走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 文法と語彙の誤りが目立ち、同じ動詞（work）が誤って使われているため意味が分かりにくいです。回答は直接的なトピック文（Yes/No＋理由）で始め、具体的な頻度や距離、目的を簡潔に述べてください。接続詞（because, and, besides など）で文をつなぎ、最大5文以内に収めること。発音で混乱しやすい語（walk/work）に注意し、正しい語を使う練習をしてください。

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I live about 30 minutes’ walk from my college, so I walk to class every day. Besides, I often walk in nearby parks at weekends to relax and enjoy the scenery.

建議: 過去の習慣を説明するのに適切な時制（過去形）や語彙を一貫して使えていません。'work'と'walk'の混同があるため意味が不明瞭です。まず主文で過去にそうしていたと明言し、その後に頻度や具体的な活動（what you did）を短く添えると良いです。理由や効果を付け加える場合は接続語（because, so）を使って論理的に。

範例: Yes, I often walked outside when I was a child. My parents usually took me to the local park every weekend, where we played games and watched birds. I think those walks helped my eyesight and gave me happy memories.

建議: 理由の提示自体は良いですが、語彙の誤用（work→walk）や文法の一貫性が問題です。主張を明確にするために、主節（People like to walk in parks because...）で理由を列挙し、それぞれを短い付帯情報で補足してください。'avoid interruptions'や'fast-paced life'などフレーズは自然ですが文に統合して滑らかに話しましょう。

範例: People like to walk in parks because of the beautiful scenery and fresh air. Parks offer a peaceful place to relax and recharge, allowing people to escape from the fast-paced city life.

建議: 回答は概ね明確ですが、あいまいな発話（'Umm', 'Udo Umm'の繰り返し）や語順がやや不自然です。仮定法（If I had the chance, I would...）を使って条件を明確にし、場所の説明は短い具体的な理由（coastline, trails, views）で補強してください。繰り返しの間投詞を減らすと流暢さが上がります。

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk on Udo Island in Korea. There is a famous coastal trail with stunning sea views, and walking there would be very relaxing.

建議: 過去の出来事を述べる際の時制や語彙（want→wanted, work→walk）が混同しています。話の流れが途切れがちなので、時系列に沿って短く整理してください（when, why, what happened, how you felt）。感情を述べる際は過去完了は不要な場合が多いので過去形で十分です。

範例: Recently I went to a beautiful park to watch birds. We saw many different species and I walked a lot that day. The walk was very relaxing and helped me feel less anxious.

× I need to set out of my dorms and work a lot.

✓ I need to set out from my dorm and walk a lot.

The verb 'set out' is correct but the preposition should be 'from' not 'of'; 'walk' is the correct verb for moving on foot, while 'work' is incorrect here. Also 'dorms' should be singular if referring to the student's building. Suggestion: use 'set out from my dorm and walk a lot.'

× I also enjoy working in the natural parks to enjoy the beautiful scenery.

✓ I also enjoy walking in natural parks to enjoy the beautiful scenery.

The verb 'working' is wrong; 'walking' fits context. 'in the natural parks' -> 'in natural parks' or 'in the natural park' depending on meaning; articles should be simplified. Suggestion: replace 'working' with 'walking' and remove unnecessary article.

× working in the natural park is really great memory for me.

✓ Walking in the natural park is a really great memory for me.

Missing article 'a' before 'really great memory'; 'working' should be 'walking' to match context. Suggestion: 'Walking in the natural park is a really great memory for me.'

× And at the same time it is good for children to keep their eyes looking far away.

✓ And at the same time it is good for children to look into the distance.

Phrase 'keep their eyes looking far away' is unnatural. Use 'look into the distance' or 'focus on distant objects.' Suggestion: use simpler verb structure 'to look into the distance.'

× So when I was a child, I my parents often brought me to the park and work a lot.

✓ So when I was a child, my parents often brought me to the park and we walked a lot.

Extraneous 'I' should be removed; 'work' is incorrect verb—use past tense 'walked' to match 'brought.' Also include subject 'we' for 'walked.' Suggestion: 'my parents often brought me to the park and we walked a lot.'

× I think people like to work in park because the beautiful scenery and the fresh air.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because of the beautiful scenery and the fresh air.

Use 'walk' not 'work'; 'in park' needs plural or article: 'in parks' or 'in the park.' Add 'because of' to link cause and effect. Suggestion: 'walk in parks because of...'

× Avoid any interruption from the fast fast-paced life and just enjoy the moment.

✓ They can avoid interruptions from fast-paced life and just enjoy the moment.

Original is a sentence fragment; add a subject 'They' or connect to previous sentence. Remove duplicate 'fast.' Use plural 'interruptions.' Suggestion: 'They can avoid interruptions from fast-paced life.'

× I have a dream destination that is a small island in Korea called Udo Umm.

✓ I have a dream destination: a small island in Korea called Udo, umm.

This is mainly filler; correct punctuation and slight wording. 'Umm' is filler and can be represented as 'umm.' No tense error; listed as future tense but adjusted wording. Suggestion: 'a small island in Korea called Udo.'

× I know that there is a famous walking line for tourist.

✓ I know that there is a famous walking trail for tourists.

Use 'trail' not 'line'; 'tourist' should be plural 'tourists.' Article 'a' is fine. Suggestion: 'a famous walking trail for tourists.'

× It's near the sea Umm.

✓ It's near the sea, umm.

Add comma before filler 'umm' for clarity; otherwise acceptable. Suggestion: pause and then continue.

× The coastline has a beautiful scenery and everybody can relax and recharge there.

✓ The coastline has beautiful scenery and everybody can relax and recharge there.

'a beautiful scenery' is uncountable and should be 'beautiful scenery' without article. Suggestion: drop 'a.'

× Well, this summer I went to a beautiful park, mainly because we want to watch some birds here and I really walked a lot that day.

✓ Well, this summer I went to a beautiful park, mainly because we wanted to watch some birds and I walked a lot that day.

Tense inconsistency: 'went' is past, so 'want' should be past 'wanted.' 'I really walked a lot' can be 'I walked a lot.' Suggestion: keep verbs in past tense.

× We found a lot of different spaces of birds and The Walking is really relaxing for me.

✓ We found many different species of birds and the walk was really relaxing for me.

'spaces of birds' is wrong — should be 'species of birds.' 'The Walking' incorrect noun; use 'the walk' and match past tense 'was.' Suggestion: 'many different species' and 'the walk was relaxing.'

× And at that time, before that work I was, I had been really anxious.

✓ And at that time, before that walk, I was really anxious.

'work' should be 'walk'; unnecessary 'had been' and filler 'I was' duplication. Use simple past 'was' to describe state at that time. Suggestion: 'before that walk, I was really anxious.'