走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi ban đầu và sắp xếp ý rõ ràng hơn. Tránh mâu thuẫn trong câu (bạn bắt đầu nói “I really walk” nhưng nội dung lại nói thích ở trong nhà). Duy trì tối đa 3–4 câu; sử dụng các liên từ đơn giản để mở rộng ý (e.g., but, because, so). Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất hoặc hoàn cảnh đi bộ để nội dung rõ ràng hơn.

範例: Not really — I don't walk very often. I usually prefer staying at home because I find it more comfortable and relaxing. However, I sometimes go for short walks in the evening to get some fresh air and stretch my legs.

建議: Câu trả lời đã rõ ràng và trả lời trực tiếp nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp và dùng nối câu mượt hơn. Tránh lặp từ (“hang out” nhiều lần). Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: how often or a typical place) sẽ giúp tăng độ thuyết phục.

範例: No, I didn't go for walks very often as a child. My parents were worried I might get lost, so they usually kept me close at home or only allowed short walks in the neighborhood with them.

建議: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng diễn đạt lộn xộn và sai cấu trúc. Dùng linking words chính xác (e.g., because, so, and) và tránh cụm từ không chính xác như “break the fresh air”. Cần cụ thể hoá lợi ích (ví dụ: giảm stress, tập thể dục nhẹ, gặp gỡ bạn bè) với 2–3 câu ngắn gọn.

範例: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and reduces stress after a long day. Parks also offer fresh air and pleasant scenery, and they are good places to meet friends or have a conversation while exercising.

建議: Trả lời đã nêu địa điểm nhưng câu thiếu rõ ràng, nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không phù hợp. Cần dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích lý do cụ thể và miêu tả chi tiết (khung cảnh, cảm giác). Giữ 2–3 câu mạch lạc và sửa lỗi cấu trúc và danh từ số nhiều/động từ.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Tao Dang Park because it has beautiful architecture and well-kept gardens. I imagine walking slowly there, enjoying the views and taking photos of interesting buildings.

建議: Câu trả lời trực tiếp nhưng có lỗi từ vựng (“headache schedule” không đúng) và mâu thuẫn ý (doing tests to relax). Nên nêu nguyên nhân ngắn gọn, sửa từ vựng và đưa ra một hoạt động thay thế hợp lý. Dùng 2–3 câu, cụ thể về thời gian gần đây và hoạt động thay thế.

範例: I haven't been for a walk recently because I've been busy studying for exams this week. Instead of walking, I usually take short breaks at home, do light stretching, or review practice tests to stay active.

× Honestly, I really walk because I think being indoors makes me feel more comfortable and less tired.

✓ Honestly, I don't walk much because I think being indoors makes me feel more comfortable and less tired.

The student used 'I really walk' which is unnatural and likely intended to express frequency/degree; use 'I don't walk much' to convey rarity. Use appropriate adverb placement with main verb. Suggestion: use frequency adverbs (often, sometimes, rarely) or 'much' with negatives.

× I prefer spending time at home for some activities like reading or watching films rather than going out for a walk.

✓ I prefer spending time at home doing activities like reading or watching films rather than going out for a walk.

The preposition 'for' before 'some activities' is awkward; use 'doing activities' or 'for' replaced by 'doing'. Also parallel structure: 'doing activities... rather than going out'. Suggestion: use 'doing' or 'engaging in' to describe activities.

× When I was a child, I didn't go out for walks often because my parents always thought that I was too young to hang out along, so they never let me hang out and they were worried that I might get lost.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't go out for walks often because my parents always thought I was too young to hang out alone, so they never let me go out and were worried I might get lost.

Errors: 'hang out along' should be 'alone' (spelling/pronoun error), and repeated 'hang out' awkward; use 'go out'. Tense is consistent (past). Suggestion: use 'alone' for solitary, avoid repetition. Also 'thought I was' -> 'thought I was' is fine; can omit 'that'.

× In my personal view, walking in parks helps people really straight after a long work day and moreover it allows them to break the fresh air and additionally they can have a conversation with other people to improve their communication skill.

✓ In my view, walking in parks helps people relax after a long workday; moreover, it allows them to breathe fresh air and have conversations with others to improve their communication skills.

Multiple issues: 'helps people really straight' is incorrect — should be 'helps people relax' (wrong word choice). 'break the fresh air' should be 'breathe fresh air' (verb error). 'a conversation with other people' -> 'conversations with others' (plural) and 'communication skill' -> 'communication skills' (plural). Suggestion: use correct collocations (relax, breathe fresh air, have conversations) and pluralize countable nouns.

× If I had the opportunity I would like to take a long walk in Tao Dang Park because there are lots of beautiful buildings it are there and during walking I can see sizing this.

✓ If I had the opportunity, I would like to take a long walk in Tao Dang Park because there are lots of beautiful buildings there, and while walking I could admire them.

Problems: run-on and ungrammatical fragments. 'it are there' is ungrammatical; 'sizing this' makes no sense. Use 'there' for location and 'while walking I could admire them' for intended meaning. Suggestion: break into clear clauses, use appropriate pronouns and verbs ('admire').

× I haven't gone for a walk lately because I've been very busy with a headache schedule and studying for my exams.

✓ I haven't gone for a walk lately because I've been very busy with a hectic schedule and studying for my exams.

Word choice error: 'headache schedule' is incorrect; use 'hectic schedule'. Present perfect continuous 'I've been very busy' fits. Suggestion: learn common collocations ('hectic schedule', 'busy with studying').

× Instead I've been staying at home and doing some tests to relax and keep active.

✓ Instead, I've been staying at home and doing exercises to relax and keep active.

'Doing some tests' is incorrect in this context; likely meant 'exercises' or 'tests' (if academic). Using 'exercises' fits with 'relax and keep active'. Suggestion: choose appropriate noun for activity; 'do exercises' or 'take tests' depending on meaning.