走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, ngắn gọn và mạch lạc hơn; tránh lặp từ và tiếng ồn (uh). Bổ sung câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng linking words để nối ý, và cung cấp 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ thời gian hoặc mục đích đi bộ). Chú ý ngữ pháp (most easiest -> easiest hoặc most easy) và động từ dạng đúng (doing -> do).

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually take a 30-minute walk every evening to relax and stay fit. Moreover, I often walk to nearby shops instead of driving, which helps me save money and get light exercise.

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp rồi mở rộng bằng các chi tiết cụ thể như ai, nơi, hoạt động. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp về thì (spend -> spent, to going -> to go) và cấu trúc lộn xộn; hoàn thiện ý kết (feeling of peaceful -> peacefulness). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu rõ ràng.

範例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. I usually went to the nearby park with my friends to play and explore nature. Those walks made me feel peaceful and helped me bond with my classmates.

建議: Cần trình bày rõ nguyên nhân với cấu trúc mạch lạc và dùng linking words (because, so, moreover). Tránh tiếng ồn và lỗi từ (are to, owns self). Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích (fresh air, scenery, safe paths) để minh họa. Giữ số câu dưới 5.

範例: People like walking in parks because it helps them reduce stress after work or school and enjoy fresh air. Moreover, parks offer pleasant scenery and safe paths for jogging or walking, which makes exercise more enjoyable.

建議: Trả lời cần rõ ràng (conditional form: if I had the chance). Nêu lý do cụ thể và tránh từ không rõ (spray?). Giải thích cảm giác bạn muốn (enthusiasm) bằng ví dụ cụ thể về cảnh hoặc hoạt động. Tránh câu không hoàn chỉnh (“I love the.”).

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk around the town square or the local stadium near my neighborhood. The open space and lively atmosphere make me feel energetic, and I enjoy watching people exercising there.

建議: Trả lời cần dùng thì quá khứ hoàn chỉnh (The last time I went...). Nêu thời điểm rõ ràng, địa điểm và hoạt động làm khi đi bộ. Loại bỏ tiếng ồn và lỗi cấu trúc (to work -> walking/exercising). Giữ câu súc tích và mạch lạc.

範例: The last time I went for a walk was last Saturday morning when I had the day off. I walked for about three hours around my neighborhood park, enjoying the cool air and taking photos of the scenery.

× Working is one of the most easiest kind of, uh, exercise.

✓ Working is one of the easiest kinds of exercise.

'most easiest' is redundant (double comparative). Use 'easiest' alone. 'kind of' should be plural 'kinds of' to agree with 'one of the...'. Use the gerund 'Working' correctly as a noun phrase; no additional changes needed.

× People can uh, easily participate and uh, uh, doing at home and the free time without any uh, specialized requirements or equipment.

✓ People can easily participate and do it at home and in their free time without any specialized requirements or equipment.

After 'can' use the base verb 'do' not the '-ing' form 'doing'. Use 'in their free time' for correct preposition and possessive pronoun. Remove fillers and duplicate words.

× Yes, definitely when I was younger, I always spend my free time, you know, to going outside with my friends and, uh, have a thing or work is very simple for me when, uh, a child, but I think it's give gave me the feeling of peaceful and.

✓ Yes, definitely when I was younger, I always spent my free time going outside with my friends. It was very simple for me as a child, and I think it gave me a feeling of peace.

Use past tense 'spent' and 'gave' to match 'when I was younger'. After 'always' with past reference use past simple. 'to going' is incorrect; use gerund 'going' without 'to' or use 'to go'. 'as a child' is the correct phrase. 'feeling of peaceful' is ungrammatical; use 'feeling of peace' or 'feeling peaceful'.

× In my opinion, I think that people are to, to work in the park because they want to, uh, reduce stress after working at, uh, working and just, and uh, a school.

✓ In my opinion, people go to the park because they want to reduce stress after work or school.

'are to, to work in the park' is incorrect; use 'go to the park'. 'reduce stress after working at, uh, working and just, and uh, a school' is confused—use 'after work or school'. Simplify sentence structure and remove filler words.

× Moreover, it owns self, uh, such the ways of exercise.

✓ Moreover, it offers a simple way to exercise.

'it owns self' is ungrammatical and unnatural. Use a verb like 'offers' and a clear noun phrase 'a simple way to exercise'. Avoid literal translations that produce incorrect pronoun usage.

× Uh, if I have a chance, I always choose a square or the stadium near my neighborhood in order to take a walk because uh, the spray and the, uh, stadium give me the feeling of enthusiasm and I love the. It's like the Arsenal.

✓ If I had the chance, I would choose the square or the stadium near my neighborhood to take a walk because the space and the stadium make me feel enthusiastic, and I like them. It's like the Arsenal.

Hypothetical conditional should use past subjunctive 'If I had' and conditional 'I would choose'. 'I always choose' conflicts with hypothetical; change to conditional. 'spray' likely intended 'space'. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'square and stadium'. Maintain tense consistency for conditional sentences.

× Uh, it's the last time I go for a walk is, uh, the is there last week when I have a day off is Saturday and morning and I spend about, uh, three hours in the early morning to work.

✓ The last time I went for a walk was last week; I had a day off on Saturday morning and I spent about three hours walking in the early morning.

Use past tense 'went', 'was', 'had', and 'spent' to refer to a past event. 'go for a walk' should be 'went for a walk'. 'to work' is incorrect here; use 'walking'. Rearrange for clear chronological order and remove fillers.