走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with word choice and sentence structure. Use 'walk' not 'work' when you mean walking. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences), start with a clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Vary vocabulary (e.g., 'relieve stress', 'clear my mind').

範例: Yes, I walk quite often to relieve stress. For example, yesterday I went for a short walk after feeling overwhelmed by my studies, and it helped clear my mind and made me feel calmer.

建議: Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Don’t repeat 'As a child' twice; use linking words (e.g., 'also', 'in addition') to connect ideas. Make details specific (name of park, activities) and correct verb forms ('helped', 'went to the park').

範例: Yes, I often walked outside as a child because fresh air and sunlight helped me feel happier. For example, I used to go to the local park with friends to play games and explore the ponds, which made the walks more fun.

建議: Use the correct verb ('walk' not 'work') and avoid repeating the same idea. Provide a clear topic sentence, then one or two concrete reasons with a linking word. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'greenery', 'tranquil', 'refreshing').

範例: People like walking in parks because the greenery and quiet atmosphere help them relax. For example, I enjoy walking among trees since the fresh air and birdsong make me feel refreshed and less anxious.

建議: Avoid repeating phrases and fix word choice ('walk' not 'work'). Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific detail about the park (location, features) and a linking word to explain why. Keep concise and varied in vocabulary.

範例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in a large city park with lakes and shaded paths because the combination of sunlight and greenery helps me unwind and feel more peaceful.

建議: Use accurate adjectives ('bleak' is negative; use 'vast' or 'deep') and correct tense/agreement. Give one clear reason and a specific sensory detail connected with a linking word. Keep it concise and natural.

範例: Lately I have enjoyed walking on the beach because the sight and sound of the deep blue ocean relax me. For instance, the rhythmic waves and salty breeze help me feel more energetic and focused afterward.

× Yes, I believe working a lot helps me reduce my stress and ease my anxiety and concerns.

✓ Yes, I believe walking a lot helps me reduce my stress and ease my anxiety and concerns.

The student used 'working' incorrectly; the examiner asked about walking. 'Working' is a present participle but does not match context. Use 'walking' (present participle used as noun/gerund) to convey the intended activity. Suggestion: match the gerund to the activity mentioned in the question.

× For example, yesterday I went for a walk a little bit because I was feeling overwhelmed for the study.

✓ For example, yesterday I went for a short walk because I was feeling overwhelmed by my studies.

'A little bit' is awkward when modifying 'went for a walk'; use 'a short walk'. Preposition 'for the study' is incorrect; use 'by my studies' to show cause. Also 'studies' (plural) is more natural. Keep past continuous 'was feeling' with past 'went'.

× After working, I feel very comfortable and relaxed.

✓ After walking, I feel very comfortable and relaxed.

Again 'working' is inconsistent with the topic; use 'walking' to match earlier mention. Present simple 'I feel' is fine for habitual response, so only change the verb.

× Yes, I did. As a child, I loved going out for a walk because the fresh air and bright sunlight always helps me reduce my stress and feel more confident.

✓ Yes, I did. As a child, I loved going out for walks because the fresh air and bright sunlight always helped me reduce my stress and feel more confident.

Subject is plural concept 'the fresh air and bright sunlight' but the main issue is tense: describing childhood requires past tense 'helped' not 'helps'. Also use plural 'walks' for repeated action. Ensure verb tense consistency in past narrative.

× As a child, I used to go to park with my friends which made the time more enjoyable.

✓ As a child, I used to go to the park with my friends, which made the time more enjoyable.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'park' when referring to a specific or usual place. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which made the time more enjoyable' for clarity.

× I think working in parks helps people reduce the stress or anxiety afterwards.

✓ I think walking in parks helps people reduce stress or anxiety afterwards.

'Working' is incorrect given the topic; replace with 'walking'. Also 'reduce the stress or anxiety' is more natural without 'the' when speaking generally: 'reduce stress or anxiety.' Keep present simple 'helps' for general truth.

× For example, personally, I love to work in parks because the fresh air and green nature always helps me feel more confident.

✓ For example, personally, I love to walk in parks because the fresh air and green surroundings always help me feel more confident.

Replace 'work' with 'walk' to match context. 'Green nature' is awkward; use 'green surroundings' or 'nature.' Subject 'the fresh air and green surroundings' is plural so verb should be 'help' not 'helps.' Keep present simple for habits.

× If I had the chance, I would like to go to a big park because I really love to work with fresh air and light sunlight and fresh nature because it always helps me ease stress and feel more comfortable and relaxed.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to go to a big park because I really love to walk in fresh air and sunlight and be close to nature, since it always helps me ease stress and feel more comfortable and relaxed.

Change 'work' to 'walk' to match question. 'Light sunlight' is redundant; use 'sunlight.' 'Fresh nature' is unnatural; use 'be close to nature.' Use 'helps' is acceptable because 'it' refers to the overall experience; keep sentence concise to avoid repetition. Maintain conditional structure.

× Recently I have loved going for walks on the beach because the sight and the sound of bleak blue ocean helps me reduce stress after working and there I usually feel more energetic and productive.

✓ Recently I have enjoyed going for walks on the beach because the sight and sound of the bright blue ocean help me reduce stress after work, and there I usually feel more energetic and productive.

'Have loved' is possible but 'have enjoyed' is more natural for ongoing preference. 'Bleak blue ocean' is contradictory and odd; use 'bright blue ocean' or simply 'the ocean.' Add 'the' before 'bright blue ocean.' 'Sight and sound' is compound subject so verb should be plural 'help.' 'After working' is awkward; use 'after work.' Keep present perfect 'have enjoyed' for recent continuing habit.