走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接且含要点，但有语法和表达不够自然的问题。建议改进语序并合并句子，使用连词使表达更流畅；用更准确的词汇（e.g. "a day", "to the library"）。控制在最多5句内并避免碎片句。可练习将短句合并为自然完整句。

範例: No, I don't walk a lot. I usually walk about two or three kilometres a day, mainly when I'm going to the library or a café.

建議: 内容不够清晰，语法和词汇错误（如“Rd. bikes”不明确），也缺少连词使句子流畅。建议用完整句说明频率并具体描述活动，使用连接词如“but”或“instead”。纠正过去时态形式和名词复数。

範例: No, I didn't walk often, but I often went outside with classmates or cousins to ride bikes around the neighborhood.

建議: 回答理由明确且有细节，但有填充词和重复。建议用一到两句概括主要原因，然后用连词补充具体细节，避免重复表达“in parks”。可以加入情感词或效果词提高自然度。

範例: People like walking in parks because of the greenery and fresh air, which helps them relax and feel refreshed. The trees and flowers also make the environment more pleasant for a peaceful stroll.

建議: 句子意思清楚但时态和语序可改进，且可以更具体描述原因或感受。建议使用虚拟语气（If I had the chance）并用连接词增加流畅度，补充一两个细节说明为何选择该地点。

範例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk with a friend in the riverside park in my city, because the river views and quiet paths would be very relaxing.

建議: 时态不一致（问的是过去，回答用现在时）。建议使用过去时并把两句合并为更自然的回答，加入短暂原因或频率信息以丰富内容。注意数字表达（two kilometres）。

範例: Recently I walked to the subway station from my home, which is about two kilometres away.

× I only walk two or three kilometres one day.

✓ I only walk two or three kilometres a day.

这里的时间短语应为固定搭配“a day”（每天），而不是“one day”（有时指某一天）。使用“a day”表示频率，修正为“I only walk two or three kilometres a day.” 更符合英语习惯。

× Like walk to library or cafe.

✓ For example, I walk to the library or a cafe.

原句是片段句子，缺少主语和完整谓语，也缺少冠词。改为完整句并加上冠词“the library”或“a cafe”，此处用“the library”或“a cafe”皆可；为通用性改为“the library or a cafe”。同时用“For example”使句子更连贯。

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

该句本身时态为一般过去时，构成正确，无需改动。提示：若有学生回答中的动词时态错误，应与过去时保持一致。

× No I didn't, but I often went outside with my classmate or cousins to Rd. bikes.

✓ No, I didn't, but I often went outside with my classmates or cousins to ride bikes.

“classmate”应使用复数“classmates”以匹配后文“cousins”（复数）。“Rd. bikes”明显是拼写/缩写错误，应为“ride bikes”。另外在“No, I didn't,”之后加逗号，句子更自然。

× Because in parks there are many trees and flowers and, uh, fresh air. People can take a breath and feel relaxed in parks.

✓ Because there are many trees, flowers, and fresh air in parks. People can take a deep breath and feel relaxed in parks.

把“in parks”放在句子末尾更自然；“take a breath”通常说“take a deep breath”更符合语境。调整词序使句子更符合英语表达。

× If I have a chance, I would like to take a long walk with my friend in the park in my city, which is along the river.

✓ If I had a chance, I would like to take a long walk with my friend in the park in my city, which is along the river.

该句使用与条件句不一致：虚拟与现在/将来条件通常用“If I had a chance”或“If I were given the chance”。原句“If I have a chance, I would”在语法上不匹配。将“If I have a chance”改为“If I had a chance”。

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

“lately”与现在完成时连用更自然，应使用现在完成时来询问最近的经历。“Did you go ... lately?” 不如 “Have you gone ... lately?” 更常用。

× Well, I walk to the subway station from my home. It's about 2 kilometres.

✓ Well, I walked to the subway station from my home. It's about 2 kilometres.

问句使用现在完成时/过去时间“Where did you go for a walk lately?”，回答应使用过去时“walked”或现在完成时。原回答用一般现在时“walk”与上下文时态不一致，应改为“walked”。