They always took me to the park to go for a walk and we always talk a lot.

✓ They always took me to the park to go for a walk and we always talked a lot.

這裡敘述兒時經常發生的事情，應保持過去時。第一個動詞“took”已是過去式，但後半句“we always talk a lot”錯用了現在式，應改為過去式“talked”。建議：保持同一時間背景下動詞時態一致。

× It has the most relaxing atmosphere when we work.

✓ It had the most relaxing atmosphere when we walked.

句子描述過去情境，因此形容詞“relaxing atmosphere”可以保留，但需將動詞時態和動詞本身修正：把“work”改為“walk”，並將現在式“has/has”改為過去式“had”。建議：檢查動詞語意並與時態一致。

× So as a child I like working, so I like working now.

✓ So as a child I liked walking, and I still like walking now.

原句時態混用且動詞選錯。描述兒時應用過去式“liked”，現在持續的喜好用現在式“still like”；同時“working”應為“walking”。建議：區分過去習慣與現在狀態，並使用正確動詞。

× Because parks are the outside environment, that it has good scenery, many people working, exercising and manning animals.

✓ Because parks are outdoor environments: they have good scenery, many people walking or exercising, and people taking care of animals.

原句中“outside environment”表達不自然，應使用“outdoor environments”。“that it has”結構錯誤，需改為主句“They have...”。“many people working”再一次誤用“working”應為“walking”；“manning animals”用法不當，應表達“照顧動物”或“with animals”。建議：使用正確的名詞形式（environment -> environments），把從句改為獨立句，並選擇合適動詞短語（walking, taking care of animals）。

× It is a way that animal and people could live harmoniously.

✓ It is a way for animals and people to live harmoniously.

原句結構不自然：“a way that ... could”可簡化為“a way for ... to ...”。另外“animal”應使用複數“animals”，“people”本身為複數。建議：使用“for + 名詞 + to + 動詞”結構並注意複數形式。

× It might be the Shuang Wu Lake in Nanjing.

✓ It might be Shuang Wu Lake in Nanjing.

句子本身主要問題是地名冠詞使用。專有名詞前通常不加定冠詞（視慣例而定），因此可去掉“the”。此處並非進行動名詞錯誤，但依照問題列表，最符合的是冠詞使用，但也可歸類為冠詞錯誤。建議：確認地名慣例是否需定冠詞。

× The Shen Wu Lake is a big energetic park, and it's famous every day.

✓ Shuang Wu Lake is a large, lively park, and it's popular every day.

“big energetic park”搭配不自然，應改為“large, lively park”。“famous every day”用法錯誤，應為“popular”或“well-known”描述常有人光顧的情況。“Shen Wu Lake”可能是誤寫為“Shuang Wu Lake”。建議：選用恰當形容詞並注意地名一致性。

× There are many people do some exercising and socializing with others in the Shuang Wu Lake.

✓ There are many people doing some exercise and socializing with others at Shuang Wu Lake.

原句中“people do some exercising”語法錯誤，應使用現在分詞“doing”來修飾“people”或改為“who do”。此外，“in the Shuang Wu Lake”應為“at Shuang Wu Lake”或“in Shuang Wu Park”。建議：使用“people doing...”或“people who do...”結構，並修正介詞選擇。

× Lately might be my campus.

✓ Lately it has been my campus.

描述最近去散步的地點，應用現在完成或現在完成進行時態，例如“lately I have been walking on my campus”或表述“最近是我的校園”。原句“Lately might be my campus”結構混亂，使用了情態動詞“might”不合適。建議：用“I have recently gone for walks on my campus”或“It has been my campus lately”。

× My campus is famous for its good scenery as there are many plants, different kinds of flowers that everyday many people come to my campus to see them.

✓ My campus is famous for its beautiful scenery: there are many plants and different kinds of flowers, and every day many people come to the campus to see them.

原句中“good scenery”可替換為“beautiful scenery”。“that everyday many people come...”的連接詞使用不當，應分成兩句或用從屬連接詞。“everyday”應為副詞短語“every day”。此外“come to my campus to see them”中的“them”指代不清，但可保留為指花卉。建議：使用標點分句並注意“every day”與“everyday”的區別。

× I went for a walk in my campus to enjoying the air.

✓ I went for a walk on my campus to enjoy the fresh air.

短語“in my campus”在英式/美式英語中通常用“on campus”或“at my campus”。動詞不定式用法錯誤，“to enjoying”應為“to enjoy”。此外“the air”可改為“the fresh air”更自然。建議：使用正確介詞“on/at campus”並把不定式用為“to + 動詞原形”。