走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장 구조와 문법을 바로잡고, 불필요한 말채우기(umm, and)를 줄이며 명확한 이유를 간결히 제시하세요. 주제 문장 뒤에 한두 개의 구체적 이유(예: 통근 방식, 시간 부족)를 연결사로 이어 자연스럽게 말하면 점수가 오릅니다.

範例: No, I don't walk very often these days. I usually get around by public transport or by car, so I rarely have the chance to walk. Because of my busy schedule, I prefer quicker transport when I need to go somewhere.

建議: 과거 시제 일관성 및 어휘 선택을 개선하세요. 문장을 간결히 정리하고 구체적 상황(예: 산책 시간, 누구와 함께 했는지)을 추가해 자연스럽게 만드세요. 말더듬이나 중복 표현을 피하세요.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often went for walks after dinner with my family, especially my grandparents. We would stroll around the neighborhood and sometimes visit the park nearby.

建議: 의견 제시 후 왜 그런지 이유를 논리적으로 연결하세요. 문법(주어-동사 일치)과 표현을 정확히 하고, 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 설명을 풍부하게 만드세요.

範例: People like to walk in parks because it helps them relax and forget their worries. For example, being surrounded by nature and fresh air can reduce stress and improve mood.

建議: 원하는 장소를 명확히 말하고 그 이유를 구체적으로 서술하세요. 불필요한 단어와 중복을 제거하고 감각적 표현을 사용해 생동감 있게 설명하세요.

範例: If I had the chance, I would love to take a long walk along the beach. I enjoy listening to the waves and feeling the sea breeze, which helps me relax and think clearly.

建議: 장소를 정확히 표현하고 최근 시제의 문장을 간결하게 구성하세요. 구체적 활동(무엇을 봤는지, 무엇을 했는지)을 한두 문장으로 설명하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요.

範例: Recently, I went for a walk in the park near my apartment. It's a nice place to visit where I enjoy watching people jog and sometimes trying light exercises myself.

× No I don't very often these days.

✓ No, I don't walk very often these days.

The verb 'walk' is missing; the sentence needs the base verb after the auxiliary 'do'. Use present simple 'don't walk' to describe a habitual action. Suggestion: include the main verb after 'do/does' in negative statements (e.g. 'I don't walk often').

× Umm because I usually learn on from public transport and to drive to get around and and whenever I will walk prepare.

✓ Umm, because I usually learn on public transport and drive to get around, and I only walk when I need to.

Multiple errors: 'learn on' is incorrect preposition/verb; 'drive' should be base form coordinated with 'learn' (present simple habit). 'Whenever I will walk prepare' uses incorrect future/modal construction and word order. Use present simple for habits and simple phrasing 'I only walk when I need to'. Suggestion: use parallel verbs in a list and avoid 'will' for habitual contexts.

× Yes, I went to outside work when I was child.

✓ Yes, I went outside to play when I was a child.

Word choice and article errors: 'went to outside work' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'went outside to play'. Also 'a child' needs the indefinite article. Use past simple 'went' for past habit. Suggestion: include 'a' before singular nouns and use correct verb phrases ('go outside', 'play').

× After dinner I usually went walked with my family or grandpa.

✓ After dinner I usually walked with my family or my grandpa.

Redundant verbs 'went walked' combine past simple and another verb; choose one verb 'walked' for past habit. Also add possessive/article 'my grandpa' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid stacking verbs and use a single correct past tense verb.

× Grandparents really. It's really.

✓ My grandparents really enjoyed it; it was special.

Fragmented and unclear sentences. Combine ideas into complete sentences with subject and verb. Suggestion: expand fragments into full sentences that state who and what (e.g. 'My grandparents really enjoyed it').

× Most of the people enjoying walk in Paris because this feel better their feeling and and forget about their worries and stress relief.

✓ Most people enjoy walking in parks because it makes them feel better and helps them forget their worries and relieve stress.

Multiple preposition and verb form errors: 'Most of the people' -> 'Most people'; 'enjoying walk' -> 'enjoy walking' (use gerund after 'enjoy'); 'in Paris' should be 'in parks' (context); 'this feel better their feeling' -> 'it makes them feel better'; 'and stress relief' -> 'and relieves stress' or 'helps relieve stress'. Suggestion: use 'enjoy' + gerund, correct noun (park), and proper subject-verb agreement.

× If I had a chance I would love to walk by the beach.

✓ If I had the chance, I would love to walk along the beach.

Minor preposition/style: 'by the beach' is acceptable but 'along the beach' is more natural for walking. Use conditional structure 'If I had the chance, I would...'. Suggestion: include 'the' in 'the chance' and consider 'along' for movement parallel to shoreline.

× I love the waves and the sense and feeling the sense of between my turf voice. Hey.

✓ I love the sound of the waves and the feeling of being near the sea.

Original is incoherent and contains wrong nouns and fragments ('turf voice'). Rephrase to a clear noun phrase: 'the sound of the waves' and 'the feeling of being near the sea'. Suggestion: express sensory experiences with clear nouns (sound, sight, feeling) and correct prepositions ('near the sea').

× I went to nearby my parcel in this is really good great place to visit and and I really like to watching people jogging and try to playing there.

✓ I went to a nearby park; it is a really great place to visit, and I really like watching people jog and try playing there.

Many preposition and article errors: 'to nearby my parcel' -> 'to a nearby park'; 'in this is' -> separate clauses; 'like to watching' -> 'like watching' (gerund after 'like'); 'people jogging and try to playing' -> 'people jog and try playing' or 'people jogging and trying to play'. Suggestion: use correct articles ('a nearby park'), gerund after 'like' and parallel verb forms for activities.