走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Raccourcissez et clarifiez votre réponse en utilisant une phrase principale claire, puis ajoutez un détail de soutien. Évitez les erreurs grammaticales et les phrases confuses ; utilisez des connecteurs simples comme "because" ou "so" pour expliquer la raison.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot, especially on university days because my campus is far from home. As a result, I usually walk several kilometres after getting off public transport to reach my classes.

建議: Répondez d'abord directement puis fournissez un détail précis au passé en utilisant le temps correct (past simple). Utilisez des connecteurs comme "when" ou "so" et corrigez les accords verbaux.

範例: Yes, I often went for walks in the park when I was a child. My mother used to take me there to play while she sat on a bench and drank coffee.

建議: Commencez par une idée claire, puis donnez des raisons spécifiques et naturelles. Évitez les formulations maladroites (par ex. "percentage of oxygen") et utilisez des mots simples et précis. Utilisez un connecteur comme "because" ou "for example" pour relier les idées.

範例: People enjoy walking in parks because they offer green spaces and fresh air. For example, being surrounded by trees and plants helps people relax and feel more energetic.

建議: Répondez d'abord à la question hypothétique correctement (use "I would"), puis donnez une raison précise et naturelle. Corrigez la grammaire (comparisons, articles) et évitez les formulations inexactes.

範例: I would like to take a long walk on the beach because it is a beautiful place. Also, walking on sand is more challenging than walking on pavement, so I would burn more calories.

建議: Répondez directement et utilisez le past simple pour raconter l'événement. Donnez quelques détails concrets (who, what you did) et évitez les hésitations ou phrases incomplètes.

範例: Recently, I went to Green Park with my friends. We walked around the whole park and I really enjoyed spending time outdoors with them.

× Yes, I do, especially on university days because the university is so far from my house and the transportation and doesn't like bring me directly to the universities to have to work like those kilometers to attend my destination.

✓ Yes, I do, especially on university days because the university is far from my house and public transportation does not take me directly to campus, so I have to walk several kilometers to get there.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure and word-choice problems: unnecessary words ('and', 'like', 'work'), incorrect use of 'transportation and doesn't like bring me', and plural/singular inconsistencies. Suggestions: simplify the sentence into clear clauses, use 'public transportation' and 'does not take me directly', replace 'to the universities' with 'to campus', and express distance as 'walk several kilometers'. Keep verb forms consistent and avoid extra filler words. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Is when I was a child my mom brings me to used to bring me to the park to play and to have long walk while she stayed on the bench and drink her coffee.

✓ When I was a child, my mom used to bring me to the park to play and to have long walks while she stayed on a bench and drank her coffee.

Errors: mixing present 'brings' with past 'when I was a child', incorrect placement of 'used to', missing plural 'walks', and incorrect verb tense 'drink' instead of past 'drank'. Suggestions: use 'used to bring' for habitual past actions, pluralize 'walks' for repeated events, and use past tense 'drank' for the mother's action. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I see that people like walking parks because it is a green area.

✓ I think people like walking in parks because they are green areas.

Problems: missing preposition 'in' after 'walking', incorrect singular 'it is' referring to plural 'parks'. Suggestions: use 'walking in parks' and match number with 'they are green areas' or 'a green area' if singular. Grammar problem type ID:11

× That means that it is full of clear weather with good percentage of oxygen which helps the body to relax and maximize his activity.

✓ This means the park has clean air with a higher oxygen level, which helps the body relax and maximize its activity.

Errors: 'it is full of clear weather' is unnatural; 'good percentage of oxygen' is awkward; pronoun 'his' incorrectly assumes male. Suggestions: use 'clean air' or 'higher oxygen level', and use neutral 'its' to refer to 'the body' or rephrase to 'helps people relax and be more active'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Take a walk on the beach if I had the chance because it is majestic place and often in the sand is burnt more calories than walking on the street, which is more important for me.

✓ I would take a walk on the beach if I had the chance because it is a beautiful place, and walking on sand burns more calories than walking on the street, which is important to me.

Problems: missing subject/conditional structure at start, article missing before 'majestic place', awkward passive-like phrasing 'in the sand is burnt more calories'. Suggestions: use conditional 'I would take', include article 'a beautiful/majestic place', and active construction 'walking on sand burns more calories'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Last time I went to. I actually went to the Green Park with my friends. We don't know, very like big tour around the park and I've enjoyed that.

✓ Last time I went, I actually went to Green Park with my friends. We took a long walk around the park and I enjoyed it.

Errors: fragment 'Last time I went to.' redundant 'I actually went to', incorrect 'We don't know, very like big tour' and tense 'I've enjoyed that' is awkward here. Suggestions: combine sentences, use 'took a long walk around the park' for clarity, and simple past 'I enjoyed it' for a completed past action. Grammar problem type ID:26