走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法ミス、冗長さ、不自然な表現が目立ちます。①主語・動詞の一致と適切な動詞句（commute on foot / walk）を使って下さい。②情報を整理して1〜3文で簡潔に述べ、不要な重複を避けてください。③接続詞（for example, so, because）を用いて文をつなげ、流れを良くしてください。

範例: Yes, I walk quite often. I usually commute on foot from my house to the nearby station because it’s a short distance, and I also walk from the station to my workplace.

建議: 基本は答えられていますが、時制の一貫性や単数・複数、語彙の使い方に改善が必要です。①過去形を正しく使い、主語と動詞の一致に注意。②具体的な詳細（どんな公園、何をしていたか）を加えると説得力が増します。③接続語（because, and, so）で文をつなぎ自然にしてください。

範例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. There were many parks near my home, so my friends and I used to play on the swings and slides and explore the paths.

建議: 答えが曖昧で意味が不明瞭な部分があります。①自信を持って意見を述べ（I think...）具体的な理由を2つ程度挙げてください。②不要な語の繰り返しを避け、語彙を適切に使ってください（for health, to relax, to enjoy nature）。③論理のつながりに接続詞を使うと説得力が出ます。

範例: I think people like walking in parks because it’s good for their health and it helps them relax. Also, parks allow people to enjoy fresh air and feel closer to nature.

建議: 意図は伝わりますが、表現を自然にし、1つの流れのある文にまとめてください。①条件文の時制（If I had the chance）を正しく使う。②地名や場所の前置詞（on the Gold Coast / in Australia）に注意。③具体的な理由を付け加えるとより良いです。

範例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along a long coastline, such as the Gold Coast in Australia, because I enjoy walking on the beach and listening to the waves.

建議: 内容は伝わりにくく、文法や語順の誤りがあります。①過去形で一貫して述べ、不要なフレーズ（I went to go）を削除してください。②具体的な場所や状況（mountain, unused railway）を正確な表現で説明する。③接続詞で流れを作り、結果や感想を付け加えると良いです。

範例: Lately I went for a walk in the mountains where there is an old, unused railway. I walked along the track and enjoyed the quiet scenery.

× I usually commute by walk from my house to near my station.

✓ I usually commute by walking from my house to the station near my workplace.

The verb 'commute' followed by a mode using 'by' requires a gerund (verb+ing), e.g., 'by walking'. Also 'near my station' is clarified to 'the station near my workplace' for natural phrasing.

× Also I arrived at station near my workplace.

✓ Also I arrive at the station near my workplace.

Use present simple 'arrive' to match earlier statement about habitual action ('I usually commute'). Include the definite article 'the' before 'station' and keep tense consistent.

× By work.

✓ I do this to get to work.

'By work' is not a complete sentence and unclear. Replacing with a full clause clarifies purpose and completes sentence structure.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Use 'for a walk' rather than 'to have a walk' in natural English; question already uses past ('Did you'), so rest is fine.

× I often went outside to have a walk when I was a child.

✓ I often went outside for a walk when I was a child.

Match natural collocation 'for a walk'. Past tense 'went' is correct for childhood habits.

× There are a lot of park so I went to park with my friends.

✓ There were a lot of parks, so I went to the parks with my friends.

Use plural 'parks' and past tense 'were' to match 'when I was a child'; include articles and plural form when referring to parks generally.

× I play on many equipment.

✓ I played on a lot of equipment.

Past tense 'played' matches 'when I was a child'. 'Equipment' is uncountable, so use 'a lot of equipment' rather than 'many equipment'.

× I'm not sure that maybe people like to walk in parks for their health.

✓ I'm not sure, but maybe people like to walk in parks for their health.

Combine ideas with 'but' and remove redundant 'that'. This makes sentence flow naturally.

× We we can try to work easily.

✓ We can try to exercise more easily.

Remove duplicate 'we'. 'Try to work' is unclear; likely intended meaning is 'exercise' or 'walk to improve health'. Use 'exercise' or 'walk' for clarity and 'more easily' as adverb phrase.

× If I have a chance, I want to go Gold Coast at Australia.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to go to the Gold Coast in Australia.

Use the second conditional 'If I had..., I would...' for hypothetical situations. Include articles: 'the Gold Coast' and preposition 'in Australia'. 'Would like' is more polite and matches hypothetical mood.

× I would like to take a long walk. At Long Coastline, at the beach.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along the coastline at the beach.

Combine fragments into one coherent sentence and use 'along the coastline' for natural preposition. Keep conditional 'would like'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

The examiner's question 'lately' is acceptable but 'recently' is more natural in this context. No student correction needed here.

× I went to go.

✓ I went for a walk recently.

'I went to go' is ungrammatical. Replace with a clear past action 'I went for a walk recently.'

× Lately at the mountain there is unused railway.

✓ Recently, on the mountain there is an unused railway.

Use 'on the mountain' for location, include article 'an' before 'unused railway', and 'recently' fits better than 'lately' in this sentence.

× I can go throughout the railway.

✓ I can walk along the railway.

Use 'walk along' to express following the railway path. 'Go throughout the railway' is unnatural; 'walk along the railway' is clearer and idiomatic.