走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 注意时态和词汇选择，回答要更直接并避免重复。开头给出主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持。可以把“working”改为“walking/going for walks”，并把情感词汇表达得更自然。减少填充词（umm, uh）。

範例: Yes, I walk a lot, especially when I'm feeling stressed. For example, I often walk in the nearby park for 30–40 minutes because the fresh air and trees help me calm down and clear my mind.

建議: 注意过去年代要用过去时，句子要更简洁并用具体细节替换不恰当的词（如“chapter”）。提供一两句支持性细节并用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

範例: Yes, I did. When I was about 12, I often walked in the local park with my family and close friends. We would chat, play games and take photos together, which made those walks very enjoyable.

建議: 给出一个主题句然后用具体原因支持，注意词汇准确（work→walk; 'take photos with each other' 替换不自然部分）。尝试使用连接词（for example, because）使答案连贯，避免句子重复。

範例: I think people like walking in parks because of the scenery and fresh air. For example, parks are peaceful places where families can have picnics, children can fly kites, and people can take photos or relax, which improves their mood.

建議: 回答要更自然并直接。使用条件句时态要一致，细节更具体（比如路线、时间、谁一起）。避免重复和填充词，注意动词用法（work→walk/spend time）。

範例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk around my school campus because it has quiet paths and nice gardens. I would go with my best friends in the late afternoon so we could chat and enjoy the sunset together.

建議: 使用正确的过去时并简洁表达原因，避免重复和不准确形容词（terrible）。清楚说明时间、地点和原因，用一两句支持细节提高自然度。

範例: About a week ago I went for a walk around my school grounds because I was feeling down. The walk helped me relax and think things through, and I felt much better afterwards.

× Of course I love working when I was sad or terrible, I always worked for a long time in the park. Umm, it can help me to relax myself and come down.

✓ Of course. When I was sad or feeling terrible, I always went for a long walk in the park. It helped me relax and calm down.

句中原文时态和动词形式混乱：1) “I love working when I was sad or terrible” 同时使用现在时和过去时且用词不当，应改为过去时表述过去的习惯；2) “worked for a long time in the park” 用worked不合适，表示“散步”应用 go for a walk 或 take a long walk，且与过去时一致；3) “it can help me to relax myself and come down” 时态也需与前句一致且短语不自然，应改为“helped me relax and calm down”。建议：注意保持句子时态一致，选择合适动词短语，使用常见搭配（go for a walk, relax, calm down）。

× Actually, when I was a child, perhaps 12 years old, I always go outside to have a walk in my beautiful park with my family or best friends.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, perhaps around 12 years old, I always went outside to have a walk in my beautiful park with my family or best friends.

原句中主要时态是过去（when I was a child），但随后使用了现在时态“I always go”，应使用过去时“went”。建议：回忆过去的习惯时用过去时（used to / would / past simple）。

× We often get together to chapter, cheer ourselves and take photos with each other.

✓ We often got together to chat, cheer each other up and take photos together.

“chapter”是拼写错误，应为“chat”（聊天）；动词时态需与前文过去时一致改为“got together”；“cheer ourselves”搭配不自然，常用“cheer each other up”；“take photos with each other” 改为“take photos together”。建议：检查拼写并使用常见搭配（chat, cheer each other up, take photos together）。

× As far as I am concerned, people always like to work in parks because of the beauty in the parks and they always relax their mood and feel cheerful.

✓ As far as I am concerned, people always like to walk in parks because of the beauty of the parks, and they always relax and feel cheerful there.

原句用work in parks不合适，应为walk in parks（走路）；“beauty in the parks” 更自然为“beauty of the parks”；“relax their mood” 不地道，应直接用“relax”或“relax and feel cheerful”；句末加地点副词“there”。建议：注意动词语义和常用搭配，使用自然表达（walk, the beauty of）。

× When they are in parks, they take photos which is each other and fly kites or have picnics.

✓ When they are in parks, they take photos of each other, fly kites or have picnics.

“take photos which is each other” 语法错误且代词使用不当，应为“take photos of each other”；句子其余部分并列动作用逗号连接即可。建议：学习固定短语“take photos of sb.”，注意关系代词的使用场景。

× To be honest, I'd like to have a long walk, umm, in my beautiful school. Umm, my school is not so big and I will uh, work a lot with my best friends.

✓ To be honest, I'd like to take a long walk on my beautiful school campus. My school is not very big, and I would hang out a lot with my best friends.

原句“have a long walk”可接受但更常见为“take a long walk”或“walk around”；“in my beautiful school” 更自然为“on my school campus”或“around my school”；“I will ... work a lot with my best friends” 用will表将来不合适，意指习惯或愿望应使用“would”或“hang out”。建议：使用更自然的搭配（take a walk, school campus, hang out），并注意情态动词表达愿望或习惯。

× We chat with each other and we share our joy.

✓ We chatted with each other and shared our joy.

上下文为过去（talking about school memories），因此应使用过去时“chatted”/“shared”。建议：保持时态一致，描述过去经历用过去时。

× Maybe one week ago I go for a walk in my school and at that time I was so sad and terrible I thought I should have worked to relaxed myself.

✓ Maybe one week ago I went for a walk at my school, and at that time I was so sad and felt terrible. I thought I should have walked to relax myself.

原句时态和动词形式多处错误：1) “I go” 应为过去时 “I went”；2) “I was so sad and terrible” 用词错误，形容人应说“felt terrible”；3) “I thought I should have worked to relaxed myself” 语义和形式都错，想表达“我应该散步来放松”应为“I thought I should walk / I should have walked to relax myself”，若指过去未做则用“should have walked”；这里上下文表明实际去走了，改用“I went ... and I thought I should walk to relax myself” 或如果想表达遗憾用“should have walked”。建议：注意过去时形式、形容词搭配（feel terrible）和不定式/完成式的区分（should do vs. should have done）。