走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and incomplete phrases. Use linking words (because, since, for example) correctly and finish your sentences.

範例: Yes, I walk regularly. I enjoy walking because I find it relaxing and good exercise; for example, I take a 30-minute walk around my neighborhood most evenings.

建議: Use past tense consistently and give a specific example. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two brief supporting details showing frequency or a memory. Remove hesitations and unfinished sentences.

範例: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. For instance, I used to walk to my grandmother's house every weekend and play in the nearby park with friends.

建議: Good idea and relevant vocabulary. Improve coherence by removing hesitation and using linking words. Be more specific and realistic (e.g., birds rather than frogs) and expand one reason with a short consequence or example.

範例: People like walking in parks because they are peaceful and scenic. For example, parks have trees, flowerbeds and paved tracks, so walkers can enjoy fresh air and rest on benches.

建議: Give a clear place and a reason. Use the conditional structure correctly and avoid repeating phrases. Provide one specific location and explain why you would choose it with brief supporting details.

範例: If I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk in the countryside. I enjoy rural scenery and quiet lanes, and a long walk there would be great exercise and a break from city noise.

建議: This answer is clear and well-structured. To improve further, combine sentences with linking words for greater fluency and add a brief personal feeling or result. Keep it concise (no more than five sentences).

範例: Last weekend I went to City Park because the weather was sunny. I wanted fresh air, and it was pleasant to see flowers and people jogging, which made me feel relaxed.

× When I was a child, uh, I often go outside for a walk.

✓ When I was a child, I often went outside for a walk.

The sentence sets a past time frame ('When I was a child') so the verb must be in the past tense. 'Go' is present tense; change it to 'went' to match the past context and maintain correct narrative tense consistency. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when describing habitual actions in the past (e.g., 'I often went').

× Because, uh, I'm very interested go outside since my childhood, for example, umm, I, I usually walk, uh, now there will be.

✓ Because I have been very interested in going outside since my childhood; for example, I usually walk.

Multiple problems: the clause 'I'm very interested go outside since my childhood' lacks correct verb forms and preposition. 'Interested' requires 'in' plus a gerund ('in going outside'). Also 'since my childhood' needs a perfect tense ('have been') to show continuing interest. The fragment 'now there will be' is incomplete and unclear, so it is removed. Suggestion: Use 'have been interested in doing' for ongoing states since a point in the past and use gerunds after 'interested in.'

× People like to walk in parks because umm, it is beautiful and peaceful place.

✓ People like to walk in parks because it is a beautiful and peaceful place.

The noun 'place' is singular and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it. Without the article the noun phrase is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'a' for singular countable nouns when mentioning them generally ('a beautiful place').

× For example, there are trees and colourful frogs and also umm uh, walking tracks and uh, also benches, uh, to relax.

✓ For example, there are trees and colorful flowers, and also walking paths and benches to relax on.

The original lists 'colourful frogs' which is likely a wrong word choice; 'flowers' fits typical park descriptions. 'Walking tracks' is acceptable but 'walking paths' or 'walking trails' is more natural. Also 'to relax' should be 'to relax on' to indicate purpose of benches. Suggestion: Choose correct nouns for context and include appropriate prepositions for purpose ('benches to relax on').

× I work a lot, uh, because I, I'm very interested, uh, activities, uh, like walking since my childhood, uh, for example, I usually walk in.

✓ I work a lot because I have been very interested in activities like walking since my childhood; for example, I usually go for walks.

Several tense and form issues: 'I'm very interested activities' is missing the preposition 'in' and needs a gerund ('interested in activities like walking'). 'Since my childhood' calls for present perfect continuous ('have been') to show ongoing interest. The fragment 'I usually walk in' is incomplete; 'go for walks' is a natural collocation. Suggestion: Use 'interested in' + gerund, use present perfect for actions continuing from the past, and use complete verb phrases ('go for walks').

× I I went for a walk in the City Park last weekend because the weather was sunny.

✓ I went for a walk in City Park last weekend because the weather was sunny.

This sentence is mostly correct but contains a duplicated pronoun 'I I' and the article 'the' before 'City Park' may be omitted depending on the park's name. Remove the duplicate 'I' for correct grammar. Suggestion: Proofread to remove repeated words and use the park's proper name without 'the' if it is a proper name ('City Park').